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  • From ANON - lonelylulaby on July 21, 2011
    Hey it's me again, forgot the best part of the review...

    JA NE TILL NEXT TIME AND I CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPPY, YOU GUYS KEEP IT UP. Ya'll r my heroes, really, you get me trough my week
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  • From ANON - lonelylulaby on July 21, 2011
    Holy Cow!!! Is Sumiko a typed genius too, maybe of the lower class but still typed? And nobody was expecting it so they don't see her manipulation. HOW DOES NO ONE SEE THAT? I feel so bad for Haru, he just keeps on running into things he should not know, especially the info on Naruto. The umbilical cord idea isn't working??? this cant be Naruto MUST go back to normal. I know I said that I would get use to the idea of him using prosthetics but I lied. What's a Naruto if he cant run and frolic with his children. How if he suppose to be Sasuke's Guardian? Well I guess super genius Shika would be able to outfit him with the best, but still. He wont have time for that when caring for Sumiko. That child is evil, why did Shika decide to unpod her anyway?
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  • From Prism0467 on July 20, 2011
    That's your friend right there.

    Looks like you're working on a milestone review point. Congratulations on penning an outstanding fanfic!
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  • From blugirlami21 on July 20, 2011
    I love that Haru and Ran are such good friends but I am also amazed that Sumiko is able to manipulate so many smart people. Shikamaru is in crisis right now so he is excused but Neji, Kiba and Sasuke are all being fooled by a small child. She may be smart but she is still a child like any other. Kiba is really sleeping on the job. He has not to our knowledge talked to Biwako about Haru and that is mostly because his time is being consumed by Sumiko. I am still very worried that Haru's tablet and his forays into the data streams are not great things. I am so disappointed in Sasuke by his absence in with the kits now that Kiba is back and his disregard for Haru's opinion or feelings right now. Haru may be somewhat of a trouble maker but he is not a liar. He didn't have to believe Haru immediately but there should have been some consideration. I think it's good that Haru is trying to form bonds with other adults but I don't want his relationship with Shika to suffer for it. I hope either he or Ran speaks up sometime soon. Good chapter, there is so much food for thought here.
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  • From roro237 on July 20, 2011
    The little tike is growing:) I'm with Ran I wish he would tell Shik he loves him that might help him feel a little better. I wonder is the little princess a type genius to? That how she know how to pull all the big boys strings:) Time will tell huh?! ^_^
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  • From ANON - angelj232000 on July 20, 2011
    Congradulations on 100 chapters!!! Good job. I am happy the Haru has found a friend in Ran. I think Ran is right Haru just needs to tell Shika that he loves him & give him a big hug. That was all I wanted to to do this whole chapter was give Shika a big hug. I loved the interaction betweem Ran, Iruka & Kakashi, they are a cute family. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - silentnight on July 20, 2011
    Congratulations on 100 chapters. I love this story so much. Thank you for writing it.
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  • From ANON - telynaayuri on July 20, 2011
    im surprised that no one could see the pattern going on here.and kiba is pretty good at seeing things. shika i can understand with how busy he is but not kiba.
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  • From YamanashiOchinashiIminashi on July 20, 2011
    Congratulations on the 100th chapter! It's still as great as it always!
    I didn't mean anything when I pointed out about that -kun suffix. I know it's just a matter of a custom or whatever.
    I'm glad that Ran turned out to be such a smart and actually great kid.
    I'm looking forward to at least another 100 chapters!
    Thank you for sharing this story with us!
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  • From ANON - Aflyingmonkey123 on July 20, 2011
    Ooooo Haru! This is a very depressed atmosphere. I can not wait for Naruto to come back... I miss the fluffy one soo much!
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  • From satterb on July 20, 2011
    Awwww! This is so sad and terrible that I can hardly bear it! I know that you always have things work out for the best, seeing Haru so distraught is hard to witness. I love this story, and I look forward to seeing it updated! Thank you so very much for all your hard work!
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  • From ANON - xxShadowheartxx on July 20, 2011
    Poor Haru.... Sumiko is being a brat. Shikamaru should be about to see that. I like Ran, he's being a good friend. And I'm really hoping the Zetzus are going to be in the story more. I really like them.
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  • From Dorkchic on July 20, 2011
    Once again I feel horrible for Shika and Haru. Shika is being manipulated by a selfish, mean, attention whore in toddler form and Haru is suffering in silence because he cannot find a way to convince anyone of what is happening without looking selfish and mean himself. Shika is too overwhelmed to see what is happening and even if he could, his sense of guilt over all that has happened would keep him from doing to much about it. It is one of those occasions where you wish that Iruka was back in the playroom because I guarantee that he would see that nonsense and nip it in the bud. Maybe Ran could talk to Iruka. Then maybe Iruka could talk to Shika and help him set aside some of his guilt. Either way I hope the children talk to Sasuke en masse about how horrible Sumiko is being and how her nasty selfish behavior is affecting everyone- children and adults alike.
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  • From cynaga on July 20, 2011
    [ch 100] One of your best chapters and they are all wonderful. You are a masterful story teller of psychological drama. I loved this insightful line: "It did not help that Haru thought about things again and again. That meant he got hurt again and again." Your characters are rich and immediate. You bring them to life in very short order by showing the core of their beings via their actions and thoughts. I'm really impressed and feel a bit guilty that you spend so much time on this fanfic when you should be writing your own sci-fi novel for publication...
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  • From Nescafevh on July 20, 2011
    Ran's pretty smart when he wants to be. But why doesn't he tell Iruka and Kakashi about the "spoilt little brat". I mean Iruka will understand and I'm positive beleive him. He would even (him or Kakashi) do something about it.If Ran tells them he knows that Haru is suffering because of it and he KNOWS what's happening is the truth because he can 'sence' it.
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