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From ANON - aked_n on January 07, 2015
This was amazing. I'm so glad I found this fic. It makes me want to buy a gecko for myself. :) I loved how the fic went the whole way through their relationship and explored the consequences of Naruto's deception and Sasuke's reaction to it, then Naruto and Sasuke's past relationship history when Sakura was introduced (it worked well that she had a connection to the both of them), and then their past family baggage through the deaths of Kyuubi and Itachi. I have no complaints as the fic did an excellent job of developing the characters and the pairing.

If I had one small critique, it would be with Itachi. I liked the way the story handled Naruto and Kyuubi because Kyuubi was introduced into the story fairly early. He was the reason why Naruto agreed to date Sasuke after all. Similarly, the fic did a good job with the Sakura-related plot since she showed up right from the beginning and there were early hints she was the girl Naruto pined for. I didn't feel that the setup for Itachi was handled as thoroughly as the other two. I think it was especially important that we got more with him because not only was he the whole reason why Sasuke became as cruel as he did (it was a necessary part of Sasuke's character development to know a bit more about why he was so self-destructive much sooner in the fic), but also because Itachi was such a malevolent figure that the fic save him as the story's final antagonist. If the confrontation with Itachi is how we're going to end up, then there should have been more setup and foreshadowing with him. I had pretty much forgotten about him until he showed up. Because of the comparative lack of attention he received, he ended up feeling like a last-minute addition to the story, and one that you could have almost done without. I can't say that about the Kyuubi and Sakura plotlines, both were too well-integrated into the story, but I could say that about the short Itachi arc. I think if you wanted Naruto to have some final second thoughts about being with Sasuke, Itachi wasn't an absolutely necessary way to illustrate that. Something else could have been a trigger of that. Or Naruto's second-thoughts in general didn't need to be included in the fic because he's spent the entire story prior to hooking up with Sasuke having second thoughts about being with a man. In a way, to hear him having second thoughts yet again had gotten a bit too frustrating a redundant at that point when matters had finally been settled.

I think the introduction of Itachi should have been more about Sasuke than it was, about him finally getting rid of the last piece of his past that had set him on a self-destructive path. In a way it was, but because we hadn't gotten much insight into Sasuke's past prior to itachi showing up, the conflict with Itachi didn't have the kind of resonance in the story that it could have for Sasuke. There was so muh on how Kyuubi's coma and Sakura's rejection had shaped Naruto into the person he was, but not nearly enough on how Itachi had shaped Sasuke into a person who lived for cruelty and who didn't care about himself. After all, wasn't it these very traits that forced Sasuke's friends to "buy" Naruto in the first place. Other than Temari's speech where she explained to Sasuke why they were worried about him, we never got to see enough of that self-destructive Sasuke. I think seeing more of that side of Sasuke would have benefited the fic a lot, and this is where more development with the Itachi plotline would have paid dividends. Ultimately, I think we got to know Naruto a bit better than we did Sasuke (at least what made Naruto tick and what turned him into the person he was), which is a bit strange because Sasuke got more page-time, I think.

Having said that, it isn't as though I found Sasuke's character arc to be unsatisfying because I think he changed the most of any character in the story, including Naruto, but I think the setup for those changes was a little lacking. We never got to see the conflicts that turned him into the person we met at the beginning of the fic, which also meant that we couldn't appreciate as much the work that he put in to stop being that person at the end. We finally got to find out a bit of it at the very end, but that was after Sasuke had already finished changing. I think it would have been more meaningful to know about it sooner, while he was still in the process of changing. We could have cheered him on more and better appreciated why nice people like Hinata and Temari would care so much about what happens to him that they, as poor college students, would pay a stranger $500 to try and fix him. At the end, they all seemed to know about Itachi and were cautious about mentioning him to Sasuke, so they must have had some idea of how Itachi had traumatized him (maybe how Sasuke used to be before the Itachi incident) and that's why they gave Sasuke so much leeway? It's hard to say. I read the entire fic over the period of a couple of days, so maybe I missed it, but why weren't Sasuke's parents at the funeral? Are they dead? Why wouldn't they come otherwise? I think this is another glaring spot that indicated how much the fic neglected Sasuke's past. We knew all about Sasuke's family troubles but not enough about Sasuke's. It was mentioned multiple times and discussed at length about how Naruto ended up with Tsunade, but the situation with Sasuke, his parents, and Itachi wasn't discussed enough that it made an impression on me and Sasuke's parents being dead (or hating Itachi so much that they wouldn't even go to his funeral) is really one of those things that should have made an impression.

Anyway, I feel bad because I talked so much about the one thing I didn't like in the story but not enough about all the things I did like. It's hard because I liked so much that I can't be as specific. It was easy to be specific with the Itachi thing because that was just one thing. Yeah, as I said, I really liked the character and pairing development. I think despite the situation, nothing in the story felt forced. I felt like Naruto and Sasuke genuinely came to like each other, that there was a real friendship there as a basis for their feelings, which is rare because so many pairing fics rely on love at first sight because the writers don't know how to develop a couple without forcing instant-lust onto them. I especially appreciated the scene where Sasuke's friends were all sitting around and reflecting that even if they had done nothing and hadn't paid Naruto to date Sasuke, everything would have still turned out the way that it did. Sasuke fell for Naruto all on his own, and with Sasuke chasing him, Naruto would have fallen for Sasuke anyway (and then Sakura would have shown up anyway), so in the end, they really didn't need to do anything. I liked that scene because the writing of the fic was strong enough that I really agreed with them. These two were always meant to be together, and that's why the fic felt natural and not forced.

So anyway, thanks for a great fic! I hope you're still writing somewhere, whether it's fanfics or originals, you've got a great gift! (BTW, you should also consider posting your works to ff.net and AO3, then we can favorite them--and reread them!--and you'd never be in danger of losing them again since they'd be on multiple websites.)
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From ANON - flaming rose on November 05, 2012
��Did anyone else just orgasm?��This was��fantastic! I loved the way you kept so uniquely to the the charecter's personalites! The drama was so on-the-edge-of-your-seat exciting, I didn't know if I would be able to go on reading! Seriously, I had to stop and remind myself to breath several times! And the way you put Sasuke-san and Naruto-kun's realationship together? It was absoultly��breath-taking! 'So realistic! I could actualy see this happening in the manga if you tweaked around the setting and theme of the manga a bit! I didn't offened you did I? I hope not, 'cause that last sentence��I just- I dunno (Please forgive the slang-like writing. I just couldn't resist. I don't usual write like that, so please don't be offened.)it seemed��for lack of a better word- mean. So I'm sorry if I did offened you. It wasn't my intention. I seem to be using the word 'offened' a lot in this review. Huh. All well, stuff happens, right? (Insert goofy sime and bunny wiggle.) Anyway, I LOVED THIS SOOOOO MUCH!!!!! (Burst into tears.) I would absoultely love to read more of your fanfictions if they're anything like this! THANK YOU SOOOOOOOO MUCH!!! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
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From Kingcobra on April 17, 2010
Thanks for re-posting this. I've been looking to re-read it and now I can. The fic is just as good and well-written as I remember. Thanks. :D
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