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Reviews for In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

By : mannahpierce
  • From bob665 on May 25, 2010
    Chapter 38 I'm trying to figure out which thing they're redesigning. Is it the original compound or is it one of those motherships?
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  • From bob665 on May 24, 2010
    I quite like the beginning of the meeting and how there were so many different levels to it. It shows how complex the situation was and you carried it off quite well.
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  • From bob665 on May 24, 2010
    So chapter 35 was pretty interesting. I would've liked to seen Konohamaru a bit less mature or perhaps a tad bitter before seeing the video of the battle. There was really nothing wrong with the way you showed him though, but everyone is so mature in this story.
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  • From bob665 on May 24, 2010
    Chapter 30 I have read so many combat scenes in space that it's hard to know what I expect from them anymore. However, at least the readers were given more information about how the universe works. Up until now I've been assuming that the ships operate on some faster than light drive and not using jump gates. Still, interesting that there are people out there still willing to help Sasuke.
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  • From bob665 on May 24, 2010
    Chapter 29 A definite improvement over the last mature seen. More detailed and a reference to lubrication which is always nice to see in my opinion. Still, overall the story feels like it's dragging a little and I'm not sure if that's just because of the last arc or more symptomatic of the story.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    Chapter 24 started off well enough, but once the violence started to break out it got confusing and not in a good way.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    Chapter 23 This chapter above everything else really emphasized how messed up the whole cat thing is. I hope you were going for that. By emphasizing how casual it is really drove that point home.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    You describe the fight much better from outside looking in than from either of the competitors points of view.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    Fight scenes are among the most difficult things to write even without supernatural elements such as in Canon. I was able to visualize the aborted back breaking scene, but only a vague picture for the rest. I was able to use my imagination to fill in the blanks, but you might want to consider looking into how screenwriters write fight scenes.

    As for the boy while there was a part of me hoping it would be Ranmaru given the title for future chapters and the fact that he checked to see what Zabuza was doing I'm guessing it's Haku. Oh well at least I get to keep that market cornered.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    I never really read an AU were so many ages were out of whack, but at least you describe him since there isn't an image of him being older like that. Good call there. Also I found this cliffhanger much more appropriate than the last one I mentioned as I don't feel I'm being kept away from information. Good job!
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    I can't help but feel you missed an opportunity to fill in your universe's history. Naruto ignorance and his knowledge would have been a perfect combination. So roughly how much time has passed since the beginning of the story? I don't get a good sense of that.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    I guess that is the first true lemon of a series. They're always interesting to read to see what details are put in and what aren't. Kind of like this one if it was a bit on the animalistic side. Still I had one of those moments where the mental image I have in my head and the description in the story didn't match up which was disorienting for a minute, but not really your fault.
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  • From missbri88 on May 23, 2010
    FUCKING-A! That was a great chapter! Haku's plan is amazing and implementing the waltz's is ingenuous! I know I've said it before but Ima continue to state it everytime I review. This story is epic! Beyond epic. It will forever go down in fanfiction history as a scifi classic, like Star Wars or something. You're awesomely amazing! I can't wait for more. And thank you for sharing.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    So chapter 14 is the first chapter with some real emotional conflict. Having the one crew member depart was unexpected, but not much of a loss. The card thing seemed a bit odd.
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  • From bob665 on May 23, 2010
    Chapter 12 all right something's happening and I don't know what it is. I feel kind of cheated however. If this story was written in first person or at least closely attached to one character's point of view I've wouldn't feel that way, but with your drifting perspective I feel like I should know. Also it's rare, but on occasion you've been spelling Naruto as Naturo.
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