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By : mannahpierce

From bloodshound on March 12, 2011
keep doing what you're doing. I assure you. It's working. It'll be interesting to see how they tame a feral child... who's going to do it? Especially with the extra babies around?

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From ANON - V-Anon on March 11, 2011
So I feel that certainly after reading 172 Chapters in the Naruto fandom by you that I dang-well need to leave a review. I don't really remember when I started reading but I caught a brief glimpse of the summary, checked out the ch stats, fell over and started reading. I'm pretty sure my own productivity fell to about 10% while enthralled in this and I'm looking forward to the updates. I COULD have left a review for each chapter and thought about with some of your minor errors. I'm sorry my own selfishness prevented that cus I'm sure telling you there are errors and what not is more helpful when you know where they are. I was slightly more interested in reading the story ^^;. But I'm sure a review each chapter would have been nice. Sorry. I commend you for keeping track of all these characters. You have no idea how often I scurried over to the Naruto wikipedia cus I forget what each of the characters that weren't super major looked like and what not. I think its 172? I had to do math there...91+65+15+1? Meh I read everything you had going on. Good author =D. I also very much appreciate that you continue to update regularly as far as I can tell. Knowing that catching up with such a massive story wouldn't leave me hanging was pretty cool. I love your space world and as for the characters developing differently...I think you've done your job with them. In many ways this works well as a fanfiction because you take characters that the readers are familiar with and are accustomed to having certain roles and you use them and then they develop as they would where you put them. At the same time, you don't exploit that and you still give the characters the development which outrules anybody who says fanfic authors are lazy for using other people's work. My only thing is I'm still not sure how I feel about following characters through most of their lives :(. It's just always been something I find odd because they develop and you get used to that and then a lot of times it leads straight up to their deaths and that makes me sad. Usually books and stories take a section of a person's life and go from there and then end at some point in the pretty recent future. Obviously this isn't always the case but I'm going to stop now cus I'm not sure if I make sense. I'll definitely be keeping up with this but I'm sorry in advance if I don't review very often. I'm not in the habit of it even though I feel like I should be. And I don't usually have a lot to say so if I do finally get in the habit of leaving reviews for the wonderful people that take time to update then as long as you don't hate me for it very well might just be ':) thanks for the update'...or if you do something rather traumatizing to Shikamaru again it might go along the lines of ':( fix it' By the way I really like what you've done with Zetsu, the hybrids, and many of the relationships. I like the rest of the story but I figured I'd point out something specific for your benefit :D Also, I don't hate the children which is pretty epic on my part! Either I've matured as a reader or you're just that awesome.
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From suzannecmc on March 10, 2011
Ah, things will not be the same.
your process of their emotions and insecurities are a pleasure to watch evolve.

your Shikamaru reminds me a bit of John Forbes Nash Jr
of whom the book and movie "A Beautiful Mind" were about.

thanks for writing:)
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From ANON - xxShadowheartxx on March 10, 2011
I'm glad Naruto's okay with Shikamaru being more like Haru's father. Yay! now they're both home. Aw, Sasuke hugged Shika, so sweet.
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From missbri88 on March 10, 2011
Amazing ads always. I literally have to fight myself to wait for a few chapters to post before reading. I love this epic fiction and I can't imagine it not being here. I'm always looking forward to more and until then, see ya.
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From ANON - DONNITA on March 10, 2011
I felt a tad bit guilty that I have been devoting most of my time reading your saga and I never reviewed. I apologize. Thank you for such a wonderful story. I really enjoy it.
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From blugirlami21 on March 10, 2011
That was interesting. I love how you manage to show conflict in what should be the happiest of times. I like Naruto am on the fence about Shikamaru and Haru's erm bond or relationship. It's a hard situation. On the one hand both Sasuke and Naruto made the decision to make Shika a part of their family. They made him a parent almost without his consent. I don't think he would have refused but I don't think he would have chosen it either. I think in beginning Shika being a special Uncle to Haru worked for then because Naruto and Sasuke were his parents. But now that the Pein thing has happened Shika had to be Papa and To chan and now how does Haru make the distinction? As smart as Haru is at the end of the day he is a child and as smart as Shika is, he is kind of dense when it comes to Haru. He didn't seem to realize that his place in Haru's life had changed, that his demeanor and actions towards Haru are changed as well. How should it be? I think Shika should step back. As much as I love the bond that he and Haru share, I think at the end of the day Haru is Sasuke and Naruto's kid. I still think he should have a very important place in Haru's life but not as a parent but as a mentor maybe like Kakashi and Iruka are for Sasuke and Naruto respectively. I Shika and Neji may decide to have their own family one day and like Neji said the time is now to make their roles clear to Haru.

Sorry to right a novel but I think the relationships in this story are the glue to hold this whole thing together. I can't wait to see the new babies and I can't wait to see what will be done with the child that Ranmaru was cloned from. Will he to fall in love with Kono or will he fall in love with someone else? I also hope we see Haku's baby as well his reaction to another Ranmaru. Will this Ranmaru be different from the one we knew and loved?
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From ANON - richon on March 10, 2011
Yes they are back, I am so happy ,the family is finaly reunited. i am craving of joy !! see you sooon. love this story
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From Prism0467 on March 09, 2011
OH, that tugs at my heart. I am so glad he they are home and their family is whole again.

Now what?
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From roro237 on March 09, 2011
Could you hear me squealing and giggling with joy?:) When I read the tittle I went straight to Yea Baby woo!! I got a kick out of Naruto at the air lock:) That was so him! It was a good thing Sasuke had that talk with Naruto about they're one family not us or him. I LOVED everything in this chapter! The hug and I missed you from Sasuke was the icing on the cake:) Wow now what lies a head for Shika and Haru as far as getting back to normal?! I'm so happy that they're home! Oh and Neji is right Shika shouldn't keep asking Haru that question. ^_^
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From ANON - cynaga on March 09, 2011
IMPORTANT POST SCRIPT: Feel free to kill any character you see fit (including Naruto) - it's YOUR story.

ShikaxSasuke after the fact sounds nice to me...
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From ANON - cynaga on March 09, 2011
[ch.65] Fluffy family reunion at its BEST! Thanks so much for this chapter!!!
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From Dorkchic on March 09, 2011
I think it is awesome that Naruto could get past his personal issues and just be thankful that someone was there for his son when he needed it and that they are both home and safe.
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From ANON - smauigirl on March 09, 2011
Yet another excellent chapter, you truly are a gifted storyteller.
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From ANON - Kanazerosukenaru on March 09, 2011
OMG I'm totally joining prettypurpletiger's campaign to save Naruto.

No ShikaSasuke or SasukeShika please....NO NO NO!!!

I don't understand Sasuke's attraction to Shikamaru's "vulnerability", I just can't reconcile their friendship with attraction. If you are not going to save Naruto, please at least solidify Neji and Shika's relationship. Shika supposedly loved Neji so much that he was willing to play submissive which was not a role he was comfortable with, and now all of a sudden we are supposed to believe that he would play that role for Sasuke, who he has never admitted to beign in love with??

This is only the second time I've really disagreed with one of your plot twists....both the Haru situation and the Shika/Sasuke thing kinda make me sad....but I'm still going to keep on reading!!
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