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By : Sheemashelin

From ANON - wolves2000 on September 16, 2010
awsome story man
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From ANON - weskerism on August 08, 2010
Hey!!! Long time no see! I would really like to update and review your story on live journal but I can't seem to find your page. I haven't been able to read your stories because I have finals and graduation to prepare for; and this is the first day I had a chance to relax! It was great to see that you updated and I will check out the other story you are co-writing. I kind of knew that Sakura and Sai were going to get some time together. Still love the story!!!
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From ANON - TheIceMan on July 08, 2010
Wow so she is going to keep the baby. Now that is a strong woman.
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From therar on June 24, 2010
Okay, first of all i must bow my head in shame because the time i reviewed was WAY back at Madara's chapter. *takes the beating*

Strategizing:
.I love Iruka's need to control foul language despite Shikamaru trying to save all their lives, he's such a Mother at heart sometimes.
.You've done an effective of keeping everyone's physical conditions accurate to the atmosphere and their situation, like Lee's intimidation and Sai's weariness. too many ppl forget those small detials taht enhance the danger.
.Sai outfit is interesting but you're right, it does make seem older and probably thinner underneath a thick coat like that. I still approve of the fiv o'clock shadow ^_^
.Akamaru seems to be Sai's outlet for his more human side, not like showing that would really bother him but Akamaru doesn't look at Sai the way others do which means Sai can freely be affectionate or how ever he pleases and Akamaru would just see it as how his new companion is.
.when you descirbed that sadistic grin in the shadows; i had the sudden image of barry the butcher from FMA and i physically shivered.
.I want lee's coat lol and i notice you seem to favour knee high boots too/

Oto:There's a lot of intense danger in this chapter and the fact that karin has her powers severly limited really builds up the aniticapation. Again, all those small details like her toes being scraped and repressed shudders really bring the fear to life. Also. if you've been beaten, gang raped and then eaten, how much worse could it get!? lol

matsuri:I've never really conected with Matsuri as a character but her torment could arose a snake's sympathy. I get the feeling that Gaara wishes he could break down too but either won't let himself of he's not really sure how to anymore and needs Matsuri to do it for him.

Left Standing:I'm terrible at these often skip though them when they appear in stories but you're ability to add a last minute twist had me compelled to read it thoroughly. loved Tenten's given order: get mean with mallet man. I'm sure that's a technical term used by many professinal fighters lol when 1010 cut through the guy's chest, I half expeted it to deflate like a balloon. I was touched by Hinata's moment of prayer, it's just like her to show a sliver of sympathy even for a condemed creature. Again, i adore Iruka's position in the group; the overseeing parent and former teacher watching his flock grow and prosper. It's a combination of pride and loss because they will always be your kids.
Don't you dare even suggest that Lee could be dead again! (please) i was desperateyl trying to fight off the thought that he may be dead or dying and nice save with 'unique outfit' lol

Cruelty: this distinction you've created for madara/tobi has left me quite curious. everyone takes the personality of tobi to be a very clever alias but you've invented something a bit more crafty and dangerous because split personas are very manipulative and dominating over each other and those around them. "we see things in shades of red", that was a stroke of genius in one line and has so many connotations to it too. Perfect!

Neji: THe hyuuga seems to be taking everything pretty hard both physically and mentally and needs work to keep his mind off it all. The constant paranoia and weariness are huge signs of growing depression which leads me to think that Neji is a ticking time bomb. will he take it out on the wrong person or just continue as he is until it finally breaks him apart? I get the same feeling for Gaara's well being too. when you put these two ppl together it's liek they're both pulling on thin rope from different ends.

Seeing Blind: The title immediately gave me hope for one of my fav Uchihas and worry for his circumstances. The descriptions remind of the out-of-body-exprience theory and it's quite fitting. The sense of existing but the dread of it might not really being there would scare the shit out of anyone but it would still have you in disbelief at the same time.

Waking: Yay! i'm caught up now ^_^ I thini Sakura suits the grey look but what does she expect with all the stress she's under. too bad tsunade didn't teach her how to cover up the afte effects of using dangerous jutsu's like that.

BITCHSLAP to the FACE!! we all knew it was coming but we still went "WAHHHHH TAKE IT YOU BITCH"

for some reason picturing Gaara being carried by Akamaru had me going 'awwwwww' and then i thought if the red head falling off and just laughed. I'm loving this bad-ass 'don't piss me off today or die' mood Sai's got going. he's got every reason to have it though. i'd love to see him take it out some unsuspecting victim or circumstance.

take care and keep writing ^______^ also, you're little note about 'Pretty' is vert much appreciated
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From ANON - TheIceMan on June 22, 2010
Still liking how this is going. Can't wait to read more.
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From solitare1 on June 22, 2010
So does this chapter mean that Naruto isn't dead?? I hope he can somehow survive. I feel like just accepting the pairings you write. Good job.
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From ANON - jayray557 on June 15, 2010
OMG! I love this story, I have a strong feeling that this chapter was either about Naruto, or Kyuubi, but I may be wrong. I can't wait to read the next chapter!! This story is completly awesome, and amazing, and really speaks to my dark side... Tehehe. Kudos to you!
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From ANON - TheIceMan on June 06, 2010
You did another wonderful job with chapter 12. The dark side of rape was a twist for me since I hate hearing about it in real life. But she got her revenge on the bastard.
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From ANON - Irish on June 01, 2010
I'd really like to see Sakura x Gaara, or Sakura x Sai. Lee x Karin might be interesting as well. After all, horrifying circumstance make people bond who normally wouldn't, and it would be a bit different than the Lee fanfics I've heard before. Keep on the updates! I've been riveted since chapter one ^_^ I've got kids, so I haven't had the chance to review yet (I think).

xx

Irish
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From ANON - weskerism on May 31, 2010
OH HELL YEAH!!! Kisame is still alive and you also answered my probing question about Zetsu! You totally ROCK! I almost forgot about the surviving members of the Akatsuki. Since you are still considering pairings...how about Kisame/Hinata? I think Kisame needs a little loooovvveee don't you think? Also, what about Lee and Karin? I think from the other chapter that would give you be a nice setup to start. Did I mention that you totally ROCK...oh yeah I think I did.^_^ I hope you update soon I need more! Have a nice Memorial Day!!!
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From Overlordofnobodies on May 30, 2010
Good chapter.It show a lot of new thing. I was happy to see Zetsu is well and creep as ever.He and Kisame were are my favs. So I hope to see Kisame some time soon.
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From ANON - TheIceMan on May 30, 2010
I love the thought that went into this story and can't wait to read more.

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From ANON - anonymous on May 25, 2010
Another awesome chapter Zimmrie Kanoah, also thanks for the dedication. I will also keep a look out for anymore of your stories, thanks for the considering my request ^_^.

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From Overlordofnobodies on May 25, 2010
Sorry for not reviewing.Work has been take most of my time. As well a few thing heppen that made me not fill up to read a dark fic but that should be in the past. I just read though the chapter a bit fast but it look like your story is good as all was. I like a few but changes you made { Juugo have a third stage and make Shikamaru jutsu a bloodline as well as it not working in shadow.Witch I never get why that work in the manga Chapter 108 page 1} I'm all so happy to see that Karin is a live and well.

I hope to see your next chapter soon and I hope I can review it to.
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From ANON - weskerism on May 24, 2010
THANKS FOR THE MUCH APPRECIATED DEDICATION!!! I like the filler chapters, it gives the characters a greater opportunity to build depth within their identities. That being said...bring on the kick ass fight scene!!! Glad to be of help on the pairings even though only one of mine made it into the story; but hey that is better than nothing. Don't worry about Sakura (I'll just suffer in silence when it comes to her) and hopefully you can work your magic writing mojo on her! Still love where this story is going and can't wait for more. Don't really have any words of wisdom for you but still have much love for you! Again, thanks for the dedication it made my day! (Sad isn't it...LOL) TA TA FOR NOW!
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