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From randrinawilson on March 09, 2011
I am so glad that they are finally home and that Naruto was able to see and accept his jealousy and realize so beautifully that he has 13 children and shika only has one. They can share Haru. That was wonderful. What I really dont like, or understand I should say, is that you continually allude hint that Sasuke and Shikamaru find each other attractive and cling to each a little longer than they should at times. Although it is very obvious that Sauke is very much in love with Naruto. I dont get this. they didnt do any of this before Naruto came into the picture. Sausuke was frigid and cold and Shikamaru was awkward and strange. so what now, Naruto comes along, changes sasuke for the better, becomes best friends with Shika and changes him for the better also and in the end shika and Sasuke end up together? I kinda feel like thats the horrilble/happy build up that you are trying to give us here. because you even mentioned with neji that neji himself even realized that he wasnt enough for shika anymore but the people that were right for him were all taken. For the moment. And we all know that Naruto only has another 15 years on him and thats it. I was really hoping that you were going to save your readers the heartache of naruto dying and solve the BARA HYBRID msytery for us and somehow that would save naruto for us but it really looks like that is some serious wishful thinking. I guess I just really want Naruto to be saved here. Dont get me wrong, I have cried through some character death here. It made the story flow and I mean it really made these characters feel like they were your friendes and to just up and loose them like that and just feel it and have to re-read that scene over and over again, you know your author is amazing and has you hook line and sinker. But as a reader, who knows that author cant please everyone and please themselves at the same time, the only thing that I the reader can do is ask..........please dont kill Naruto off. Please find a way.......in your wonderful infinit wisdom.......which is pretty vast to have come up with this plot, please find a way to extend his life and have him grow old with sasuke. Have their kits grow up and have full lives. It will probably have to involve orochimaru because really, why is he still alive? he was dead! he probably knows a trick or two and will pop up in the future. Klenn could be on the Bara trail too but please let Naruto live. I'll start a campaign if I have to. Oh yes I will. Dont you make me!!!!!!! :D
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From ANON - lonelylulaby on March 09, 2011
I don't think that I could be like Naruto and just squash my jealousy of someone else taking my place. But I love it all the same and your explanations of why just blow my mind. This story is really cathartic. Every emotion that the characters have I get little symptoms of too and I enjoy it, way more than movies. OMGosh and the line in the beginning where Sasuke was like Naruto looked like he was getting ready for a race, made me chuckle to myself. There was so much going on and it was all GREAT!! that I know I'm leaving stuff out. Once again great is what you and your beta are. You make my college life SO much better. THANKS

ja ne till next time and keep up the awesome work.

P.s your character development is AWESOME, but in the back of my mind I keep on thinking that sometime in the future Naruto wont be there to be the glue of the family...
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From ANON - kanazerosukenaru on March 09, 2011
I was a bit confused while reading this chapter. Does Haru think his To-chan and Papa are no longer his parents? He said his thought his To-chan was the best above all when he first arrived, so what happened? I'm not sure what is going on with him, but I hope he does return back to normal.

I know Shika is his biological father, but so is Sasuke, and what about his bond with Naruto? Six months away would not have earased the previous five years with his litter and his Papa and To-chan. I don't want to see him as Shika's child, I was really hoping that Shika and Neji would one day have a child of their own, and that Haru, who is a genius in his own right, would understand the need the litter and his parents have for him to be part of the greater Uchiha.

He is almost full blooded Uchiha and hopefully the future Uchiha-sama, he can't belong to Shika, he belongs to the whole of Uchiha and especially to Sasuke and Naruto who have helped him become the little wonderful boy he is.

Please don't make him Shika's "son", he is Haru Uchiha not Haru Nara.

Wow...see I continue to be too emotionally vested in your story....damn it!!! LOL

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From ANON - Gingitsune on March 09, 2011
I think if Neji is not in the picture, I would have loved for Shika to be in a threesome with naruto and sasuke. They all obviously care for each other. There is the protential for more on sasuke's part towards Shika. I don't know abt Shika. But it would be nice that sasuke will have Shika when naruto is gone kwim?

Another wonderful chapter. Thanks!
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From ANON - Kat Saama on March 06, 2011
Amazing keep it up! Poor Naruto! Cant wait for the next chapter ^^
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From Dorkchic on March 06, 2011
Poor Naru. He is like those people who handle everything and stay strong and controlled in a crisis. The person who is everyone else's shoulder and finally collapses after everything is over. It is like the only thing that was keeping them going all that time was the fact that there were people depending on them and there were things that needed to be done.

I am especially looking foward to Haru's reunion with the rest of the children. I think the situation with Shikamaru being more of a parent to Haru will work out fine. It will probably be a little compllicated at first, but eventually they will realize that Haru just happens to be fortunate enough to have three parents who love him with everything they have.
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From Gingitsune32 on March 06, 2011
That's so sad :( Can't wait till Shika & Haru is back. Already the dynamics of Shika, Sasuke & Naruto's relationship with Haru is going to be interesting. Maybe that's what Naruto is mourning for?
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From ANON - pisces on March 05, 2011
I stumbled upon this story and have read from the beginning to its current state. The storyline you have developed, from "In the cold of space..." to "Tales in Tarrasade" to "Iteration", is beyond wonderful in its complexity, depth, and richness. The cast of characters at first seems too large, but I think you deftly make sure that not one personality or life gets lost. I did not think that I would maintain interest in such a long story that spans over 120 chapters, but you breathed such a life into these characters and their new world that grips from the beginning and leaves me curious for more. I am especially curious to see what is next for Haru and his adventure.

As a reader, I wanted to extend my thanks for sharing this story and offer a small bravo from my corner of the reading world. I look forward to the next installment.
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From satterb on March 05, 2011
This chapter was even more nerve wrecking than the last, Shika's silly behavior kind of diffused the tension. Poor Naruto. He will be better when his family is all together again. Thanks for uploading. I really love this story.
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From ANON - SidonieStarr on March 05, 2011
Great story. I'll be on the edge of my seat (figuratively) until we find out more about the people, clones and prints on Pein's ship.
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From ANON - richon on March 05, 2011
poor naru, i feel sad for him but don't worry you will see shika, haru an the other children soon. Love this story. see you soon
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From ANON - lonelylulaby on March 05, 2011
Oh my goodness, I have no idea what is going to happen when everyone is reunited. I was about to start crying at work when I found out that Naruto had built a mourning nest. (T_T) Poor Naruto, he has too much on his shoulders sometimes. Shika needs to hurry up and get back so he can help Sasuke decipher Naruto's inner mind. Gah and about the kits and their little quirks, I wonder which if any they will develop. I think that will be a funny time, unless they bond to someone cruel, like Sasuke was thinking. OmG, there is more I wanted to say but I'm forgetting in my distress, I believe I will have to review again

ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
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From suzannecmc on March 05, 2011
emotions are strung high and it's great that you showed that a life change like a kidnapping will do this.
it's interesting that you have Naruto fractured in this way that his responses change with his personality.
oddly I still feel the most for Negi and his uncertainty. the true for all reunion will be very interesting indeed.
but I don't think things will ever be quite the same again:)
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From Prism0467 on March 05, 2011
OMG I feel Naruto's pain. And I can't imagine I'd be any less feral if someone had taken either of my babies from me.

I hope everything is back to 'normal' again for them too.
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From ANON - v on March 05, 2011
Poor Naruto, I feel like he's been so strong thru everything that happened so this chapter made me very teary. I just know i'll be going thru boxes of Kleenex when he's reunited with Shi-chan and Haru, even though I think we'll see a whole new behavior from him when he see's Haru's scars. I'm still worried that they won't make it home, but I do agree with Neji's opinion that Shika has changed, and also his relationship with Haru has deepened, and I wonder how that will affect their relationships with their family. Most especially Sasuke, Naruto, and the children. Definately can't wait until the next chapter. Also, so many reason to thank the author (u) for Kiba, we'd be lost without him :)
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