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By : foxkitsune300

From ANON - little-kit on November 27, 2015
such a wonderful story.
wonder if this will stay uncompleted for a long a time
i really wanna know what will happen to naru-chan.
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From ANON - yumenohime-sama on June 21, 2014
Gosh! It's interesting! So please continue this story okay?
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From AlienixX on February 27, 2012
A very confusing story, really..
One thing I disliked from the beginning is that it's VERY clear that Naruto's innocent. Where's the intrigue in it?

As I see it, Sasuke seems to be doing a good job as a Hokage, chosen by his people. But in the same time, he is hated by Naruto as he had "stolen" his dream.Sasuke loves Naruto and does everything he can to save him or buy the time. And Naruto despises him and clearly didn't forgive anything of his past mistakes..
A bunch of ordinary genin seems to know practically *all* of Konoha secrets..:)) Is it possible? Names of ANBUs? You kidding me, it's classified info, they aren't supposed to know so much and the enemies must have been very well aware of it. Naruto himself isn't supposed to know it. So HOW can they trust this info, then?..

Naruto's a "father figure' for his genins and was supposed, meant to be the next Hokage.. OK, but what a good nin gets caught and raped in the centre of an enemy village? Where had he been while they were torturing them? What about his extra-super-abilities? Like Sennin Regime? Kage Bunshin would have been enough to rescue everyone! Either this Naruto is VERY OOC, or he *simply doesn't deserve* the title of Hokage - the strongest nin of his or her village..
And how could Naruto just *let* Sasuke to steal his dream? Did he try or fight for it to the end?? He just blames everything on Sasuke.

Why wasn't Naruto healed immediately after the rape? Strange..

And what is all this twisted thrill about fucking or raping a Kyuubi-vessel? Overpowering him can be considered as a feat, yes, but the rest.. Naruto's body is just a body, he's not very strong in your story, so.. what's big deal in raping him? OK, I get it, you just like to victimize Naruto in any way possible.. a gangrape, undesirable pregnancy later, a stolen dream, injured children under his care, etc etc... but isn't it too much? You really believe Naruto would have just let it happen to himself?

I think in your strange story Sasuke and Naruto changed places, but not only as a Hokage and a nin. Naruto pities himself and passively blames his enemy instead of doing anything for his own sake.

One more thing: why do you describe characters using their eye color only? Zircon-obsidian-chocolate-teal-green.. plus their hair color. Isn't it a bit too.. primitive?
Good luck with the story. Hope next chapters will be better and clear up something for me.
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From smint45 on February 16, 2012
Oh wow this was amazing!!!! I totally loved how gaara saved him!!! i really hope they will be able to get to naruto in time!!! It is so great that he is free^^Thank you a lot for posting although you are so busy!!! Hope to see you again soon!!!
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From moodysavage on February 16, 2012
Was the attack fake in order to get Naruto? I think Gaara could kick Sasuke's azz over this lol
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From smint45 on February 11, 2012
Gaara?! I really hope so!!!! Oh I just love this story!!!! I can' wait for more!!!! Hope to see you again soon!!!!
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From moodysavage on February 10, 2012
yeah!!!!!!!! Gaara is there?!?
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From smint45 on February 08, 2012
I really hope they will find a way to save both the children and Naruto^^ It really wasn't their fault!!!! And I really hope that Naruto will warm up to Sasuke, cause the way they are at the moment there is never going to be some loving between them!!! I can't wait to hear more from you!!! See you again!!!
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From smint45 on February 07, 2012
This chappy finally brings some light into the situation ^^great!!! I can't wait for the next part!!!
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From FlorianFritz on February 06, 2012
a good story
i hope you dont intend to let sasuke have naruto right away
for taking his dream, for stealing his happiness as teenagers (all the time he was chasing sasuke to come back), for not standing in the cocil and saiing " if naruto is traitor so i am 100 times more" ( or something like this.) sasuke has to pay.
He must suffer.
He must beg
He should kneel before Naruto for all to see (Kazekage, Raikage, Mizukage Tsushikage, all Konoha...)( and say:" Im nothing in comparisotion to you but i beg, i beg, give me a choice." And naruto should walk away till sasuke gives the hokage title to his rightfull owner and sasuke declares " i am property of Naruto. he is my master i am his slave"
MUHAHA

Ok sorry, i got carried away a bit
but i quess my opinion on any Sasunaru is clear (possible in sex, but only if Sasuke is in the powerless and all power and rights are Narutos.)
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From pssnangel4 on February 06, 2012
I absolutely love this story so far. I cried in chapter 4, reading how everything played out. In the Center of the marketplace, I'm sure everyone had a turn at poor naruto. And the kids injured, bleeding, forced to watch there "father", teacher, friend, there everything give himself up for them. Forced to watch such a painful horrible thing to someone they truly love. Being unable to do anything at all. I just couldn't keep myself from crying and I love that about this story. I could picture it all and I could truly see and feel the love naruto had for them. To go threw such pain and horror for them, to become a traitor of the village he did everything for. Of the stupid people who hated him for no reason but he still protected.
This story brings out naruto's true heart, and his true strength, and I'm honestly love that about your story as well. I read about naruto's physical strength quite a bit, and he is truly strong and I love that but hes has heart, his strength outside would be nothing without the strength inside keeping him going, pushing him to be the best, but keeping him so pure and true. When you 1st read the story you didn't fall in love with naruto cause of how much he can lift or anything like that, you fell in love of his heart, his soul, his fight. His ability to over come any odd, his ability to take whatever life threw at him, to see the true horror of the real world, but no matter what he kept going.
Much like 2 quotes I love: �If you don't like the way the world is, then change it till you do. � Unknown.� �I alone can not change the world, but I can cast a stone across the waters to create many ripples � Mother Teresa� Naruto does both. He alone slowly changed the world by helping each person he can in his own way. He brings an gives hope to the ones who have lost them, he saves the lives of the ones who were dieing inside. He is a hero in more then 1 way. And with each person he helps each soul he saves, more an more people see threw his kind and wonderful eyes, and they begin to live there lives as best they can, and help who they can. They see the world differently and slowly they too are changing lives. That is the true spirit of naruto, I think. And I love how you showed and brought this out in the story, showed and reminded me why I truly love naruto.
Btw, on the topic of rape above, I thought I should explain something, cause I've read a lot of stories with this topic and a lot of people really miss the mark and this not only ruins the story for me that I tend to never go back to it, but angers me as well. People play it off as nothing. Rape is unlike anything in this world, and I hate when I read a story like [Heaven Sent] a story I'm interested in and is pretty good but then they start to write about rape and what they think it might be like, but they treat it as if its nothing.
Whether it's a stranger or a friend you've known for years, if its not consented sex, sex you tried to stop, if its rape, truly rape...its like being in your own personal horror movie. Your body feels dirty, your heart and mind are trapped in a reply of the event no matter how much you try to stop it, how much you try to scrub your body raw in hops to make it clean. You would do anything to forget.
Rape in something I would never wish on anyone...When a person is raped, part of you wishes to die, but part of you is already dead inside, and its your other half that is keeping you alive, the half that wishes to live, to survive. People just don't understand how serious rape really is, and they write about it but completely lack the true emotions and horror of it. When a person is raped its not like being forced to kiss someone. Or being betrayed by being pushed off a chair and hitting our nose. Then they apologies and its all good after they buy you something you really wanted. With rape, your body might heal but your heart, and your mind will not recover that easily. Only after therapy, true friendships, family an most of all time, will you ever begin to truly forget and recover. And if the person who rapped you truly regretted it and tried to fix it, then it would take a long, long time before you can truly trust and be near them ever again.
An if they didn't care but kept you with them no matter what...and you where forced to be near them, forced to live with them, you would slowly go insane from the fear. You would do anything to escape, anything would be better, living in the street, change your identity, and run to another country, anything to get away and hope to god they never find you again. It's not easy.
But I have to say after reading chapter 4, I did like the way you wrote about it in your story. The children's reactions, of what they were forced to see, the tears and agony in there eyes where perfect and I loved that. The reaction with sakura when she found out was also perfect. Naruto is stronger then anything I know, his spirit when protecting someone he loves is strong, and I can see him reacting like that in your story, but I did like that you didn't make him truly unmarked by the event. The way he was frighted, trying to fight him off with everything he had even though he was strapped down. That was real, an the way he flinched when sasuke touched him, it was perfect. So I absolutely love your story and I can't wait for more.
On an ending note I have to say, I love the way you portrayed Kakashi in this story. He's a bit cocky but at the same time, the way I see it, its not cocky if its true. What others may think as being overly cocky or having a big ego is nothing more then stating a fact if you can back it up. And in this story he can back it all up. Its nothing more then facts. He is better, stronger and smarter then iruka. He wouldn't have been a Anbu back then if he wasn't. Plus he left the Anbu of his own choosing, nothing more nothing less. On the topic of Iruka btw, I sadly don't enjoy this paring at all. I feel kakashi could do better. �xD Why not? He's hot, smart, mysterious, and he has a heart a true kind heart. Plus hes funny when he wants to be, silly even. What's not to love. So I hate that Iruka feels hes better, all it does is makes me want to bitch slap the dick but oh well. Funny thing, I always found Itachi to be the only only person good enough for kakashi. And I always see kakashi as the uki no matter what, even if he must be with iruka. xD (Who I find to be portrayed to sweet all the damn time.) He is a hot ass to have don't you think. (Wink, wink)
Anyway enough of all that sorry for such a long review even I'm surprised. @.@� lets put this to an end shall we, I need sleep after all its 5:40am and I gotta turn in papers in the morning for a job. So over all I love this story, and I can't wait to read more. Oh and I'm interested in your other story �All I have is betrayal�. Can't wait to see how this 1 turns out as well. :3
Kisses
P.s Was listening to If Today Was Your Last Day by Nickelback and I gotta say it sort of fits. It helped with the mood and made me tear up even more then I would have without.
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From Kativachan on February 06, 2012
Aww, poor Naruto. I'm glad his students finally told someone the truth! Now hopefully Sasuke will do something about it.
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From smint45 on February 05, 2012
Oh this is great!!!! I want more!!!!
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From moodysavage on February 05, 2012
*snickering* stroking his ego in public... such a double meaning to be found there lol. Thanks for putting that up so quickly for me!!! I like Iruka's slight thaw towards Kakashi... Kakashi is going to have to work for it lol. And you know... I kinda like that it's Sasuke stuck buried under mounds of paperwork since Naruto doesn't get to be Hogake like he dreamed. Serves Sasuke right that he has so much boring work to do. Gosh I really do feel evil that Kakashi and Sasuke are going to have to work to redeem themselves.

I like that Sasuke keeps wanting to be at home with Naruto too. Really fun to read this!!! :)
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From moodysavage on February 04, 2012
I still can't figure out whether Naruto and Sasuke were in a relationship... I say probably not or Sasuke would not have imprisoned Naruto and Naruto wouldn't be taking the blame and reacting like he hates Sasuke... but... could be wrong. And Iruka hates Kakashi but it seems like Kakashi likes Iruka?
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