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By : Spiraling
  • From runoutofaname on September 29, 2011
    Take you time. I can wait forever for your stories. That's how good they are. =) I hope you will feel better.
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  • From ANON - Kalypso on September 29, 2011
    I love this story and all of your other ones. It's always great to see an update to one or more of them. No matter how long or short between updates. Hope you continue and don't stop again.

    This story and your Over-Under are one of my favorite fanfictions ever so please continue to update. Pretty Please! :)
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  • From Sabriel20 on September 29, 2011
    I completely understand, and I think it sucks that more people arn't considerate. It is very time consuming writing a story, and it canalso be very frusterating developing a storyline, but I really love your story. Don't let people pressure you into working faster. Work at your own speed. I will wait paitiently and unjudgementally for your next update
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  • From sara101 on September 29, 2011
    I love the chapter I thought I read this some time before, it was like I had already read some of the chapters, idk lol. Great job and don't feel too bad I stopped updating for like two years so i understand not being motivated to really write with alot going on. I love this story and can't wait till the next chapter, no rush, well kinda, not really. lol :D
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  • From ANON - Jen on September 10, 2011
    Apologies! Couldn't leave you a review for "Yes, Young Master?" at your blog so am doing it here. (Site wanted you to register to leave a comment.) Obviously feel free to delete this review since it's for a different story. Anyway, here's my thoughts on it:

    I really like this rewrite of the story. I think the original version had some mysterious aspects to it, but the best part of this rewrite is that it brings the mystery front and center. The first scene draws you in as the reader and makes you wonder what happened, why Naruto would try to kill himself, and why he thinks revealing the truth of whatever happened would buy him a death sentence. The dramatic difference between present-day Naruto and past Naruto is also another thing which pulls you into the story since it makes you instantly curious how Naruto's personality could have changed so much.

    I also really like your Iruka. He's smart, no-nonsense, and confident. It's a welcome change from the feminized role he usually plays. (Normally, Kakashi would get cast as this type of character. I'm glad you gave the role to Iruka instead.) One technical detail, however: psychiatrists *are* MDs. (It's psychologists who are PhDs but not MDs.) Psychiatrists can prescribe medications (psychologists can't), so that's part of why they need to go to medical school and get MDs. You can read about it here:

    http://www.webmd.com/mental-health/features/psychology-vs-psychiatry-which-is-better

    I think in a scenario like this one, using a he-said, she-said storytelling technique alternating between Naruto and Sasuke's perspectives is a fantastic idea! Obviously both people have very different perceptions of whatever it was that happened. For some reason, Sasuke, like everyone else in the city, has been led to believe Naruto died. He also, unlike Naruto, thinks whatever it was that happened in the past wasn't something bad, so it's definitely interesting to see how those two very different perspective might have been created.

    My only suggestion with all of this is that I think it was a little too much to read the entire scene we first witnessed through Naruto's perspective a second time through Sasuke's POV. I think as readers, once we realize we've already read the scene before, we stop reading altogether and switch to skimming. (Sadly losing out on finer story details in the process.) I would say, whichever character gets to tell his side of it second, rather than rewriting the whole scene over again, to focus only on the parts that are new and the most different because of the change in POV. You can leave the rest out (or briefly summarize it if you're cutting stuff out in the middle of the scene). I think for this chapter, you might have ended Sasuke's POV somewhere around the paragraph where he realizes Naruto is attractive ("The boy also had three small scars on each cheek, making it look as if he had whiskers. It gave him a slightly animalistic look, and Sasuke liked it.") because everything after that was pretty much the same as Naruto's POV, but everything before that was new.

    Really looking forward to reading the rest of this story!
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  • From ANON - Jen on September 10, 2011
    It was nice how Sasuke took care of Naruto after he fainted and was able to show him his compassionate side. (I'm sure Naruto was unaware that Sasuke had one! Good for you Sasuke, unwittingly scoring some points with your little crush!)

    But wow, Sasuke dodged a bullet there! His explanation for what happened to Naruto and why Naruto fainted was pretty convincing since it *practically* happened like that. Good thing Naruto was smart enough to pick up on the fact that not everything is exactly adding up. But at this stage, he has no reason to mistrust Sasuke and give the whole situation much thought. Of course we all know the shit will eventually hit the fan--because you foreshadowed it, and because some of us read the previous version! The real bitch of the situation is that it will be totally reasonable for Naruto to get upset at being lied to when he discovers the truth, and Sasuke knows it, (not to mention Naruto's homophobia). BUT, it's also totally reasonable for Sasuke not to want to tell him the truth for a while. With the way Naruto acted, I agree with Sasuke 100% that he has a right to lie to Naruto about his sexuality. (In fact, it's not really Naruto's business to know in the first place. I'm still a little confused why Sasuke wanted to tell him. Was it because he was attracted to Naruto and hoping Naruto be interested too, or just because Sasuke simply didn't want to lie about his sexuality with his roommate--even if he'd willingly lie to the rest of the student body about it?)

    Need more chapters of this fic!
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  • From ANON - kitty on September 10, 2011
    yay an update! i feel like i've been waiting forever!!! i can't wait for the next one:]
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  • From moodysavage on September 05, 2011
    faster... must rewrite faster!!! I've read farther along and want to knowwwww what's next!!! really great story :)
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  • From ANON - kittyperfect on August 11, 2011
    i love this story! i can't wait for the next chapter=] i have a feeling naruto is going to walk in on sasuke masterbating.... I CAN'T WAIT!!!
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  • From kuzon234ray on August 01, 2011
    Wow, amazing. I can't wait to read the next chapter!!!!

    -Ray
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  • From missbri88 on July 20, 2011
    Oh how I have missed this story! I can't wait to see more.
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  • From AngelTalion on July 11, 2011
    Uh oh. :( This does not sound like its going to go well! Yipes... next chapter please
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  • From ANON - Jen on July 10, 2011
    The cat is out of the bag (both literally & metaphorically!) in a big way!

    Sasuke really took a huge risk here coming out to Naruto! (It's been a while since I read the 1st version of the story--can't remember what his reasoning was for doing so.)

    I keep wondering if Naruto is really as straight as he believes (making Sasuke an exception), or if he does have at least some gay tendencies, which he's used his homophobia to repress. It's certainly interesting how he almost seems afraid to masturbate, like his own sexuality makes him uncomfortable. And it's also quite interesting that not only did he not immediately move away from Sasuke during that accidental kiss, but even at the time, he himself realized that he hadn't immediately moved away!

    Looking forward to chapter five! :D
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  • From runoutofaname on July 10, 2011
    Awsome!
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  • From ANON - Aussiegal on April 03, 2011
    I really enjoy this story, however i feel that the first person bit (Naruto POV) takes away from the rest of the story...i actually find myself struggling to get through it xP. Especially when the rest of the story is done in third person.
    Other then that keep up the good wok and i look forward to the next update ^_^

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