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From AndersonRae on March 24, 2010
Hihi! I'd really just like to encourage you to keep it up with this story! I really like it. ^^ I understand how frustrating it is to see your number of Hits keep rising, and yet, no reviews. -____-
Or maybe that only happens to me... T.T
Heh, Whateverrr. But anywho! I really cant wait for the next chapter and I can't wait to see the other characters (and your new Kohona High way of portraying them)
But seriously, when I first began the story, I was a bit iffy, but after a few more paragraphs I'm hooked ^^
Though, I could due without Naruto wearing the orange. Not exactly flattering. xD
But I guess if that floats Sasuke's boat...

I'm really psyched for this!
I wanna see whats nextttt!!!
Can't wait! I'll be keeping this story on check! Hope you update soon!
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From ANON - Kat on March 24, 2010
Okay, so the precipitous jump into a wild UST might have detracted from the realism of the fic. IMHO That might not have been a good move given that this is already a high school AU. For somebody who likes NaruSasu, the set-up seems dangerously favorable to SasuNaru, in an all-too-clich� way. One thing that I find completely redefines the quality of the plot-in spite of how clich� the setting might be - is humanity of characters. I hope Naruto doesn�t heed Sasuke�s warning and challenges him into a new type of situation Sasuke is not an expert in handling. I hope Naruto has the audacity to show Sasuke that they are equal and has the ability to prove it, because such challenges aren�t really uttered in words. One possible scenario might be Naruto proving to be a formidable opponent, and Sasuke ditching his groupies to sooth his wounded pride only to be bested again/win but with a lot less of a margin than he is comfortable with. Another thing a lot of fangirls seem to dismiss is Naruto�s bone-deep wisdom. He can filter out bravado and insults that aren�t meant, and feel - not see- but feel �underneath the underneath.� Maybe be they could work out a sort of fighting ritual, where they could meet up with some periodicity to pummel each other and discover things about each other along the way. And maybe one day Naruto ends up walking �or carrying- him home and glimpses Sasuke�s helpless anger at his brother�or maybe something else personal slips out, something that doesn�t fit the image of a perfect Ice King. I also really, really hope to see Sakura who isn�t as spiteful and shallow as it may seem after this first meeting. I always thought that Sakura fell in love with Sasuke not just for the pretty face but for the fact that he was a challenge and she was an ambitious girl. I cannot begin to tell you how wonderful it would be to see Sakura who doesn�t just take science classes but actually interns at a hospital, knows how the grunt work feels like. Sakura who is strong enough to, on occasion, see Sasuke�s fa�ade for what it is and admit to herself that he doesn�t love her in the same capacity as she loves him. I think Sakura could provide an invaluable observer in this story. Naruto doesn�t ruminate, analyze or observe, not in a same way an analytical mind of a scientist would. Sakura who knows people, knows many expressions of pain would be able to pick up on and catalogue the small changes in Sasuke and relay them to us readers. What would also be refreshing is to have Naruto whose entire world does not revolve around Sasuke. What are his dreams? Professional sports? Martial arts? Personal training? Military of sorts? Or perhaps, international relations, public relations? Poli sci? How is he going to achieve them? Plenty of room to work in Jiraya and Kakashi. And Naruto needs good friends, too.
How would it be to write about Naruto and Kiba�s pranks? I�ve never read a fic that would actually include them plotting and executing something together -more is the pity. Our HS had a senior prank day; this poor school is controlled by a tight ass, now that is just wrong! As a matter of fact, it would be a nice way of turning a rigidly ordered, controlled existence of Sasuke�s pet project that is Konoha High topsy-turvy. Imagine how it would piss the bastard off. *Cackles evilly!*
And whatever embarrassing fact about his sex life Sasuke would rather die but have revealed can be revealed by Sai, who could never be accused of having tact. And, really, Sai is just plain to funny a character to pass up. And whenever thinking needs to be done, Naruto can do it in the company of a lazy pot-head - three guesses what his name is-with a brilliant mind. And if you find some room for his college junior girlfriend with harsh words and dominatrix tendencies I would swear by your name!
All in all, I hope this fic takes you on a fun adventure. In the meantime, I will keep my fingers crossed hoping that this fic will evolve into NaruSasuNaru or SasuNaruSasu (where the smut is concerned) and Sasuke will have an opportunity to kiss Naruto�s tan ass.
Either way, I am a firm believer that inspiration is key. Here is a list of really great authors!
http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=1296817925
http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=21931
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http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1502718/Rasengan22
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http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1219874/Hedonistic_Opportunist
http://www.fanfiction.net/u/535071/Alcyone23
And this is an awesome community which definitely could use more members! http://community.livejournal.com/naruxsasu/
And this one, seasonal and full of fresh new things! http://community.livejournal.com/sn_exchange/
Among other fics there, be sure to check out one titled Tabula Rasa. It will blow your mind.
Anyhow, I have finals right around the corner that I should really be studying for, but I hope you enjoy and get inspire to write more!

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From GudenMulle on March 23, 2010
What a lovely welcome our dear Naruto had :P. Really looking forward to the next chapter. Please don't make Naruto a weakling, he might have his mouth going for him (or against, depending on your view), but let him be talented at fighting or something, don't let him be weak ;).
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From SamaSurreal on March 22, 2010
I am soooooooooooo in love with your story! It has an awesome boast to it that I can't describle. Meaning, I'm gonna wanna read more! Keep them coming! And could I say, I would love to be your beta?
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From Dorkchic on March 22, 2010
I don't think Sakura has a boyfriend. She sounds like one of those slutty girls who dresses like a tramp for attention. They also act like a total bitches because they think they are better than all the other girls because they are not a virgins anymore and as a result are grown women. I think she has (as usual) latched on to Sasuke and refuses to listen when he tells her that they are not dating. At best he might have had sex with her occasionally. Knowing Sakura... if they have slept together then she is probably lording it over all the other girls that 'Sasuke-kun' chose her and obviously loves her regardless of what Sasuke says. Sasuke probably barely tolerates her presence because she spreads her legs for him.
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From Repanse on March 22, 2010
What will Sasuke do to Naruto? I hope he'll do yummy things to him!
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From hisoka on March 22, 2010
at the beginning i thought there was going to be someone just poaring glass shards out the window or something.that schools a wreck hows tsunade deal with that and manage it especially with someone claiming to own every part of the school even the freakin skeletal of the place.i like the way some of the things twist in this story so far things you expect to happen dont happen like narutos crush just sizzled away because she was well...a bitch(in lack of a better word)how he wasnt actually suppose to be in kibas class.like the way things are rolling now all he needs is friends and things may be a bit more barable for our main character. hope you can update soon loving it really
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From KoibitoFemme on March 22, 2010
I really hope you update soon. I like how you have Naruto so human and not a walking joke or a complete idiot. He is funny and seems approachable like a real teen. I have read some well done stories but some are so cliche with the ramen obsession or he just doesn't seem real. You can't really connect with him much. But you have it down pact. Also if you need a beta let me know. Nothing seriously wrong just a few misused words but then again no one is perfect I have the same issues at time. I need a beta myself.
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From maegerakawaii on March 22, 2010
At first I thought Sakura was just suffering from wishful thinking again and was falsely claiming Sasuke as her boyfriend. After seeing how scary Sasuke could be though, I started thinking that maybe she might not be that stupid. Good luck to Naruto. He will definitely need it. And we all know that he really will eventually end up as Sasuke's bitch. At least I hope so. XD I can't wait to see what happens next.
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From katsuyapup on March 22, 2010
wow, an interesting start, hope that naruto puts up a fight. love to read more good luck.
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From Stacy on March 21, 2010
i love high school fics!! although, if i remember correctly....no never mind it was *cough 20 years cough* a long time ago. lol!! anyway, i can't wait to read more and if no one else is willing i will gladly kiss narutos' tan ass. :) please update soon....i want more sexy and mean sasuke!!!
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