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Reviews for Glitter and Blood

By : AvangalineHazel

From ANON - Mija on December 29, 2011
OMG this is absolutly stunning, I love the way you have described this, the way you have the characters interacting and of course my favorite couple Sasuke Naruto lol, the funny thing is I never come to the AU area of Naruto, in fact I had NO idea there was another area to Naruto other the the one I was going to, it wasn't till a link to a story bought me here and I found this story, its a wonderful story and I love the detail, love the way it is progressing and I cant wait for more, thank you for the wonderful read, but just the thought of Naruto saying Kabutu is nice still boggles the mind lol, again thanks for the great read, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From moonprincess90 on November 14, 2011
Nice story so far. I'm looking forward to seeing the other clubs and there styles. I wonder who the murder will be? keep up the great work. ^_^
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From GudenMulle on November 06, 2011
Very interesting. I like the way you write Sasuke and Kakashi, I'm curious to see how this will progress, though I'm having a daunting feeling that Izumo wont be with us for a long time. I'm looking forward to reading the descriptions of the other clubs. I wonder if Gaara and Kankuro are dancers as well? It did say that Temari was running it to support them, but?
There are some typos/grammatical mistakes, it is a bit distracting, but besides that it is well-written. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
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From cynaga on November 06, 2011
GREAT story! Pulled me right in. I'm excited to read more. :D
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From MisatosPenPen on November 06, 2011
I'm into this story! Please update soon. And that image of Naruto . . . I started salivating! And I'm not even into the blond!
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From ANON - Alexandria on June 27, 2011
Very well-written story. It was enjoyable for me to read. I would be made quite happy if you continued it. My only critique is to maybe work a bit more on the structure of your dialogue. Other than that, I have no complaints.
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From Cinder1013 on April 29, 2011
I like this. I hope you continue.

There have been several serial killers in LA and the surrounding area, like Charles Manson, and also some famous unsolved murders like The Black Dahlia. The Chief of Police would be the captain and that's a position you're promoted to, although it's not without politics. There's also a sherriff. The Captain would be in charge of the LAPD, while the sherriff, who is elected to that position, would be in charge of the county.
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From ANON - Cocoa on April 28, 2011
Oh my gosh! This story is so awesome! I need more! *starts shouting* More I tell you! *whispers* More!(I fear I overuse the exclamation point...)

In America we do call the head of police the chief of police(chief for short) super intendent is like a school principle's boss or somthing like that.
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From ANON - Toni on April 27, 2011
I find it interesting. one question: What is (are) the pairing(s)?
I look forward to see where this goes :)
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From ANON - BloodsuckingmonsterFAM on April 26, 2011
WOW, yes yes yes, you should SO continue this!!!! You've got my attention 150% and- OH LOOK, A FOX!!! *glomps fox to ground*

(Lol, no, really, you should continue, I'm lovin' how it's playin' out!!!)

(P.S. Could Naruto be the killer?? Just thought I'd beg for killer cuteness... *blush* )
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From ANON - Jen on April 25, 2011
GAH. I wish you could edit reviews. One thing I meant to add: The FBI doesn't actually take over investigations. They work in conjunction with other law enforcement agencies sharing info/resources, etc. Strictly speaking, Kakashi and Sasuke probably should have checked in with the local police first before going to speak with Tsunade. Have another link: http://www.fbi.gov/stats-services/research/

OK, going away now, I promise. ^_^;
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From ANON - Jen on April 25, 2011
You've already gotten a lot of good info from on the people on the police/FBI side of things, so all I'll add is that the FBI only gets involved in cases that cross state lines, otherwise it's a local matter and they have no jurisdiction unless their help is specifically requested. (The CIA is for international matters and wouldn't get involved at all.) I'm a native to this side of the country, so let me add in what I know about LA serial killers, in case it's of help to you:

There have actually been a couple of infamous serial killers that used the LA area as their hunting grounds, but the best known one is Richard Ramirez, AKA "The Night Stalker." If you have any curiosity on it, his wikipedia page is here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Richard_Ramirez

The case was pretty sensationalistic because Ramirez made comments about satanism (leading people to worry that he was a satanist) and he was apparently obsessed with the band AC/DC, especially their song "Night Prowler"--I think it was something of an inspiration for his killings. In addition, the killings themselves were terribly gruesome.

Another infamous one was the "Westside Rapist":

http://www.gazettenet.com/2011/04/02/la-serial-killer-gets-life-term

And a recently identified (and captured!) serial killer is the "Grim Sleeper":

http://www.thedailybeast.com/blogs-and-stories/2010-11-12/a-serial-killer-on-the-loose-in-la/
http://articles.cnn.com/2010-07-07/justice/grim.sleeper.arrest_1_lonnie-david-franklin-serial-killer-case-family-members?_s=PM:CRIME

The "Grim Sleeper" case is interesting for lots of reasons (can you tell how much I like "True Crime" stuff?!) It took both DNA for them to realize there was a serial killer in the first place (the guy would apparently wait years and years in between kills), but they also used DNA in a really cool way to catch the guy.

So! Hope that was helpful to you. :)

As for the story, obviously, it's the sort of thing I like. Although you said you don't know much about the US/LA, I didn't get the impression that you had no clue what you were talking about as I read the chapter, so you did a good job with creating the kind of seedy environment Kakashi and Sasuke would be investigating (though seedy bars and clubs are a pretty universal thing no matter where you live, I'd guess!) I like the characters in this. A serious Sasuke who yearns for a quiet life out in nature is a nice change of pace from the normal ultra-ambitious Sasuke who usually detests small towns. It's also a nice change of pace that Kakashi currently has a thing with Ibiki instead of the usual Iruka (although he might be attracted to Iruka). Now I'm waiting to see if Naruto will show up and what role he'll be playing. I could see him as a prostitute, but I could also see him as one of the local investigating police officers (that Kakashi & Sasuke assume bungled the job). ^_^
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From Dorkchic on April 25, 2011
Each precinct has is own captain and the Chief of Police is someone who is appointed by the mayor of the city and is over all of the various precincts. In a city as large as Los Angeles there is definitely the possiblity of a serial killer. Not that the size of the town really matters because serial killers have been found in cities of all sizes and from a variety of backgrounds. As for L.A. itself... it is not just one city anymore. The urban sprawl (when a city spreads beyond its borders) has taken over many of the smaller areas around it so people say where in L.A. do you live and they could give several answers.
Please do continue. I am curious to see where it leads.
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From ANON - Carousel on April 25, 2011
This is definitely worth continuing. The plot is really creative and unique.I like how you named the different "establishments" according to villages. XD So who is getting paired with who? Sasuke and Naruto? Kakashi and Naruto? Or will it just be one big orgy? XD I really hope you add more chapters.
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From ANON - kanazerosukenaru on April 25, 2011
sorry to lazy to log in, but

yes yes and hell yes....you should continue this little gem!!!!!

can i ask if this will be sasunaru kakairu? or is it kakasasu? i don't read kakasasu, but this is a good story line and i really would like to continue reading about the murders and all that it sounds like a good beginning, even if i have to put up with kakasasu.

I just can't imagine the father figure kakashi trying to get it on with his student at all..so that is why i don't read any kakasasu stories. so i'm kind of crossing my fingers hoping this is a sasunaru. thanks for sharing your story with us.
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