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By : Daydreamer79

From sainmoth14 on March 26, 2011
wow ok i enjoy this fic, an the AN was a big wow i know its frustrating when people give you reviews when they don't know what they are talking about or don't know the research or info you know. It saddens me that i wont get to read more of this awesome fic but i can relate to the stress
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From betrayed on March 25, 2011
Hi. :) Your story is Amazing with a capital A. And I have read many a lot tons a huge gigantic enormous amount of stories on aff.net so I would know what's amazing. It may seem like I'm only trying to entice you to update again possibly soon very soon which is just a tiny little itty bit true but your story really is really beautiful so please update asap ok? :) Or else I'll have to bug you and review every week like I do for just dreaming who wrote Independence which you really have to read if you didn't. So please update your awesome addicting enticing beautifully written story ok? :) and read Independence in the original section. :)

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From ANON - Tweedleedee on March 25, 2011
I love this story and can hardly wait between each chapter. I actually arrived late at work because of you! Okay, well, because of MY craving for YOUR writing, but... And now you're giving me the evil cliffie? (I tend to take things a bit personally, or so I've been told)
Seriously, though, I would love to get inside Naruto's head some time?
Keep up and feed my addiction! Pretty please?
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From ANON - Akira on March 25, 2011
Amazing chappi, you really could tell how difficult was all thsi for Sasuke. I wonder whats gonna do Naruto know with a broken Sasuke in his arms?

Thanks for the update.

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From ANON - qwerty on March 25, 2011
Part 2, addressing the statement "Sasuke�s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his Asian heritage":

I know your **intent** was good but if some people are feeling hurt or offended, then a closer look at what **impact** your words are having might be necessary. I know this is your story and you can write it however you please but I also think that tuning into what your readers have to say when they have legitimate concerns is prudent.

I did raise my eyebrows when I first read the chapter containing Sasuke's eyes sentence but I didn't say anything in my review. Jen's recent review basically laid it all down, especially in her last two points i.e. 1) saying "Asian" collapses difference among all the diverse people on the Asian continent (i.e. Indians, Chinese, Cambodians, Afghanis, etc) to just one look and 2) just because someone is has "Asian heritage" doesn't mean they're going to have "narrow" eyes.

My tone isn't antagonistic in this review. I just want to continue the dialogue because I think how people are represented in stories is an important issue.
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From ANON - qwerty on March 25, 2011
omg. this chapter was SUPER well written. I love the pacing and really /felt/ Sasuke's panic and anguish.
Well done!!!
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From cynaga on March 25, 2011
wow

that trip into sasuke's psyche while preparing for naru was incredible~
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From ANON - silverfox on March 25, 2011
I am screaming at you right now. I'm cussing you out and praising your name in the same breath. You updated so quickly, wrote beautifully, placed Sasuke in Naruto's capable hands, and then ENDED THE CHAPTER!?!?!?!1?1?1? How can you be so cruel? ;-) Of course, I'm not really mad at you, and this just makes me want to read the next chapter all the more, but seriously!?! Oh, gosh, I just can't wait till you update! Please let it be soon?
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From ANON - Misao on March 25, 2011
I'm definitely agree with Mak here. In cases like these, a litmus test would help to determine if you may be toeing the line too hard.
There seemed to be no need to highlight the fact that his eyes were narrow because he was Asian. Was it really necessary to extrapolate the point beyond 'He opened his eyes as widely as possible'?

You probably wouldn't say about a black person that 'He was blushing, but you couldn't tell because his skin was so dark.'; or 'She couldn't match his weightlifting abilities on the account of her being a woman and having less upper body strength.' It sometimes simply goes without saying, and outlining it may come across as offensive if not done carefully.

In addition, 'Asian' is such a wide blanket term. Do all Asians have narrow eyes? There are so many subcultures under the Asian classification, not just the Chinese and Japanese. Even if you had narrowed it down to 'on account of his Japanese heritage', you're implying that every Japanese person is narrow-eyed with remarkable difficulty showing wide-eyed surprise. Not true by the way.

I know you didn't mean anything offensive by it, but it doesn't hurt to step back and scale it back a bit. I don't think anyone is bashing you or being horribly unfair. Try to see the genuine concrit within it.
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From ANON - bangbang on March 25, 2011
First of all, Daydreamer, screw all who don't F'ing get your stories. Obviously, they are not familiar with the different tastes of fetishes and fantasies. If they don't like it OR uderstand it, they shouldn't be leaving you comments that you have to explain to them....I mean really...It's a waste of your time and irritates me to know that you have to explain it. Second, I am or Asain decent ad your words were not steryotype in the least. I did not take offense and found your words to be true, because DUH! it REALLY WASN't! Seriously...who are these reveiwers? This is why I don't post my work on here. People are ignorant. Love your stories. Love your portrayal of Sasuke and Naruto. Love you O.O

P.s. I think I'm going to make an account on Ygal...screw this
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From ANON - Mak on March 24, 2011
I am leaning toward your phrasing being a bit racist and stereotypical, actually. I know you didn't intend it to be, but I think you should really think about it, instead of flying off the handle and raging at someone for pointing it out...especially considering the terrible things I saw people saying in your journal comments on y!gallery, and the way you were accusing the reviewer of being a grandstanding know-it-all. It is a valid thing to point out, and they did it in a polite way, I thought.

Look at it this way - would it sound racist if it was: "He narrowed his lips as much as possible, considering his African heritage." I mean, the writer might think full lips are sexy, but that doesn't make the phrase okay.
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From Carousel on March 24, 2011
This last chapter was so magnificent. It was so intriguing to read Sasuke falling apart in his acceptance of what he really wanted and when he finally fell into Naruto's arms I was very touched. I can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - SilentShadow101 on March 24, 2011
oh such a mean cliffhanger...WHY lol

Just wanted to let you know how much I love this story. There has clearly been some research put into it, which is something I always appreciate in a story. I'm sorry to hear that you've been having problems and I hope that this will stop soon! I'm also glad that you are going to continue to update these stories as they are so good! :)
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From ANON - Jen on March 24, 2011
Actually, I agreed with the previous poster's comments on the racist implications of your line: "Sasuke�s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his Asian heritage" and said nothing because everything that needed to be said was already said by someone else, and probably better than I could have said it. Given your comments at the end of this chapter, I now regret not saying anything about it. Let me add in my own two cents:

1. Would you have written: "Sasuke�s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his CAUCASIAN heritage"? If the line is an innocent as you claim, then we should all understand it perfectly well if you substitute in a different race, ne?

2. Don't get cute about the fact that you didn't write "his eyes were like all Asian eyes." It is a fact of English grammar that unless you use qualifiers (some, many, a few, etc.) the implication is always a universal "ALL." The reader can't possibly know you meant "some" (versus "many," a "few," etc.) unless you state "some."

3. What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian heritage"? What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian descended people�s eye shape has nothing to do with them being Asian"? So then the eye shape is similar among Asian populations, is that right? So Chinese eyes look like Indian eyes, which are similar to what you would find on people from Afghanistan, Armenia, Iran, Jordan, Korea, Turkey, Vietnam... All of those people are Asian, so what, exactly, are the "Asian descended people" that we talking about here? (Again, without qualifiers, without specifying "East Asian," "Japanese," etc., you verbally lump all Asian people into one category.)

4. NEITHER all Asian people NOR all East Asian people have small eyes! (And yes, I, too am talking about "the visible shape of the eye including the lids and shape of skin and muscle outside it and not the eye ball alone." Let me repeat: not all East Asians have small eyes!)

I am sorry for you that you would write off someone's legitimate concerns about stereotyping as nothing more than "grandstanding" rather than giving the issue some thought. And I am also sorry, but I no longer feel comfortable continuing to read your fanfictions.
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From feisu on March 24, 2011
oh you tease, update soon? love it :)
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