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By : sadfascist
  • From ANON - Jen on July 26, 2012
    Awesome! A new chapter of this! With how injured Sasuke is, I don't think he could have bandaged their wounds AND carried Naruto all the way to the Uchiha Castle all by himself. (A friend of mine got 5 broken ribs from a car accident 4 months ago and she's still in some pain from it. In the beginning, because of the broken ribs, just being upright hurt.) A question Naruto should be asking himself is how many people in Sasuke's organization know about the two of them? (The more people know, the greater chances it has of getting back to Itachi.) And among those who do know, what do they think about it? Was Sasuke goaded into the relationship, or did he do it of his own free will?

    Can't wait to hear Sasuke's story about Itachi's past! :)
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  • From ANON - G on July 25, 2012
    Sasuke is singing again, and the same song that he did before... Who is the song about? Someone in the past? Or is it talking about Naruto and Sasuke? I like that Sasuke can sing. :) It's something for Naruto to like about him, besides just the sex. :D
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  • From ANON - Jen on July 12, 2012
    "Heart's end" in more ways than one, I think. Sasuke's "heart's end" was to see Itachi dead, but what about Naruto's shock at the end? In one sense, it's the death of Sasuke and Naruto's burgeoning relationship since Naruto won't be able to look at Sasuke the same again (he's no longer the silly little whore he'd thought he was this whole time), but it also represents an end to Naruto's previous relationship with Itachi. This whole time, Naruto thought he was Itachi's trust right hand man, but it turns out Itachi had been keeping A LOT of secrets from him. Not only the fact that he could do magic, but also that he knew the true identity of the Demon Fox this whole time.

    Why keep some of his knowledge about the Demon Fox a secret? Was he intentionally sending Naruto out on a fool's errand, one he knew he'd never complete? (Because of Sasuke's abilities, Itachi could have assumed Naruto wouldn't be able to kill him.) Or one he hoped he'd never complete? (Maybe getting Sasuke to kill off some of the local nobility benefits Itachi in some way?)

    Either way, Naruto has had his worldview shattered, about both Sasuke and Itachi. So now, which of them will he choose to trust after this? Naruto's knee-jerk reaction will probably be Itachi (simply because that's what he's been conditioned to do), but Sasuke is offering the much, much better deal. (And Sasuke's affections for Naruto appeared to be genuine. Hurrah!)

    Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
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  • From ANON - Jen on July 06, 2012
    I'm not a guy, but I was crossing my legs in sympathy during the bj scene. Nyuka is a big-time masochist if he found pleasure in getting cut up by the teeth of a shark girl. So I guess orgies are just another way to pass the time in that society. Jeeze. Besides Naruto (who is a slave, and therefore technically doesn't count), none of the people Itachi associates with are worthy of saving. They've all become corrupt and decadent. Or is that wrong? Are there people in Itachi's social circle who are decent leaders, and who the Demon Fox doesn't plan on killing? However, if what the Demon Fox wants is a wholesale purge of the entire ruling class, attacking them while they're all gathered together, and with their pants literally down, is a good way of going about it.

    Next chapter should be very exciting! Another confrontation between Naruto and the Demon Fox seems inevitable, but how will Sasuke and Itachi factor into it? Assuming Sasuke's presence at Birthright Keep is a coincidence (and he didn't follow Naruto because he's working with the Demon Fox), then Naruto's loyalty might get tested if Sasuke isn't able to escape the attack and Naruto has to protect him.

    Can't wait to read the next chapter! :)
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  • From ANON - G on December 06, 2011
    "Did I wake you?" Sasuke whispered.

    "I don't know," Naruto gasped. "I… I think you should try again. Try… try again all night."

    Atta boy, Naruto! :D
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  • From moonprincess90 on December 05, 2011
    Woot a new chapter! This fic is so Great!
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  • From ANON - Jen on November 23, 2011
    Oh geez, Sasuke is so cute and seems so sincere too. I really, really hope he's telling Naruto the truth about having seen the the Kitsune get away and isn't leading him into a trap. It seems like it's too much of a coincidence that the Kitsune, Itachi, and Sasuke all have "jade" eyes. That's a pretty specific shade of green. Mysteries, mysteries. Well, it's what keeps me reading. That and the interesting connection Sasuke and Naruto seem to have. Naruto has been shockingly disdainful of Sasuke both times they met (Naruto telling him no one cares if Sasuke lives or dies was just cruel), and yet Naruto humors Sasuke all the same and doesn't outright reject him. You've got to wonder about the kind of life Sasuke has led that Naruto's meaner remarks don't seem to bother him too much. He's probably heard much worse than anything Naruto has ever said to him. Their little make-out session on the floor was hot. I know they're young teenagers, but they both got aroused so quickly. It makes me think that the experience of wanting someone just because was new to the both of them. Naruto, at least, has only ever had sex in his capacity as a slave, and maybe Sasuke hasn't had too many (perhaps not any) sexual experiences outside of work either. Looking forward to what happens when they meet next!
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  • From ANON - Akira on November 17, 2011
    wow!!! oh! oh! do update soon!
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  • From ANON - Akira on November 17, 2011
    Back from my trip and readi to continue with your stoy ^^ i will be happy to discover why Sasuke's eyes, has you say. ^^

    Thanks
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  • From ANON - G on November 17, 2011
    Damn. Sasuke doesn't waste any time. Good for you, Sasuke baby! He's shameless and sweet. I like him. And Naruto does too, even if it freaks him out. Naruto HAS to have seen the difference between what he and Sasuke did and pretty much everything he's ever done with Itachi, right? (Or even if he doesn't right now, getting kissed like THAT a few more times ought to convince him.) I like how when they were making out, you really couldn't tell which one would be top and bottom. Can't wait to see what happens the next time they meet. ;)
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  • From SmilesforSai on October 09, 2011
    This is one hell of a mindfuck.

    But I love it (:
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  • From daughterofvirgo on September 06, 2011
    I love it. I've never read anything as imaginative as this story. Please, update soon.
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  • From LilyEverlasting on September 04, 2011
    Okay, I officially love this story. I really enjoyed how you wrote this chapter. It's well done, and I read it a bit fast because I wanted to read it, but I didn't catch any errors the first read-through. Okay, so, wow, Naruto is as young as I thought... At first the character you made for Sasuke threw me off guard, I guess because in all fanfics he is done as cold, aloof, etc. It's interesting to see a different characterization of him.

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  • From ANON - Jen on September 04, 2011
    Sorry! I came back to add: I read the other reviews and your response, but I'm still a little confused on how we're meant to see these characters in relation to the canon characters. AUs take the characters as we know them but drop them in another setting, so their looks and personalities stay the same. However, this is canon universe, not AU, and these characters look and act differently from the ones we know. Does that mean these are totally original characters and NOT the same people from the manga? It's just the characters having the same names makes you expect them to be the same, but they actually seem not to be the same. (Are our canon characters reincarnations of the people in this story...?)

    Sorry for all the questions. I really like this fic and think it's a fresh take on the manga source material. I'm just trying to understand the context of the fic is all.
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  • From ANON - Akira on September 03, 2011
    hmm... how can Sasuke have jade color eyes? if this the same Sasuke has Sasuke Uchiha? maybe i missread?
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