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By : mannahpierce

From bob665 on May 30, 2010
Chapter 51 Temari joined a spaceship crew to seek help for her home planet, classic! Towards the towards the end of the conversation between Naruto and Neji I think you're a little too blunt when Naruto stated his problems were unsolvable. I know, I complain you're too subtle than I complain you're not subtle enough I'm just impossible to please I guess.

Not sure if you care for a chapter this old, but in the last paragraph you have the following possible misspelling Temari shugged.
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From bob665 on May 30, 2010
Chapter 50 I like the idea of the female crew which brings in more canon characters in a believable way. As for the dustup between Kakashi and Iruka it seemed a bit strange to me. I really hadn't sensed much tension in the relationship prior to this chapter and simply being hit on doesn't seem like that big of a deal. I guess I am missing something.
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From bob665 on May 29, 2010
Chapter 49 I realized that I failed to give you due respect for his temper tantrum in the last chapter. It was the first time that I saw pure emotion unleashed in your story and I fail to comment on it. As for this professional hero thing it seems really promising in that they will be faced with a series of problems and have to solve them in unique ways which is a type of story I always like to read. At this point I'm seeing lots of promise in the story and can easily see how it expanded to over 80 chapters. If it wasn't in this form I'm guessing it would be more of a series then one continuous novel. Am I correct in that?
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From roro237 on May 29, 2010
I missed you:) I loved the visual of them setting around after the simulations! I'm falling for Haku more and more I love the way you have portraited him. Beauitful sexy deadly smart all in a loving way:) Haku is a fine princess to Iruka queen ^_^
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From ANON - Nivell on May 29, 2010
Although I find the new delevopment between Haku and Itachi quite strange (it's very rare to see someone willingly go into a relationship with their attacker no matter how differently they act and in Itachi's case, his memory loss) but since they are both in it for Kisame, I will try to look at it in a different way. You brought the minkies again! I seiously like them...wish I had a gang of minkies!
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From Prism0467 on May 29, 2010
So...the Klennethon guy returns. I admit I am looking forward to it.

I hope that Kabuto is not up to his old tricks. Encountering this new Itachi would not be good for his health.

And he made off with Orochimaru's body--is it possible the man is alive?!
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From ANON - Icenight009 on May 29, 2010
First off I would lime to say that Ive never read something this long (chapter-wise) before and that this is one story I absolutely adore. It took me three days just to get to chapter 76 and now you're up to 86! How far you've come!
I'd like to ask why Naruto is still thinking of the babies and kits as two entities. It sounds stupid because they are two sets, but since you already went over a chapter where Naruto wonders if he'll love the kits the same as the babies, why are the kits ranked of lesser importance to the babies in this chapter, if he were forced to choose?
It sounds so depressing to me!
I also cannot wait to see the birth of the children, since children always bring about new and different sides of character; people grow and learn and change, so I'm really anticipating that.
And the Kisame/Haku/Itachi threesome.
But mostly the birth of the children.
Keep writing! This story is amazing!
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From ANON - Anon on May 29, 2010
Yay they're home!! Can I just tell you how much I love KisameHaku and Itachi together..oh yeah I've said that before...lol.

I was worried when Haku brought up the subject of emotionally retarded Sasuke....hope Itachi doesn't have too much trouble facing that truth....but he'll have Kisame and Haku to help him overcome it, and hopefully his little brother too. How great that the new Uchiha are beginning to see how much they would lose if they had killed Itachi, he is such a great asset and I think he will eventually redeem himself. I really want to see you work the becoming and uncle angle....maybe that will even make him seem more human.

I'm glad that Kimimaro is leaving, I did not like the way he developed for this story. He was too cold and not worthy of Gaara or of the new Uchiha. I hope the people in Tarrasade will not be brutal towards Itachi, they need to hear Sasuke explain his decision to let his brother live.

Anyway looking forward to more thanks for the short update
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From kaiyousama on May 28, 2010
I'd been avoiding this because it's sooo long :P and because I wasn't sure about the idea of Naruto in Space!

I haven't been able to stop reading since I started. I'm only on the 39th chapter, but I had to review.

"My Zabuza was a Hinata"... absolutely heartbreaking. I hope you continue to write, you are very talented. I hope you find (or have found?) your own original story; I imagine it's probably there inside. I know the passion of writing these stories, but you write space opera so well, it deserves a bitter audience. IMHO.

Thank you so much for the gift of your story.
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From bob665 on May 27, 2010
Chapter 48 I'll admit I'm a bit confused. I can see some of the tension between Naruto and Sasuke, but there also seemed to be some hints of trouble between Neji and Shikamaru which completely left me scratching my head. Maybe I should just call it a night.
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From bob665 on May 27, 2010
Chapter 47 reveals an interesting morality. I have to say I'm holding out hope that there's more to this photo thing than meets the eye, but I didn't pick up on any clues if you dropped any. Anyway, I can see your love for old science-fiction shining through in this chapter especially strong.
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From bob665 on May 27, 2010
Chapter 46 At first I thought Haku was being insensitive to Konohamaru in the beginning and then I thought perhaps he was just trying to manipulate him for Konohamaru's own good. Then I remembered what you told me and I realized he was simply being honest. Now I wonder what I would've thought of that scene and they're apparently developing relationship if I had not been shown what was in the box.

As for the structure of this chapter it works which isn't too helpful I guess. A lot of short scene adding up to something more although there were a few that might have been flushed out only because it left me a little confused. Maybe I'm just not a good reader.
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From ANON - Anon on May 26, 2010
Oi its to much my computers been busted since you posted chapter 76 that was the last one i read just got it fixed and now i find im 8 chapters behind so much to read so little time to do it. Oh well, I just have to get started tonight after work, wish i could start now though.
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From bob665 on May 26, 2010
Chapter 45Considering how you play with ages you describe the new character quite well. Referring to him as the boy was pretty vague considering how wide that term can be used. However, it really worked. The entire time I had this sense that no one could get much of a read on him which added to an air of mystery and suspense although both of those words are probably too strong. It was a unique way to describe a new character. Unlike before I didn't feel I was being denied information. Overall I felt this chapter was handled quite adeptly.
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From bob665 on May 25, 2010
It seems chapter 44 will reveal me to be a horrible person. I'm actually kind of happy that Konohamaru was having a rough time. It was becoming a little tedious how easily everyone accepted their lot in life. It may be mature, but let's face it people are not like that. Yes some characters like Naruto and Sasuke have a reason for being like that, but Konohamaru definitely didn't.

This is the first time I saw a clear reference and understood exactly what the e-machine are and on some level I find them rather repugnant. Which is weird coming from me.

However, most of all I finally feel like the stories moving again. The previous chapters were billed up I guess, but I didn't have a sense of movement in them. I like the fact that you name the ship after the third team mate in the series which is probably what most people wanted to see her in a minimized position. Maybe I'm being a bit cynical on that. Anyway you misspelled Naruto again towards the end of the discussion of the desk. As for the desk, the symbolism is not really working for me, but I'm one of those type of people who will have such things go over the head quite easily.
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