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Reviews for The Over-Under

By : Spiraling
  • From ANON - inayen on February 02, 2012
    i love your stories!
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  • From ANON - witch on October 10, 2011
    it has been a long time since i have put any naruto fics in my bookmarks: i have added this and conversion to then. (again, for conversion, i was a silent admirer before!) -- you write fantastically.
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  • From ANON - Crazy Irish Lass on September 27, 2011
    Yaaaaaaaaaaaay! Sasuke finally made his appearance! I my money on him showing up as a client, but this makes things sooo much more interesting. I wish you would update this abit more though. *pouts* I don't see anything really wrong, but then again, I have a cold and I've been dopped up on cold meds the last few days. So, its quite possible I missed something. Keep up the good work so far though, and please update alittle more freaquiently then twice a year please? ^^; Your going GREAT!
    -Crazy Irish Lass
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  • From ANON - Sam S. on September 13, 2011
    I think this is a good story and would like to read more soon. Continue writing and do your best. Good luck.
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  • From ANON - richon on September 12, 2011
    ooh naru finaly meet sasu !!looking foraward what will happen in his firt night!! see you soon, this story is awesome !
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  • From ANON - Jen on September 10, 2011
    I liked your Sasuke in this. He's no-nonsense, but clearly a professional who knows his business. (Would have been all too easy to write him as a needless bastard with an entitlement complex. So glad you didn't.) The fact that Sasuke does know what he's doing and has clearly earned his position is what made the moments when Naruto caught him off guard especially delicious since you could tell a guy like him doesn't fluster easily and rarely gets surprised. Score one for Naruto. (And I'm sure Naruto secretly enjoyed giving him that hug and telling him he wouldn't mind being seduced by Sasuke. So score two for Naruto.)

    Can't wait to see what happens on Naruto's first day on the job!
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  • From missbri88 on September 08, 2011
    I love this story, I only wish it were updated more often.
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  • From daughterofvirgo on September 08, 2011
    That was a pretty good idea Naruto had--pushing the panic button with his foot. Too bad Sasuke didn't think the same thing. But he was right. Naruto, er, Narumi still might have been raped before he could connect with said button. I was just as surprised as Anko that Sasuke allowed Narumi to progress. I was sure he would have said no, too. I'm glad he didn't.

    Thank you for updating, and I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - G on September 08, 2011
    @ Dorkchic: Actually, you can't always tell the difference between real and fake boobs. To use a sad RL example, a friend of mine is a breast cancer survivor who underwent a mastectomy. When she hugs me I can't tell the difference between her real boob and her prosthetic. (Course, even if Naruto is using Kleenex and not high-quality prosthetics, Sasuke might assume Naruto is "enhancing," rather than jumping to the conclusion he is male.)

    @ Spiraling: This was a very detailed description of what working at a host club would be like! Do you have a really good imagination, or did you do some research? How the tips worked, the advice Naruto got about getting the clients to stay longer, the panic button, all of it sounded believable to me. I liked that a lot about the chapter, that it felt convincing. :) I also liked this version of Sasuke. He came across gruff, but somehow cute. I think Neji's opinion of him was probably right, despite his personality, Sasuke is basically a good guy. Loving the story! Hope to see a new chapter soon!
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  • From Dorkchic on September 07, 2011
    Does that mean he would like it if he was hugged 'off' the clock? I get the feeling that he knows Naruto is male because you can feel the difference between real and fake boobs when someone presses them against your chest. Looking foward to your next update!
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  • From moodysavage on September 07, 2011
    I loved this chapter!!! I think Sasuke seemed a bit surprised... mayber surprised about his reaction to Narumi? :)

    I do think of him as a girl instead of Naruto when you use 'she' in the descriptive parts.

    Hope you have time & inspiration to write more soon because this is getting really good!
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  • From ANON - Crazy Irish Lass on July 28, 2011
    BOUT DAMN TIME YOU UPDATED! I thought I was never going to see more of this! I only wish this chapter was longer, I didn't want it to end. I didn't see alot in the way of mistakes, but I've been dozing on and off all day, so I could have missed something. Keep up the good work, and please don't leave us hanging for too long?
    -Crazy Irish Lass
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  • From daughterofvirgo on July 27, 2011
    I love this story! I love stories that feature characters cross-dressing. I don't know why; I just do. Update soon, please.
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  • From bloodshound on July 21, 2011
    we'll take what we can get. ^^
    I wonder how long it will take for erm Narumi to lose her resentment and settle in. The sooner she does the sooner she can make good money.
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  • From Danyealle on July 20, 2011
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