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Reviews for Unfaithful

By : AngelTalion
  • From bloodshound on July 31, 2011
    errg. the sooner Sas ditches the cow, the sooner he can have his Naru pet... though maybe he should find another chicka who knows the deal and won't meddle as long as she gets moneys... which kinda goes compeletely against Sas wish for a proper family. Still, I think Naru deserves to be more than stress relief.
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  • From onidra on July 31, 2011
    Love your story can't wait for you to continue.
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  • From JaydenNara on July 31, 2011
    That was hot. Naruto wanting Sasuke, and using the gift (I'm glad you took my idea) Now I'm going to harass you everyday until you write more.

    Sakura is a terrible mother, you've made me dislike this representation of her greatly, good job. Putting her wants and desires above that of her kids. She makes me sick. Sasuke is the perfect daddy though, love him in his role, hope he dumps her ass in the poor house. please tell me sakura signed a prenup so she gets nothing. Good on Naruto for taking a stand, a very cowardly stand, but a stand none the less.

    Your writing is getting better and better, I'm impressed. Well, I've rambled long enough, write more, or else... :p
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  • From randrinawilson on July 31, 2011
    Naruto is trying so hard to do the right thing here and its just killing him. Sasuke isnt really trying to do the right thing at all but he is in love. He saw that naruto avoiding him started after Sakura visited him at work so if he can put that together he has to know that Naruto doesnt like viewing himself as the one thats breaking up a marriage. The right thing here would be for Sasuke to actually file for divorce. He doesnt want to be married to Sakura anyway. Sakura doesnt even really want Sasuke, she wants what Sasuke represents. Trying to get naruto back would require that he actually do the right thing.

    Hmmm......wonder what sakura is up to when she isnt at home. She was so blatant about sasuke being there but now that he is she isnt even at home herself
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  • From myrandomnesslife on July 01, 2011
    This story is great, I wonder what naruto will do, will he end his relationship with sasuke? or will sasuke finally realize that he loves naruto and wants to be with and end it with sakura? only time will tell lol I cant wait for the next chapter :)
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  • From ANON - Alex on June 30, 2011
    i really like this fic hun im seeing alotta drama in the future nd i love me some drama lol so good luck!
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  • From DenyingFatex on June 28, 2011
    Must have more! DD: I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. Eh, it seems that Sakura is starting to figue out what her husband is doing, ne? I feel a fight coming on. Or a devorice? I dunno. My blood is boiling with excitement! Keep it up. :DD
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  • From abigailpa on June 28, 2011
    Please keep writing this I love your stories esp this one. Happy to see sakura in that role.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 27, 2011
    Great chapter! Looking forward to reading Sasukes reaction when Naruto puts a stop to the affair.
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  • From ANON - Analei on June 26, 2011
    I tend to not review stories, however, there is something rather compelling here. Something real.

    The pushy, overpriced housewife, the prodigal son, and poor lonely Naruto.

    Sadly, I hope Sakura gets hit by a car, Naruto marries Sasuke, and they live happily ever after.

    HOWEVER, seeing as it's highly unlikely, I do hope for a happy ending in between all the delicious details. Beautiful sex scenes too with the bonus kink!
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  • From Crosetree on June 26, 2011
    so far i really like this story so far, but i can't help but feel like the characters lack some depth. is there something more to the horny boss who doesn't feel guilty for cheating on his wife with his secretary? does the snobby stay at home "mom" have some redeeming qualities or is she just interested in money and social status?

    anywho, just some thoughts. hope you continue this and update soon. i'm really curious as to where this is going =)
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  • From ANON - Darsha on June 26, 2011
    ohhh poor naruto uhhhh shes such a b i t c h go get bent somewhere she erks my soul hang in there naruto i know before things gets better the shit has to hit the fan be strong
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  • From missbri88 on June 26, 2011
    I like the look of the story's direction. Poor Naru and nasty attitude Sakura! Grrr!
    I'm always looking forward to more.
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  • From ANON - Jen on June 26, 2011
    The story is going well, but I feel like I need to know more about the characters apart from the affair in order to understand them better. And of course to understand why they are perfect for each other and want to see them end up together. It's pretty quick in the story for the relationship to already be threatened. Before that part of the plot gets going, I want to really be able to understand what they both would lose if they didn't have this (besides good sex with a nice person). Since I don't know too much about them, both as people, and how they work together as a couple (apart from the sex), as the reader, I don't have quite the emotional investment in seeing these two tough out a challenge as I would if I knew them better.

    One place you might consider expanding on the characters, for example, is in their home lives. What kind of father is Sasuke? Sakura doesn't sound like a very good mother, but is Sasuke picking up the slack as a father? (He sounds like he's at least concerned about the children?) Just how much is Sasuke's home life being affected by his relationship with Naruto? Does Sasuke feel bad about that? (Should he feel bad about that?) What is it about Naruto that makes Sasuke feel comfortable enough to let him into his world the way that he has? Objectively speaking, the one most at risk in this situation is Sasuke, not Naruto. (If things end up going badly, Naruto could rebuild his life after this. With the amount of control both Sakura and his parents have over him, Sasuke probably couldn't.) Or is it not just Naruto, but other circumstances in his life which have changed enough that he'd consider an affair now, whereas he might not have done so earlier? (With his looks and money, I'm sure Sasuke has gotten other offers in the past.)

    On Naruto's end, I thought it was interesting that he is supposed to be pretty tough in reality, but he turns shy around Sasuke. However, instead of hearing about it secondhand through the narration, I'd like to see it in actuality through Naruto's actions. What is Naruto like with his friends and coworkers? Because of guilt over the affair, Naruto got bullied by Sakura. He was also bullied by his ex(?) that night when Sasuke found him at the cafe. So far, we haven't gotten a chance to see Naruto at his confident best. I think it would be cool to see that, see him running the office like a pro, and see why, from an objective standpoint, he finds Sasuke interesting.

    Anyway, those were just a few questions for you to chew on. Obviously, feel free to ignore. :)
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  • From JaydenNara on June 26, 2011
    damn she's a bitch. can't wait for more though. make sure naruto fights for sasuke though, dont let him just give up, that's not his way.
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