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By : KageKitsuneXXX

From ANON - SamuraiSaaya on May 02, 2010
Noooooo you cruel cruel mistress! How could you leave us hanging like that?! EPIC SCENE NEXT CHAPTER! I really love Naruto and Neji, but I love Sasuke too. Ohh god, the tension!

Amazing story! Please please update soon ^^
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From ANON - Anon on May 02, 2010
I forgot to tell you what my very favorite line was....ready???

"I'm gonna kick your shampoo commercial ass"....

and then he proceeded to pound it not only once but all night long.......yeah that's our Narubaby for you....he has them clan boys shedding their panties for him and screaming like little girls.....YEAH!!!

Can't wait to see what the Ice Princess does....poor baby I really do feel very badly for him....Ugh I see lots of Angst and Drama in the next few chapters
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From GudenMulle on May 02, 2010
Oh god.. Is Sasuke going to kill Naruto or Neji or both?! This can't possibly have a happy ending, it just can't..
Christ, I don't know who I want to hurt the most! As usual the choice is between Naruto, Sasuke and Sakura. Maybe Sakura because she started this mayhem and can't understand that Sasuke will never love her, but it could also be Sasuke because he wouldn't have changed anyway and is still an asshole who can't see beyond his own needs, or maybe I should hurt Naruto because he is a moron who can't remove himself from Sasuke and say no to something that is clearly hurting him, perhaps more than it is helping him. I'm getting so incredibly frustrated at Naruto because he can't say no, but as the story progresses I just.. pity him. IDIOTS, THE WHOLE LOT OF THEM, I SWEAR!!!!
I love Kaiba, Shikamaru, Ino and Chouji, though. :)
Really well-written with only a few mistakes. I'm really looking forward to the nex chapter!
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From thelastsoul on May 02, 2010
great chp!! can't waaaait o.O
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From ANON - Blackthorne369 on May 02, 2010
Dear KageKitsune XXX,

I think you are a delightfully talented writer. I find your development of Sasuke's and Naruto's characters surprisingly in accordance with the original, especially considering this is an AU. Two little things though, maybe three by the time I'm done:

1.)Is this a world of ninjas AND RL...actions, or institutions as it were? I am just a tad bit confused on that point.
2.) Do you think that Neji, Sasuke, and Naruto could all end up together and fitting together? Even though Sasuke has been awful and downright emotionally abusive towards Naruto...they fit. It may not be sensible but neither was it for Mrs. Lovette and Sweeney Todd, and their relationship was symbiotic enough. Until he *SPOILERS!* threw her into that oven to bake to death. It's just that the way you've written Neji, I would be hurt if were to end up alone. -Darn great writers that make you care about their fictional characters! Why am I emotionally invested in this?! Grrrr.) If you can't see that working or you don't believe it could, whenever you have the time -though before the next...five chapters are put up. No rush though!- check out 'Constellations' and 'All In'. Both are written by loraney, an author here on ADFF. Inspired in part by Zrina and her tale 'The Sound of Dreams', they are beautifully done and I believe are now complete. Even if you do decide to leave Neji out in the cold -At least give him Gaara to play with! He'll always be warm...from running...away...- do skim through those stories. They can change your life. -Just like your story WAS doing...-

Which brings me to point number

3.) How dare you administer that, that ... clifhanger! I despise that ridiculous plot device with all the power of the Winds, Rain, and Sun and Moon above. Ever single time I come across one of them, especially when I'm reading a really good story I wish to leap into my ether net cord, travel through the World Wide Web and shake the beauteous words from the authors fingertips, like precious drops of crystalline water from a fountain in an Oasis of AmShere! Do not try my my great patience again with this fool hardy trick lest I be forced to unleash my unfathomable wrrrrrath down upon your head! Behold! Up in the sky! 'Tis a mighty thundercloud! It will not restrain its bolts of fury for long. Be warned!

I am truly enjoying your story, though. I've never checked this often for updates! I feel kind of silly. Heehee!

Most Sincerely,
Lady B
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From ANON - Tab on May 02, 2010
Oh, such a wonderful cliff hanger! I'm loving this story
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From ANON - Anon on May 02, 2010
AHHHHH HOW DARE YOU LEAVE THIS CLIFFHANGER!
GET YOUR BUTT ONLINE AND POST THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!
*raises pitchfork angrily*
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From Kerrisa on May 02, 2010
Why must you toy with my emotions!?!?!? WHY!?!?! What have I done to you!?! Didn't I offer you baked goods!? Didn't I sprinkle love on the ground you walk on!? Offer to have YOUR BABIES!?!?!??! Ah.. Did i offer that last one? =O I'm sure your writings have merited several fangirl marriage proposes by now; including the bearing of the chlidrens... hmm.. Tehehehe I Love YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU sooooooooooooo MUCH! Please update soon if you have even the smallest bit of concern over my well being! It's not like I'm saying I'm going to go on hunger strike or anything until your next update *Put a padlock on the fridge* It's just... Yeah! ~xoxox
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From ANON - fhb on May 01, 2010
perfect. sasuke deserves it.
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From ANON - Anon on May 01, 2010
AHHH!!!!! Why did you stop there?... such a tease. Totally love the developments between Naru & Neji. But now I wonder if Neji and Sasuke will get into a Bruce Lee inspired fight of their own before Naru returns. Can't wait for the update.
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From loveusender on May 01, 2010
OHHHHH FUCK!!! I really hope that Sasuke doesn't go mental and breaks Neji's ass before naruto comes back!! HAHAH..how is he going to take the news of them being together?? I knew that Neji was a virgin, it just..felt like it really..they are sweet as a couple but where is the electric spark?!! I want to get electrocuted bya a pairing! They don't vut it for me at all!! *secretly hopes sasuke beats neji to a pulp!* Can't wait!! *rubs hands together*
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From ANON - Grazie on May 01, 2010
Please you have to continue this fic. Ansosa much more looking forward to next chapter
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From aliases101 on May 01, 2010
OMG HOW COULD YOU LEAVE IT THERE. YOU BETTER UPDATE SOON!!. Yay Neji and Naru finally got together. I know this is probably SasuNaru but can they stay together for a little while longer or at least have an alternate ending for us NejiNaru fans out here. Pretty pretty please.
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From ANON - animelover on May 01, 2010
whoa, what a cliffie ... a perfect one at that! ladies and gentlemen, let the fur fly as the cat fight of the century begins! ;-) i'll be waiting with my bag of catnip. LOL!
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From DevilnBlue on May 01, 2010
OMFG I HATE YOU! I HATE YOU KageKitsune XXX!!! HOW THE HELL COULD YOU DO THAT TO ME? ME... YOUR RABID FAN >< HOW!

I freaking reviewed every last chapter of this story, even when I was behind I read each one at a time and reviewed before moving to the next so that chapter could be fresh in my mind and you do this to me! Blasphemy!

You knew this was coming and so you hid. You hid because you knew that rabid fans like me would be hacking the internet right not, mapquesting you and shit so we can find where you live and demand that you right more v.v

I feel so freaking hurt now and even though I'm ranting now because I love your story so much that I have the time rant I'll switch to praises now. OMFG I love every single Naruto/Neji moment you created in that evil little head of yours. From the 'thank you' kiss at the Chiyo's botanical gardens to Neji distracted Naruto from Bruce Lee. *points dramatically heavenward like Naruto*

Meh, I thought it was so cute how you incoperated the whole gentle fist fighting match where Neji thought he was going to win before Naruto wiped the floor with him. Screw Sasuke, and screw Kiba for thinking they might be happy back together because Naruto and Neji are cute togehter. There really aren't that many of their pairings and like half the fanfics are practically dedicated to Sasuke and Naruto.

I nearly choked on my water reading Neji trying to explain the gentle fist and how Naruto thought he was being slapped and poked. Made me wheeze with laughter and then when Neji was up for sex right after because he had blue balls for far to long and I love Naruto... this Naruto... this Naruto who is starting to get over Sasuke. I know it'll be a while... they were friends for a long time but DON'T YOU DARE CRUSH POOR NEJI!!! SASUKE HAD HIS CHANCE AND NOW IT'S NEJI'S TURN AND I'LL BE DAMNED IF HE DOES BECOME A REBOUND GUY!!!

Shoo, shoo, Sasuke we don't want your emo-ass anymore...

Okay done rant/praise. Now update please you evil genuis you.
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