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Reviews for In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

By : mannahpierce
  • From cynaga on February 27, 2010
    This story has beauty, elegance and depth ~ so many underlying psychological and philosophical issues too. I am enjoying the new aspect on aging and death via Naru-chan.
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  • From Prism0467 on February 27, 2010
    OMG I feel so bad for Sasuke! He is so lucky to have--well, everyone!
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  • From ANON - Harvey on February 26, 2010
    I have spent all the free time of three days reading this story. Your characters, while diffrent then the originals, have molded peferctly with this story. I have really enjoyed myself reading this. Cant wait for more.
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  • From Prism0467 on February 26, 2010
    So let me get this straight...

    Shikamaru went from being a geek whom no one noticed to having a fan club consisting of no less than Shino, Neji and now this Klennethorn guy. Shikamaru loves both Neji and Sasuke. Sasuke loves Naruto, who is himself wanted by Konohamaru and Orochimaru.

    Jiminy Cricket.

    I am concerned that the Klennethorn guy had everybody fooled, especially Shikamaru. If he can pull the wool over Shikamaru's, Neji's and Naruto's eyes, then the Uchiha is pretty much screwed. And what's with the 'tasteful' poses? It's Uchiha-porn, plain and simple. The guy's jealous--for all his good looks, power and money, he doesn't have anything that comes close to what Sasuke has.

    I love how playful Naruto and Sasuke are with each other. There will be quite a song to sing for them at the end of it all.

    Why does no one love Shino?






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  • From ANON - Nivell on February 26, 2010
    Love love love the part where Naruto goes down first and waits for Sasuke to jump into his arms. Forget how young they are...as for that dirty old man's threat, maybe Naruto is a special fox ;)
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  • From luvesskiki on February 25, 2010
    I hate Klennethon. I just do. *shrugs* I've just never had much use for someone who plays games with other peoples (especially if that someone is not me).

    Kiki
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  • From RyuEarth on February 25, 2010
    I would love to know more about the 'tasteful poses'! Specially with Kakashi and Iruka! *drools at the possibilities* XD

    I also enjoyed that, though sad, it is true that foxes don't live as long as humans! When others create 'hybrids' they always make them better in every way to humans, and I enjoy the twist! =)

    Thanks for the update! ^^
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  • From NarutoVixin on February 25, 2010
    im going to have trouble sleeping tonight due to the chapter lol im going to be trying to think about how it could turn out
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  • From RyuEarth on February 24, 2010
    For some reason, in the far future, I see Sumasu and Konohamaru as a couple (but that is just me and who knows where their personalities will go!) ^^;;

    Also, I don't care what word you use to describe sex for! I say keep using fuck cause it works! =)
    It's like ass and arse, they are the both thing, and I don't care ^^;;

    Thanks for the update! No matter how the babies are produced, I can soooo see Iruka as a mother! XD
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  • From ANON - SamuraiSaaya on February 23, 2010
    Seriously, I don't mind the word "fucking." I understood right away that you did not mean for it to be crude, but rather like an everyday word, in other words no big deal. Personally, I would prefer if you kept it that way because "ferking" or "firking" sounds a bit too weird :S

    But of course it's all up to you :)
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  • From roro237 on February 23, 2010
    Please don't change YOUR words. I fell in love with YOUR story just as it is written:)
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 23, 2010
    Just wanted to let you know I love that you used Sumaru I had forgotten all about him ... I admit it took me a minute to figure out who he was but the ending of this last chapter, the song, it got me thinking and I remembered the Star (Natsuhiboshi). Now everything you've mentioned about him makes since. Oh and a side note: Birthday Parties using the desk is a perfect way to both offset the past and separate the old Uchiha from the new.
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  • From Dorkchic on February 23, 2010
    I say that you should stick with the 'Star Trek' method. While you have been incorporating some futuristic technology into the story it has never been so far out in left field that the reader was completely unable to wrap their minds around it. Also, your context clues seem to be more than enough. By describing how a character is implementing a new device the reader is able to determine the relative dementions and purpose of said device. Anything more seems like needless exposition to me.
    As for the other part...
    It really depends on the situation in which you use the term. Fucking seems adequate for the majority of the time, but if you wanted to incorporate some other terms for variety's sake them you might try private time or alone time if characters are referring to other characters having sex. Another option could be to state why they are having sex instead of saying that they are fucking. You could use references to working off stress, helping someone relax, or comforting another character. The last one would be especially useful in describing some of Sasuke and Naruto's encounters.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 23, 2010
    Okay so I read this last night and wanted to leave a long review, but couldn't. So I waited until today and I'm glad I did because I got myself together. I was just a little upset about the "critiques" you've been receiving, more like criticism if you ask me, so if you will allow me I'm going to have my own little fangril rant moment...mkay??

    Okay to those of you who are "offended" by the word FUCK...what the hell are you doing reading stories on this site???

    Seriously this is Adult Fanfiction, not Fanfiction, hence the need for an age varification page. You must expect that you will see words, like fuck, cock, prick, ass, shit and on occassion fuckity fuck fuck..yep you will because all of us authors have used those words in our stories.

    To the author, please stop listening to people who are so demanding and at times demeaning....who cares what they want from your story?? This is YOUR story YOU can do whatever you want with it....if you want to have Naruto run around in a dress for the rest of the story those of us who like your passion for writing and can see beyond semantics will continue to read it.

    We can't always please everyone and really you should be writing to please yourself, this is your art and you should not compromise ever...so what if you lose a few readers? If in the end you are happy with your final product do you really care that 2 or 3 readers didn't see it to completion?? I hope not.

    Okay on to my review...I'm starting to love your little knife....he's just a bit of Sasuke a bit of Naruto and the boy is just so darn cute....I'm so glad that he heard Naruto talk to him about the loss of his collar. I know he saw that thing as part of his identity, but he is so much more than an engineered fighter, and hopefully he will learn that Sasuke and Naruto value him for the person he is.

    I am biting my nails about Kabuto and Oro joining the story...I just don't deal well with angst. I'm still wondering what the collector might want to collect from the boys....by the way the whole StarTrek way of telling your story fits. In my HO we don't need for you to go into great detail, we more than likely will figure out things as we read....we did for the e-machine and a few other things.

    Thanks for the review.
    your faithful fan,
    kanazerosukenaru
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  • From cynaga on February 23, 2010
    I just have to chime in each chapter about how wonderful this story is - so nicely written and I love sci-fi. I think (just my opinion) the use of the word fuck is fine and it's been obvious to me by the context what was meant by it. [don't change your work for the readers - you are too good as you are~~~]

    THANKS for sharing your work~!
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