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Reviews for Undercurrents

By : Darkprism

From Twiggies on January 29, 2010
Oh my! This is just getting hotter and hotter! And more interesting too.
And Shikamaru is now more.. how should I say it.. He allowes more? Yeah. And that good!

The dancing (humping more like it) with Neji, Shika and Kiba was so sexy!
I'm actually more of a sub!Neji fan, but this is just too good to pass.
The plot is great and you have written the characters so well!
Certainly not porn without plot. :D

I hope you keep writing and updating like you always do: fast!
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From ANON - Tarn Vedra 5 on January 29, 2010
You are killing me!!!!!! I can't wait for next chapter and I just adore and love when you potray exterior or interior of places, clubs, houses ...

Ah, don't make such cliffhangers... Write soon.
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From cynaga on January 28, 2010
This is the most fantastically delicious story~! (more, more, more ... pls)
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From ANON - em0baby on January 28, 2010
Normally, I dont review stories [cause im lazy&stuff] but this fic is just mind-blowing&I dont just meant the sex scenes only *winks*
I really like Shikamaru's "like-to-please-streak" i think my panties imploded when i read that
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From jordash00 on January 27, 2010
Hmm....

I see your point. The decadent hero could not find love because he was too much of an egotist and a narcissist as well. However, I just find myself seeing Dorian Gray in your Neji. Actually I see him in Neji and Shika as a double sided coin. I see the Dorian before he becomes corrupt; his beauty, innocence, his youth. Moreso his innocence to all that is around him and even his own desires. I see Neji as Dorian after the corruption, the endless pursuit for beauty in his pursuit of Shika, although he doesn't dispose of him once he "attains him" and of course his pursuit of pleasure. And then there is Neji's beauty which is the obvious, his control, his uncanny ability to manipulate, and although warped in Dorian, his honesty. Now, these are the ONLY aspects in which I see Dorian in these characters you have created, but in the end, Dorian does seek redemption which in a way, doesn't Neji and Shika in some way? I say this having read the fic in it's entirety.

Now, regarding the Gaara fic. I am usually not a fan of Gaara but considering that you are writing him - just please for the love of all fangirls give the man some eyebrows! Now, from what you said about the fic and his violent tendencies I just have this image in my head that equates him to Alex de Large in A Clockwork Orange; the book, not the movie. I have been reading that book recently and for some odd reasons, Alex just popped in my head. Now that's a character for you. A 15 year old with ultra-violent tendencies and a propensity to link classical music to violence to the point where he can experience extreme heights of pleasure by achieving orgasm without physical touch while listening to Beethovan and thinking about violent acts????? Psycho? Genius? Hedonist? or something else? I hope that your Gaara is not like that, but if he is even close, that story will truly be interesting especially in that decadent world you have created. Again, as long as he has eyebrows!

If you indeed would like to converse, you can PM me under the same name at fanfiction.net. You are one of those fic writers who writes with depth in her stories. Don't get me wrong, I love the fluff, smut, etc. However, I truly appreciate a fic that causes me to truly think, analyze, and use a bit of logic to figure out the characters and plot. And when I can equate a piece or a writer to "cannon" or the "classics" forget it! I'm all over it. And thank you for causing me to Recall and Ponder!
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From ANON - I_Want_Vassalord on January 26, 2010
Complete and utter awesome!!! Im so glad that people are loving the NejiShika!!!! And you update so fast! My goodness! YAYZ!!!

That was super duper HOT!!! I love that Neji gets off on touch and obedience! Yumm~~~ gonna read the others~!!
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From jordash00 on January 26, 2010
Although done so many times, I cannot help but balk at the dynamic that you have created between these two characters. It's almost tangible what is between them. It's electric. And the control that Neji exudes with regards to his own body in understanding Shika's needs, Neji's own pleasure in wanting to please Shika, and his own ability to control himself is mindblowing in the sense that who wouldn't want to let go of themselves regardless of a damaging past and submit.

Your Neji is reminicent of the Decandent hero - indulgent, hedonistic, and beautiful. And many will probably want to hang me for this next comment but.... Your descriptions of clothing, places, character interaction, intimacy, and emotion is close to that of the Decadent and Aesthetic period. Oscar Wilde is probably rolling in his grave, but then again, he'd probably appreciate your "Art for Art sake" as well as your homoerotic themes.

Your attention to detail is phenominal - and that is the focus of my review for these two chapters. Oh how I look forward for the upcoming chapters!
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From mannahpierce on January 26, 2010
I am enjoying this story so much - it's the first one I look for when I check for updates. I wish I could write erotic scenes half so well. Thank you.
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From YojiKato on January 26, 2010
My sis came to visit this past weekend so I had to forego reading fics. But now I'm up to speed with this and terribly happy with how it's progressing!! I'm really enjoying how you're developing the relationship between Shika and Neji and look forward to reading more!! ^_^
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From NarutoVixin on January 26, 2010
i just saw this on here and saw that its behind your ygal page lol i think ill keep my eye on that page more then this one
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From jordash00 on January 25, 2010
Thank you! And I truly appreacite you for posting this here!

I missed chapter 3 so this is a double review.

Chapter 3 -

As much as I want to focus on Neji and Shika in this chapter, I find myself drifting to Naruto and Sasuke here, and I guess it is because of the precedent you set with posting the other fics here first. Just with this little window you have given us into their relationship here, the never ending "power struggle" between them is so evident. Yet at the same time, Sasuke's desire to be tamed and loved by his Naruto is to prominent that it's almost burting through the seems just from that little exchange."I'd like to see you try" One can only imagine the ride home in the car that night. And I am sure that Sasuke is going to love every minute of it! And again, the fact that they were able to frazzle Neji, just makes me fall in love with your characterization of him because it shows that Neji is human in this fic because he is capable of emotions other than those on the "extreme" end of the spectrum.

Chapter 4 -

Where do I even begin? I just wanted to print this chapter out, grab a cup of tea, a pen and a highlighter, and get to work with the critiquing. This chapter was just loaded with so much, and I could go on for days because of it! The dynamic that you begin to set up here is multi-layered. On one level you have Shika who wants to submit because he needs to but is still holding on to his control because of something that has gone on his past. And of course Shika's classic case of not being able to let go because he is thinking too much or still in his head. Then on another level, you have Neji, who is clueless as to Shika's state of mind but must establich some sort of dominance but at a slow pace in order to get Shika out of his head. Within those levels, there are more levels dealing with their emotions: both have anxiety, Neji's anger, confusion, and lust at wanting Shika but now only able to "get at" him but so much but not knowing why which leads to more frustration", Shika's confusion in dealing with wanting Neji but not being able to go far because of his past, anger, frustration, etc) And the beauty of it all? It wasn't even about the sex! (I am probably going to say that about a million times throughout this fic) Don't get me wrong, the intimacy was HOT, but that's just it, in my head, it was more about intimacy and breaking down barriers as opposed to just sex. And just look at the positioning you chose for this initial contact - A dominant sexual position - Neji in back giving orders. Yet in such a capacity where Shika could see everything and even "get up" if he needed to. And Shika was in the submissive state - bearing his front and throat (not to equate it to animals, but you get my point!). And again, at the end of this exchnage, you allowed Neji to be human because Shika LEFT him! YEA!

All in all, I am inspired my your talent! There are so many facets to this fic and the depth of this baffles me as I sit and read for a second time. You are truly talented!
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From ANON - lo on January 24, 2010
I like this. I think Neji's pursuit of Shikamaru is somewhat sweet. I can't wait to see what you do with this.
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From ANON - Tarn Vedra 5 on January 24, 2010
This is really great story. I like it. I rarely read anything with Shika and Neji but I am really into this story. :)
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From Prism0467 on January 24, 2010
It's always a pleasure to read about Neji's escapades with Shikamaru.
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From cynaga on January 24, 2010
WoW~! So hot; agonizing pace though (luv it).
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