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Reviews for Entropy

By : ersatzbeta
  • From petiteneko on March 21, 2010
    Lol, hey It's perfectly fine where you left off. It's a great place to do so. Really liked last two chapters - eh, I'm not much of a 'review every chapter' girl, so I hope you don't mind that. Doing good so far. Don't worry Kakashi seems to be pretty in character to me, and I'm hoping to see more of his revelations and more of the plot unfolding. ^^
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  • From petiteneko on March 15, 2010
    Bah, was going to reply last chapter but got too caught up IRL lol. These last two chapters are great, even if you think they are rather icky. I know that feeling though haha, seeing as I am currently dealing with that situation as well. So far so good and peaking my interest still. Looking forward to your next issue ^^
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  • From arabuzumaki on March 15, 2010
    Did he break the ting that Sasuke calls a heart with his monologue >.> That was a bit much, he knows that Sasuke reacts badly to not getting his way even if he doesn't show it. And he should think of it as more than sex. What about Sasu's collection of junk/scraps most centered around him :/
    I'm looking forward to see where this goes/
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on March 14, 2010
    Still loving this :D Gai particularly made me smile - I love how he just grins and muscles his way through awkwardness And oh man, awkwardness... Ha ha, poor Sauce, having to be on the receiving end of that conversation! But I also wonder if Kakashi's been leading him on a little, without realizing it? XD I kind of think he has. Ha ha, I don't imagine that Kakashi maintained eye contact the whole time Sasuke was standing there, damp and flushed and stretching before training XD And Sasuke might be a little off, but he's not entirely unobservant ^^

    I look forward to more! :)
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on March 07, 2010
    Ah, I love this very much :D I really enjoyed their conversation, about going to the memorial - it felt so tense, and at the same time it was kind of a relief to read. And then the actual visit made me happy :D I like how gradually you're making Kakashi understand Sasuke - and how gradually you're making Sasuke act anything approaching "normal." That last chapter, I felt like I let out a breath I'd been holding - after thirteen chapters of tension, the little bit more increased understanding made it feel like everything was *okay*. Love the part where Sasuke's walking in front of him... reeeeally love the part where Kakashi puts his hand where Sasuke's was at the door.

    I'm enjoying this story so much!

    (have you thought about posting up at y-gallery or LJ? It seems like the readers here are much less likely to review anything at all these days - and I know you're not writing for reviews, but I also know you like to talk about writing with people. And those sites make it a lot easier, especially since you can reply to comments and whatnot.)
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  • From petiteneko on March 06, 2010
    These three updates were good, and don't sound off, rushed or anything XD They sound perfectly fine to me. Probably a belated response too but I actually like it when relationships built and do not just rush into the smut (even though that's pretty good too. Good job so far ^^
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  • From arabuzumaki on February 25, 2010
    lol Sasuke reminds me of Smeagol with his little trinkets ^_^
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  • From Yuliya2009 on February 25, 2010
    Maybe your thinking of OCD? There's a lot that cause the whole "collect of things" disorder or "Compulsive Hoarding". I'd help you out but I'm not sure if your basing all of Sasuke of this disorder, or just this one chapter...
    Good chapter other wise! We really are getting to see just how far gone Sasuke has become from his oldself. Are We going to get any flashbacks or such that explain a bit more on how Sasuke became of traumatized?
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  • From Yuliya2009 on February 24, 2010
    Oh I'm really enjoying this story! read it all in one day. I love reading stories that show sasuke as having this sort of problem. I'm going to keep check, keep going!
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on February 22, 2010
    This is so good!!! :D I've been neglecting my reading at aff, but now I'm getting caught up ^^ I'm up to chapter seven, and loving it :)

    I love how Kakashi's slowly learning his way around Sasuke. Your Sasuke is so interesting to read - so broken and dangerous, but there's something about him that hints that he's not irredeemable. In this chapter, I especially liked the lines about Sasuke needing him, and how simple it was. Very powerful. And I love that Kakashi's had to nurse him back to health - ha ha, Kakashi as a nurse XD Their interaction in the hospital was really cool, too - I love Kakashi's dialogue, so cool and *Kakashi* in the midst of the tense, possibly dangerous situation.

    Now I'm going to read more! I'm excited about them building a house XD
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  • From petiteneko on February 18, 2010
    This story is interesting! I like the plot and whatnot, it also is very in character. It makes me envy how you can easily keep Kakashi in character while I always seem to have trouble with it (I'm currently editing the crap out of one of my fanfictions in order to keep Kakashi in character) I also agree with your opinion of Sasuke's character as well. I look forward to your next update ^^
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on February 07, 2010
    I'm really enjoying this, and so excited to see a canon multichapter with these characters! I love the way Naruto took care of the prison situation. I also really dig the damaged, dangerous, somehow fragile way you write Sasuke's character - and Kakashi's reactions to him :) This is great!
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