Adult-FanFiction.org : Naruto

Reviews for Just One More Kiss

By : yolotengo

From Ishimorikuma on April 07, 2012
I'm just curious, but in chapter 5, does Kiba know Naruko is a male?
Report Review
From Madamdragon on January 02, 2012
Aw. So that's it? The end. Good fic I am glad they got a happily ever after. This was really good and they over came a lot together too. You should feel proud if I could I'd give you a ribbon for most heart warming happily ever after.
Report Review
From BlueDragon8787 on January 02, 2012
OH MY GOD!!!! That was a really good chapter. And boy was that a HOT SMEXY scene at the club and in the hot tub. They are just a couple of nymphos with each other. And that was a really sweet scene with their kids, it is really nice to see them so happy and settled.

Although I am sad to see this story end, I have really enjoyed this story so much that I can't wait for you next project. I hope you write something about Itachi next hearing how lonely he is in this chapter, I guess he deserves to be happy too even though he can be a cold bastard somethimes. Either a sequel to this story or a new one all together as long as it's not Itachi/Naruto pairing, I never really cared for the pairing.

Well I really loved this story and I am looking forward to any future works you may have.

JJ
Report Review
From ANON - Yummerset on December 24, 2011
I didn't mean to be attacking but i will admit i was when i went back and read my review, and like i said at the beginning of my post i dont think all trans people would agree with my assesment and I respect their opinions. Also I said at the end i dont think you are a bad person. And i should apologize since i only went to chapter three and should have mentioned that in my review but forgot, plus i never said i hated your fic and i said i didn't think you were bad writers. I was not aware of the whole switch thing, it makes sense now that you would post it as you did. i understand also that there is a ton of fluidity for a lot of trans people when it comes to their identities,i did something similar myself with my own pronouns, my concern was that you did not know that and were doing that thing that people (often unintentionally) do and switch-up trans peoples' pronouns (i realize this is a fictional character but i thought she was supposed to be a trans woman from your writing, not a cross-dresser as i was reading, which is where a lot of my confusions and problems with you story came up). Also i realize you have creative license to write what you like but i wanted to say that what i had read (specifically chapter three, i had no problems with it till then) was offensive to me. I also should have been more specific when addressing the certain things that i found to be transphobic, I never said you were transphobic, i said your story was, and more specifically ch. 3 since thats where i stopped reading. I dont think it was "cruel" of me to say it was transphobic, but i will conceed that my strong response was not warranted for what you wrote. That being said i still feel that some of the things you wrote were problematic, though not as much so with the context of knowing it was supposed to be just a cross-dressing fic orginially. Again sorry i jumped at you without taking some time to read for more context and choose better language.
Report Review
From ANON - angelj232000 on December 23, 2011
Sorry I did not write a review for the last chapter but after I read it I was just to shocked to review, I had no words that could describe what I was feeling at the end. If you had not commended on my last review with "I will miss it too" the ending would have scared me even more, but you comment reassured me that all would work out thanks. I was just waiting for Sakura to put that. Every chapter I was expecting her to show up and try to hurt them, she was very stalker-ish. I am glad that they are both okay. i have one small complaint about this chapter and that is that you stated Sasuke's family was on the way then we never see them or hear their take on what happened. I want to know what they thought, other wise great chapter. I am so glad that you posted this fic they way you did. I would not have read it if the M/M tag was not there. I went back and read that review that sparked the bit at the beginning of this chapter. I am glad that you will still be posting and not changing anything. This is the longest comment I have ever written. I love this story so much. For the love of god don't stop posting and writing this fic until it is totally done. I am so happy when ever I see that it is updated. Please keep up the AWESOME work both of you. Now I have to give 2 HUGS cause there are 2 of you, that now goes for all the past reviews now that I know that there are 2 of you.
Report Review
From MisatosPenPen on December 23, 2011
Everyone and everything in my life right now is a Skyrim orphan, but I've snuck online to read this.

Woohoo! The wicked witch is dead!

The lastest chapter: Gaaaah!!! If you had left Naruko completely blind, I'd track you down and smack you. Yeah, I don't like the complete trans thing, but you've already hooked me.
Report Review
From BlueDragon8787 on December 22, 2011
That was a really good chapter. I am just glad they are ok, I mean that is a major bummer that Naruko is blind in one eye but atleast it is just that one eye and not both. The thought did occur to me that Sakura would do something like that but I thought she would shoot her at their wedding or something but I didn't even think that she would kill herself afterwards.

I really love this chapter and this story and I can't wait for the next chapter to come up.

JJ
Report Review
From Madamdragon on December 22, 2011
I am glad neither one of them died. But I agree with you two, I think that was the best way for Sakura to die. It seems like she really WOULD kill herself if anything ever did happen to Sasuke. Talk about not walking away with dignity. Sad really but I guess she got what she deserved. Good update by the way. Hope to see more soon please.
Report Review
From ANON - angelj232000 on December 22, 2011
Sorry I did not write a review for the last chapter but after I read it I was just to shocked to review, I had no words that could describe whar I was feeling at the end. If you had not commended on my last review with "I will miss it too" the ending would have scared me even more, but you comment reassured me that all would work out thanks. I was just waiting for Sakura to put that. Every chapter I was expecting her to show up and try to hurt them, she was very stalker-ish. I am glad that they are both okay. i have one small complaint about this chapter and that is that you stated Sasuke's family was on the way then we never see them or hear their take on what happened. I want to know what they thought, other wise great chapter. I am so glad that you posted this fic they way you did. I would not have read it if the M/M tag was not there. I went back and read that review that sparked the bit at the beginning of this chapter. I am glad that you will still be posting and not changing anything. This is the longest comment I have ever written. I love this story so much. For the love of god don't stop posting and writing this fic until it is totally done. I am so happy when ever I see that it is updated. Please keep up the AWESOME work both of you. Now I have to give 2 HUGS cause there are 2 of you, that now goes for all the past reviews now that I know that there are 2 of you.
Report Review
From ANON - Yummerset on December 21, 2011
I am a transsexual and I found your story to be extremely transphobic and offensive. Not all trans people may agree with me on this, thats fine, i respect their opinions but i believe that what you have written here promotes false stereotypes and ideas of trans people and is hurtful to our community. Firstly, naruko is a trans woman, yet you posted this fic as homo rather than het. You have Naruko on hormones and have surgery yet you still continue to call her "him" WTF? I know its your story but really? Didn't you think you might be, oh i dont know, really offending the people you are writing about? Also, what was with Naruko having to apologize for "lying" to sasuke in the third chapter? When did she lie? He just assumed she wasn't trans. It's hard when you are having a hook-up to be like "btw i'm trans" especially if it isn't necessary, which it wasn't when they first hooked-up, yeha i know that had that whole "connection" thing but she didn't know for sure if it was going to go anywhere. Yes, i will conceed that a partner has the right to know if you are trans, but naruko even makes the point that he wouldn't have given her a chance most likely if he knew that right off the bat. And its kinda need-to-know basis info, and like i said he didn't need-to-know when they had first met. Your portrayal of her as a liar promotes the stereotype of the deceptive transsexual, that we are trying to trick poor non-trans people into dating us. Its a crappy hurtful stereotype and you shouldn't promote it. Also, you dont seem to actually KNOW anything about trans people. You have naruko just going and getting hormones and surgery and crap like that when, as Bree said earlier, she doesn't even have a coherent grasp of her own gender identity. Do you know what trans people ahve to go through in order to get hormones and surgery. Sure she could have gotten them through the black market but surgery? All the money in the world wont buy you the letter to get surgery without at least SOME therapy. And gettin that letter means having a coherent and certain idea of your gender. Also if someone is not ready to make the switch they know within the first few weeks of being on hormones, they change you just that much. The only people who i've heard of as having spent long amounts of time on hormones and then went off ended up being gender queer or bi-gendered or something. I've only heard of a few people who went on hormones, spent a while on thme, and then went back to being either male or female. My point is they dont just hand that shit out like candy at halloween. You dont even know the difference between cross-dresser and transsexual? Why write about people you dont know shit about and could potentially be offending? Go educate yourself, check out questioningtransphobia.com or something and read about us before writing about us next time. I would like it alot of you took this story down or at least fix your trasnphobic language by either reposting it as het, making naruko a cross-dresser and not a trans-woman if youre gonna post it as slash, and stop using cross-dresser and transsexual interchangeably. I dont think you are a bad writer or a bad person but you have really written some offensive stuff here and i would really appreciate it if you would take the time to fix it. I know its your story and you have creative license to write whatever you like but this is just a plea for you to be aware of and consider the feelings of actual trans people. Thanks for your time.
Thanks for your time, excuse my copious amounts of typos.
Yummerset
Report Review
From ANON - sparksfly on December 18, 2011
Oh my God this chapter broke my heart :(
Report Review
From ANON - G on December 18, 2011
Well... I pretty much agree with Stalker-san. The whole thing with Sakura was really too much. She came across like an entitled, spoiled brat before, not gun-toting crazy. Just felt OOC for her to go this far. (And yeah, the whole time during the confrontation, I kept waiting for Kiba to show up, especially after shots were fired. The bar can't be so big he couldn't have run there in time to prevent Naruko from being stabbed. What happened, did he freeze up?)

I think it would have worked better for me if they'd gotten critically injured in a more ordinary way, like if someone tried a closing-time robbery of the bar, or if they'd gotten mugged in the parking lot. (Didn't Naruko mention that most of the clubs are bad parts of town? Seems like crime is an issue for this universe.) If you wanted to kill off Sakura, you could have had her there and arguing with Sasuke and Naruko when the robbery/mugging/etc. happened. I could even see her going so far as to beg the robber/mugger/etc. not to shoot her and to shoot Naruko instead.
Report Review
From Bluerose92 on December 18, 2011
oh my.
well.
you got rid of the bitch.
but did u really have to end it there?
like that?
ugh!
update soon.
you evil, evil author.

~Riku~
Report Review
From Bluerose92 on December 18, 2011
omg.
for the dj for the nightclub
you should make it Gaara.
lol.
please!!!!!
and make Sai his lover.
yea!

~Riku~
Report Review
From ANON - Stalker-san on December 17, 2011
Wtf just happened? I thought Sakura had more humiliation lined up for her and then you lamely killed her off. Now Naruko might be dead and Sasuke sure isn't feeling too great. Ugh! Not Only that but I think Kiba should have done things a bit sooner, like tackle the bitch with a chair.
Report Review