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Reviews for The Over-Under

By : Spiraling
  • From ANON - Jen on July 10, 2011
    Glad you found my ramblings useful. :) I thought the scene with Neji & Naruto where Neji was sizing him up was quite awesome. Not only do we now have an idea how Naruto will pull this off, but we also know what the "tells" are on his true gender. (I think having this kind of grounding helps keep the story plausible!) Plus master-strategist version Neji stole the scene, which was awesome.

    Sounds like Neji managed to pull off the transformation, however. It seems as though he fooled Anko, and probably Kakashi, though I have my suspicions about him. He was perceptive enough to notice that Naruto was somewhat feminine when they first met, will he be perceptive enough to notice that Neji brought him a girl who looks an awful lot like the boy she'd(?) brought in a month earlier...?

    Neji did so much for Naruto in this chapter by paying off so many of his debts that I imagine Naruto will need to be employed at the Over-Under for a LONG time in order to pay them all off. Too bad for Sasuke. ;)
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  • From alexxgalaxy on July 09, 2011
    I'm sorry about the loss of your flash drive but I'm glad about your assurance. I also see that you took note to reviewers' comment and perfect the story. Yea, it's not easy for man to disguise as woman. The body structure would give them out. Male are not as soft as female (Male have more muscle while female, body fat). Something isn't right if people look outside the face. I wonder, if Sasuke is attracted to a female Naruto, how he would react when the true Naruto is revealed.

    Congratulations for your promotion by the way.
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  • From ANON - richon on July 09, 2011
    oh great, naru got the job, want to know what will happen to the ball ?? Congratulation for your promotion !!see you soon
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  • From Madamdragon on July 09, 2011
    I am really getting into this. Hope more is to come soon please
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  • From moodysavage on July 09, 2011
    this is so cute! but does this mean that Neji's employers don't know that he's male? and he works as a female hostess?
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  • From Dorkchic on July 08, 2011
    I love the thought that Naru has been able to get so into character that he was slightly offended when Anko belittled his bust size. I was curious about one thing though. Neji told Naru that he would start making money when he had regular clients. Does that mean that he has to wait until then before he gets any pay or is it like a lot of comission jobs where you get an hourly introductory pay for a set time period until you have learned the job and can reasonably be expected to perform well? I suppose the question boiled down is... did Neji mean that Naruto would have to go through training before being payed or did he mean that he would only start making good money once he had a few dedicated clients? Love this story so far. I think it has tons of potential and I am very much looking foward to the next update.

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  • From ANON - Just another reader on March 11, 2011
    This chapter did not disappoint! Nicely done! It will be interesting to read how Naruto recovers from being denied a job on the upper floor. I'm curious as to what happens next.
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  • From AngelTalion on March 10, 2011
    I have to admit that I was hesitant at first... but I'm liking it and its very well written is helping me to get into it. I await chapter 2! :)
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  • From ANON - Jen on March 10, 2011
    I like how Sasuke was only glimpsed in this chapter, and that things were still focused on trying to sort out Naruto's life, which is really the MUCH bigger concern at this point. The usual--and tedious--thing to do would have been for the story to shift into all-romance mode *the second* they meet, usually by them doing something lame like bumping into one another. (Which then leads into Sasuke finding some excuse to start insulting Naruto: that Naruto is clumsy, not good-looking enough to work there, etc., etc., which further leads to an even more tedious stock insult exchange between them--bastard, idiot, etc., etc.) Thank you for sparing us from that.

    So it sounds like Neji just wears women's clothes but doesn't try to pretend that he's actually a woman? Is that how Naruto will be approaching his own cross-dressing? If so, that's good since like I said in my previous comment, if Sasuke sees Naruto regularly, there's no way he wouldn't be able to eventually pick up on Naruto's real gender. Speaking of, since it was Kakashi interviewing him, I was wondering if he said the "too feminine" line because he was hoping Naruto would cross-dress because he wanted another Neji-like host, not that Naruto is actually too feminine? (Since the comment came as a shock to both Neji and Naruto, I started wondering if it in fact wasn't true.)

    As for "Yes, Young Master?" I'd still like to read it if you decide you'd still like to work on it. And I still agree with you that rewriting the story to slow things down between Naruto and Sasuke would make the fic even better than it is now.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 10, 2011
    Totally loving this story so far - especially the pacing, which quite a few authors rush. I'm certainly looking forward to the next chapter =)
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  • From alexxgalaxy on March 10, 2011
    The story seemed to start to get interesting. I look forward to an update but after reading the notes at the end of the chapter, I think I might need to stop investing into it. I've had enough of let-down following those who always abandoned their stories.
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  • From ANON - richon on March 10, 2011
    naru find a new job, yhis story is very promising, i love it. see you soon with more
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  • From tawanawelch on March 09, 2011
    I'm glad Naruto finally went to 'jina's' job.lol Was the cute escort with pitch black hair, Sasuke? Also, I thought Naruto was getting hired on the spot, but now I see what happened. :) Can't wait for more!!
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  • From missbri88 on March 09, 2011
    Awesomeness!!! I can't wait for more, and you'll be posting the revised Conversions...? YOSH! I'm a little sad about Regardless' discontinuance but do what you think is best. And Yes, Young Master, a revision of that one at a later time would be okay too. Don't rush anything. Your fans love you and want you to stay so take your time.
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  • From yaoihentai69 on March 09, 2011
    Out of curiosity, is this going to be a SasuNaru or a NaruSasu?
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