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From ANON - Anise on January 11, 2012
(7) What a way to update the story!^^ But good god it's a miracle that they even managed to have sex at all and didn't end up concussed or hospitalized, although it seems it was a close call ;) I did like that it was realistic (head wounds aside^^) first times are rarely picture perfect and unfortunately unlike in most fanfic where it's a little uncomfortable and then miraculously the most fantastic sex ever, this didn't gloss over how much it can suck. Naruto though was the kind of guy that we should all be so lucky to have and it was perfect for the feelings they showed for each other and how badly they wanted to do this right, seriously how can these two be so hot and adorable all at the same time :)

It feels like it took me forever to respond to this newest update but I had to go back and skim through the older stuff so that I could remember all that was going on plus it was fun to reread some of the things that they got up to ^_^ I'm glad that you sent that update email as I had completely missed that the story had a new chapter and I really hope that this is a sign of more to come :)
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From JamieGib on June 30, 2011
Goddamn woman! Yet another lovely Naru/Hina story that you've gone and abandoned. Throw your poor readers a bone for godsakes and at least finish one of them! You have a really deft touch with a story, and you're certainly good with dialogue. Don't forget how to write!
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From ANON - Shinobi no Ryu on December 02, 2010
This story is amazing, the sex is hot and the loving tale touches my heart in ways not many fics can. I read your fanfiction and cry, out of the pure love Naruto and Hinata share for each other. I wish I had something like this.
I may have started reading this because I thought the clone sex idea was interesting, but now I don't care about that anymore. This story is amazing; please continue.
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From ANON - Seth on November 09, 2010
I actually like this fic. its very romantic. I love NaruHina both for the fluff and the porn *laughs*
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From ANON - Risse on October 20, 2010
I love this story! I love that it isn't just another story about sex. You developed their relationship (FLUFF so sweet i had a sugar rush >.
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From ANON - Anise on September 09, 2010
(6) You were right, this chapter was a little like choking on cotton candy but it fit perfectly with these two :) It's easy to picture them like this, neither would just jump into bed, even if you knew that they would get there eventually.^^ Again Hinata was realistic admitting that she had urges and sometimes got frustrated, I hate when people think she wouldn't even think of sex let alone masturbate. All those years of crushing on Naruto what do you think she fantasized about ;) And I could definitely see Naruto not wanting to make a move because he's put her on this pedestal where she's untouchable, glad he got past that :)

Loved Hana and Anko, honestly you would think that ninjas would know not to jump to conclusions but I liked their appearance and loved Anko's want of a certain copynin :) I'm thinking though that Hinata seems fairly confident in her relationship if her thoughts are anything to go by, so I'm hoping this doesn't cause to much angst. I could see Kiba and his big mouth making an appearance though, much yelling I'm sure would ensue between him and Naruto, two of a kind they are ^_^

My favourite part I think was the whole Hinata's a spy conversation, too funny and rather adorable - a very sweet chapter overall ^_^
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From ANON - Anise on July 29, 2010
(5) Naruko was hilarious :D the image of Naruto standing out on the street arguing and having this whole conversation with his clone is such a great visual (especially since it's his naked female clone^^) and I could only imagine the reaction if someone actually overheard what they were saying *snicker* Hard to believe sometimes that Naruto's the Hokage especially when he needs his clones to explain things to him, unfortunately I think Naruto and his clones get themselves in over their heads quite often. Although I don't think Naruto has to worry too much about that this time, Hinata strikes me as someone that may not be able to say what she wants outright but if you start something and she's not adverse to it than she'll go along with it, if not there's always Iruka's house :) I have this image of Naruto at Iruka's stuttering and blushing trying to explain why he's been kicked out, I get the feeling there would just be much eye rolling and sighing on Iruka's part ;)

This was just a fun chapter and the dialogue was really well done, I can't wait to see how Naruto decides to put his plan into action :) Such a fabulous story and I'm excited for more, hope your having a great night ^_^
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From ANON - Anise on July 08, 2010
(4) I liked seeing their history and how their relationship developed but also how the both of them grew and changed, especially Hinata. I love that you showed the capable side of her, ninja and otherwise. Too often because of her shyness and gentleness people seem to take that as weakness and brush her off. It got me thinking about how just a little while ago I said to another writer that I was convinced that one day Hinata would do something amazing :) Funny thing was that I didn't necessarily mean that it would have to do with fighting (although i think she's strong), like in your story it could be something like stepping up into a leadership role. I really like how your using Hinata's character to create someone likable and not sticking to all the stereotypes that you see in manga or should I say overcoming her problems from the manga :)

Alright having just said that about stereotypes, those girls can be obnoxious but I loved their reaction to female clone Naruto, that whole little scene was hilarious ^_^ It definitely seemed to give the girls something to think about^^ I would love to see the conversation between Neji and Tenten I could only guess at what his reaction would be, I'm sure he would think it wasn't appropriate but he's a guy and I'm sure it would turn him on to no end ;) And I can't help but think that Naruto certainly knows how to use that innocent look and pout doesn't he, once boys learn it and what they can get away with, it becomes like a weapon :)

This was such a great read, these guys are just such a nice couple and extremely hot too ;) Makes for a great combination and one I can't wait to read more of :)
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From shadowkeepre on July 06, 2010
Yay, an update! Very similar to the previous one, but different enough I could tell the difference. Glad to see plot progression.

Thanks!

- shadow
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From ANON - Anise on April 25, 2010
(3) Just found and read your story and loved it, I had forgotten just how adorable Hinata and Naruto can be :) (it's been awhile since i read a story about them). First thing about the story, I think Hinata's just using the excuse of locking up to drive Naruto nuts since most people do that before going upstairs and getting changed ;) The second thing is the clones, I liked how they interacted not only amongst themselves but also with Naruto and Hinata.^^

As for Naruto and Hinata they are just wonderful together and the sex is very hot too ;) There's a confidence and ease between them and their relationship, it's nice to see how both of them have changed and grown and yet the portrayal of each suits their characters perfectly. I especially loved the teasing and bantering between them, you have such an awesome sense of humour ^_^

I'm really looking forward to more and can't wait for the next update :D
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From Saitochan on April 25, 2010
Nice prologue! Me likes :)
It's awesome to stumble upon a good fic, specially when it's the first one you read after a long absence from the fanfiction world.
I can barely wait to read more! I wish I could read the rest of it today, but I'm too sleepy.
I'll read it tomorrow, and if it's as good as I'm hoping it'll be (nah, it's probably better), expect another review from me!
Nice writing!
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From ANON - Hina_Naru_Rule on February 03, 2010
Love. This. Story.
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From ANON - Snake-eat-dog on February 01, 2010
I'm with E-writer, you really know how to write. You modestly called it fluff at the end, but just calling this fluff doesn't do it proper justice. It was hot, creative, perfectly captured the characters, (at least how one would believe them to be after tying the knot), and best of all, it had real heart, really. I could feel it. That's how good you are. I'll be looking for more from you. Dattebayo.

Chiao
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From noban123 on February 01, 2010
You know a story's good when you don't even mind that the latest chapter didn't have any smut in it! The chapter was great even if it was the obligatory "flashback to how they got together" chap (which is really important, I hate when fics stick 2 people together without any explanation at all). And I'm loving the little bits of humour stuffed into the fic, a couple random examples being, "Hinata straightened carefully, literally with the downcast eyes of a puppy that just had one of those accidents which required newspapers." and Naruto's reaction to the clone last chapter.~
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From ANON - Ranviel on February 01, 2010
Thanks to this story I am now suffering from fluff-overdose and loving it! I never read the original "Clones" but think this story's great so far, looking forward to the next chap!
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