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By : mannahpierce

From ANON - cynaga on February 26, 2011
[ch.62] I am completely enraptured by the details of the escape and have forgotten that I initially thought that it was too easy. ;) Really, I have to mourn at the end of these chapters because I have to leave the Iteration Universe again...
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From satterb on February 26, 2011
I was thinking that Ranmaru would probably stay with Sasori instead of going back to Konohamaru. Wow! I'm shocked I got it right! LOL Thanks for more of this incredible story. I look forward to the next update!
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From bloodshound on February 26, 2011
Uchiha for the win! I do hope pein comes around, for his offsiders sake, so many will be miserable if he keeps it up.

i real,ize i haven't commented for a bit, but that was cause i hadn't read it for a bit. I hate being left hanging and this was definately a hanging situation. At any rate I'm back and Mannora sama, once again i bow in awe of your story telling skills. The essance of Uchiah and Naru's influence has struck again. Hana, the Zetsues and Sasori being swung in Uchiha ish tought directins... inspired. But now they'll be sad... and poor Ranmaru, man did he get shafted. hopefully they can do something or he can say goodbye at least. It'll be interesgting to see how you deal with all these plot bunnies you've joyously bred. Also ty again for your regular updating. ^^
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From ANON - xxShadowheartxx on February 25, 2011
Okay, never reviewed a story here so you can be my first. I have read all the stories you have posted, and I have to say they are some of the best I have ever read. I leave the review for the whole story below.

All right, to start 'In the Cold of Space You Find the Heat of Suns' was one of the first stories I ever read on FanFiction.net. It's actually what made me want to start writing. I was always a nerd/geek and sci-fi was one of my favorite subjects. So I started looking for good fic's like that. I was disapointed for the most part, and then I found your story. The whole thing had me drooling for more, I think I ended up reading the whole thing in four days. Now back when I read this story I didn't feel comfortable leaving comments on other people's work, so I never reviewed anything. As my knowledge of writing grew, so did my comfort-level, and I started reviewing thing more often. Now, by this point in my life, I review everything I read. Because I know now, that there is almost no greater feeling then reading what someone else thinks of your work, that, on some occasions, you spend hours writing. So, when I saw that was a sequel, I knew I was going to make up of not reviewing one of the best stories I had ever read. So now that I've finished that, onto the actual story review.

'Iteration' is currently meeting all the wonderful expectations I had put on it from reading your first story. I like how you made one-shots to bridge some of the time gaps so that the children would be older and more interesting to both read and write. I love how you seem to have little stories inside your stories, like all the stuff about Ranmaru and Sickler. It gave the story more depth. I was so, so sad what you killed off poor Ranmaru, but I like the way in which you did it. It wasn't gory, nasty details, but it did leave enough information to make your heart stop in shock and start feeling the need to cry.

I love the way Itachi, Kisame, and Haku's relationship works, it seems very realistic and well thought about. I also love the fact that you didn't kill off Itachi, although so many people do, because he is one of my favorite characters.

I also like the way the Hybrids are. And the fact that they are not all perfect like Naruto. I especially like them because they remind me of my childhood and some of the better days in highschool. If you want to know why feel free to ask, but if you don't care I won't tell you. Anyway, continuing.

I like how the Akasuki appear in here, especially the Zetsus. Who, now from the end of time possibly, will be known as Inryoku and Enerugi, to me at least.

As for some of the things covered in the last chapter. I think the story is perfect, people who don't like it will just have to deal. I actually like the fact that the story revolves around lots of different characters, it makes it interesting.

Anyway, that's my very long review telling you the I totally love and adore your story and I hope you continue it. I hope it didn't turn out too obsessive and stalker sounding.... -_-
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Personal review of chapter 61.

Oh, I hope Shikamaru, Haru, and Sasori get away safely. Neji needs Shikamaru badly. Yay! for Hana and Inryoku/Enerugi, I give them all kisses. *smooch*
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From ANON - lonelylulaby on February 24, 2011
GAH!! I feel so bad for the Zetsu's. I don't want them to be lonely. T_T Anywho another great chappy and I wonder what everyone is going to say when they get back. AAAAHHHHH I just screamed like a justine bieber fan.

ja ne till next time and keep up the greeeaaat work
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From rachaelrose on February 24, 2011
Yay for Zetsu(s)! Too bad he (they) couldn't go along.
Nice story; this recent arc has been pretty interesting to me. I'll admit to being one of the people who doesn't love the extended cast, but your storytelling is very good and as long as it centers on the Naruto-immediate people, I'm good. Like you say, I skim over the rest. Though, I would really love to get a window into what's going on with Gaara and Lee...they've caught my attention and we haven't seen them in awhile.

Oh, and as a side-note, I think it's really sad that people are so hung up on Sasu/Naru or Naru/Sasu. Your habit of having them switch it up is so much more realistic to same sex 'ships...and hot for that matter. :) The whole static seme/uke thing is such a hetero-normative, stereotypical idea that it's pretty insulting...and, of course, it's rampant in fanfic (esp. those written by women). Not that preferring one sexual position over another doesn't happen, but generally has little to do with height, weight, desire to cook, etc, etc. So, go you for showing bedroom equality and creativity. (sorry, mini-diatribe, but it's such a pet peeve...so I'm doubly happy that your characters avoid the trope.) :D
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From suzannecmc on February 24, 2011
yeah!
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From ANON - v on February 23, 2011
They've escaped!!!! With Ranmaru!! and nobody died!!! and Haru wasn't hurt!! and Hana let them go!!and In-san and En-san helped them because Shika was their friend and they cared for Haru...this is so wonderful...I'm so ecstatic!! Please let them get home...please let nothing horrible stop that from happening...I am worried about Ranmaru though, how long his reprint will last, if they can help him, how he thinks its best if he doesn't come back..that worries me..will he be able to see the family and man that he loves, I already have massive worries about Shika and Haru so this just adds to it all. I'm very stressed...but still happy they escaped and sorta liking and feeling some sympathy for the two Z's now..not two much just yet though. :)
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From ANON - kanazerosukenaru on February 23, 2011
Again one of my very favorite chapters.

I have to say I was really irritated that you are getting people telling you how to write your story. Those of us who have been following this story from chapter one of ITCS appreciate every single chapter every single character and every single twist in the plot. So ignore everyone else and know that there are many of us out here who love your story just like it is!!!!

Thanks for another update

Kana-chan
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From roro237 on February 23, 2011
Oh Queenie that was fantastic! I'm still on the edge of my seat! I had my mouth open and didn't even know it till the end:) Your tittle had me hoping this was when they would try but you totally surprised me with the hole escape! Yea baby! I also enjoy all the casts and crew you have in this story of yours. And when it's time for our boys(NarSas)to shine in a chapter I really love it! You know I think it takes all the supporting characters to show just how special the boys are to everyone. I do especially like it when they show each other how special they are:) Thank goodness Ranmaru was saved! I LOVED every bit of this chapter ^_^
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From Gingitsune32 on February 23, 2011
I'm so glad that Inryoku and Enerugi let Shika & Haru go despite knowing that they might be punished or that they are losing a friend. As for Hana not killing Ranmaru, that's definitely a surprise! :D

Can't wait to read more!
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From ANON - jalana on February 23, 2011
Another wonderful chapter! I'm so glad no one got seriously hurt (or dead!)--even the "bad guys" had started to grow on me a bit. Now back into the Uchiha fold! :)
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From missbri88 on February 23, 2011
I am saddened with your author's note that not everyone likes all the components of the saga. I love everything about this story, and I'm even open minded to all the pairings and its all amazing. :bows to you:
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From satterb on February 23, 2011
Hurray! They escaped!!!! I hope that the Zetsus will be rewarded somehow, and Hana too. I really like the way your story mirrors the effect canon Naruto has on the people he comes into contact with. LOL Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent with all of us. I look forward to more.
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From Dorkchic on February 23, 2011
I actually guessed what had happened with the control panel before you revealed! I have no idea why I am so excited by that, but I feel as if I have accomplished something. It is sad when I think of what Pein might do to Hana for letting them go. Also sad to think of what might happen to the Zetsus. Even if Pein does not find out about them- they have lost one of the few people in existence that was not only able, but also willing to understand them. Maybe they can be lured away to work for Uchiha or Klenn? So looking foward to the reunion. Naruto will probably be wrapped around Shika and Haru for days before Sasuke is finally able to pry him off and let him have some time with Neji. Looking foward to the next update. Will Pein persue them? Will there be some form of battle? Will Klenn do something devious? Tune in next time for all this and more! Same Bat-time! Same Bat-channel!
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