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By : Daydreamer79

From EntityLvr on July 22, 2019
I read this entire story in 2 days because I just couldn't stop reading it. I cried and laughed and just omg I can't even explain everything this story caused me. Thank you so much for writing it! I've always loved your stories and this is my all time favorite. Thank you thank you thank you!!!

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From EntityLvr on July 21, 2019
again, I can't help but just cry. This is so amazing and sad and just brilliant.

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From EntityLvr on July 21, 2019
Oh my god this chapter made me cry. Like actual tears cry. I love your work so much. You just draw me in really deeply and just damn! I love this!

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From lara5170 on October 03, 2015
This was an amazing story and I'm sorry I didn't read it sooner. You must have worked hard for this one and I'm all the more grateful
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From Mysticaldragon11 on February 26, 2013
To sum this up with one word. WOW!!!! One of the best I have read by far!
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From DRAGONBETTY on June 22, 2012
Even though I'm not a naruto fan, I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks and keep it coming.
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From ANON - sighcoe (too lazy to log in) on June 12, 2012
Hi! I read this story at ff dot net if I'm not mistaken and I thoroughly enjoyed it. You have a anon review that appears to read your story just to criticize each of your chapter, if not, gave of sarcastic comment. Yes, I have to agree with his/her points, some of it I guess, especially regarding contradictions of Itachi's decisions as king as well as the blood this anon reviewer is pointing out. But hey, we're all novice writers here. We're not Stephen King or any of those professional writers which has loads of editor that edited their work for months or a year, and then even with those editing, their are still people out there who criticizes their work, So for someone to criticized novice writers like us, per parts and per bits is kinda funny, but then again it improves the author/writer as well. But the sarcastic remark is... well, rude.

Your whole plot is good, entertaining at some point. It's angsty and I could feel Sasuke's frustration and continuous heartbreak everytime Naruto leaves him. Who would have not gone crazy if you see the person you love the most keeps on dying on you, right? Atleast now though, the two of them will be happy eternally. :)
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From ANON - Anon on January 24, 2012
one of the best chapters. sasuke deciding to fight for the independence of the colonies- so that naruto may be reborn into a life free from being under the rule of england...

---though there is no evidence that naruto's next life will be born in north america- he's been born in japan, italy, etc....so why the assumption that he'd be born in n. america? you've never written about him being born in the same place twice before. in fact, you've written about sasuke having to search the continents to find naruto

i enjoyed all except the parts with kiba and sakura. probably because you almost include nothing of his normal life- and that you had kiba spouting off about vampires and sakura asking about the door that led to sasuke's crypt; made the reasons for them being written in here kinda simple and cartoonish. the bit about itachi wanting to keep naruto for himself a while longer was kinda weird too. what would itachi do if naruto died in a car accident b4 he woke sasuke up.

and this was a little off:

(He�d sensed the boy last night. He�d whispered thanks to Kurenai after the meeting adjourned. She successfully steered the conversation away from Sasuke and the eventually, Naruto.)

-kurenai did not successfully steer the conversation away from sasuke_ as a matter of fact, naruto did not know who they were talking about until kurenai said sasuke's name...and if itachi sensed naruto eaves dropping- why didn't he confront him- tell him how rude it was- scold him----and then naruto wouldn't have heard any of the conversation---so itachi could have stopped naruto from hearing anything- but let him listen. to thank kurenai for changing the subject would have been unnecessary- she just closed the door- itachi didn't even do that much when he knew naruto was eavesdropping.__it doesn't even make sense that he'd allow naruto to have guests over while having a 'secret' council meeting in a room anybody could access, with the door open. these are supposed to be millenia old creatures with knowledge and life experiences that should make them smarter than that.
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From ANON - Anon on January 24, 2012
(When you say replaced?�
�Killed. The king is the only one who can kill unceremoniously. If Danzou were king, he would be untouchable by anyone except assassins. No reparations could ever be taken from him for the deaths of others,� answered Sasuke.
Naruto�s eyes went wide. �He can kill anyone?�
Sasuke shrugged. �It might cause war but it is the right of the king to take us to war.�
�If it�s just Danzou, why doesn�t he just kill him? You know he wants to even if he denies it.�
Sasuke chuckled and settled onto a wooden bench. �Because he�s Itachi. To him, possessing a death warrant for Danzou is more satisfying than simply killing him. It will prevent the excuse of unlawful killing being a excuse for someone to lead a rebellion.�)

--it is the right of the king-he can kill freely. no reparations could be asked from the king for the lives he takes....but then you write that doing it by warrant will prevent the excuse of 'unlawful killing' being an excuse for war__but you just wrote it is not unlawful for the king to kill--contradiction.
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( If we need to, we will destroy you all to maintain it.�)

-so they are warriors of the balance- 'we will destroy you all'...but then you write:

(Many of my people are wanting to retreat from civilization. There are few who are warriors such as myself)_
( My people are not warriors. It would not have been pleasant if weapons such as these were used.�)

so they're not warriors of the balance and the threat to destroy was empty??- contradiction
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i did enjoy itachi tearing danzou's head from his body- it was about time. thanks for that.
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From ANON - Anon on January 24, 2012
(�Whoa. I�m a member of an endangered species,� gaped Naruto.)

(�If things were different,� murmured Pein.
�Make them different. We deal in threads of fate, right? Well, you know there is always more than one fate... Fate is what you make of it.�... �You should change your fate.)

-you do great dialogs and turns of phrases
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From ANON - Anon on January 24, 2012
you have sasuke awake and mad with starvation- itachi warning naruto that sasuke is starving and needs to eat blood- so why didn't itachi bring him blood???? cause it's more dramatic to have them all standing around suffering and talking about it and too easy to bring in a few gallons of blood....so the drama. i'm not anti-drama and i enjoy some angst- but when you completely ignore the most simple and easiest and most obvious way to deal with this problem- in order to have them standing around and suffering about the problem instead- it becomes almost a parody of what was intended
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From ANON - Anon on January 24, 2012
( but he could say without a shadow of a doubt that his and Sasuke�s fate was intertwined in ways superseding everything he thought he knew of love. Love paled when he thought of what he felt. Perhaps it was a similar feeling to what had driven Sasuke mad.)

-wow- deep stuff- beautiful.

- i wish all this 'other' stuff was a separate story. if itachi is the most powerful of his kind and the king- why does he put up with the council and danzou- why not just kill him- why not have his followers kill the council if they are a threat to sasuke, etc....yeah shoulda been a separate story

and naruto lived and died 10 horrible life times_ so he could become a 'balance' warrior_ and if he didn't want to be one you were going to destroy his soul- that's just bull shit. yeah it's your story- but you enjoy too much pain and agony- and really- destroy his fucking soul- you are a bitch aren't you.....i suppose it helps keep your stories interesting and complicated and loved by many apparently.

and eewww- having itachi drink from sasuke's soul mate- that's just all kinds of betrayal and makes him a creepy pedophile
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From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2012
wow- this is like another story entirely- i thought this was going to be about sasuke and naruto and having to wait for the proper reincarnation to be together- but now it's all this complicated stuff with all these different kinds of supernatural characters-

( except when someone very dear has passed. He and Konan were very close. He took her death harder than most.� )

- so even though konan wrote a note telling pein that fugaku worked magic on itachi to keep him away from pein- and that konan betrayed pein- and itachi was an innocent victim_ pein still mourns for konan the betrayer and is mad at itachi the victim of his father's magics???? oh well, love is irrational

- why doesn't he just wake his father up and have the joy of killing him.

i'm glad i skipped to the end chapters- this story is way more than i wanted to get involved in. though it looks like you have tens of pages of people who did enjoy it- so congrats on that
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From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2012
(As king of their kind, he held a responsibility to his subjects as well as to the humans amongst whom they lived)

- you seem fond of mentioning itachi is the king of the night walkers- yet you haven't had him do a kingly thing. he holds no court- he has no subjects- he doesn't seem to rule over anyone but his brother. maybe this is another one of those things you will explain in future chapters. though the same theme is played out in each chapter- it's become very predictable.

itachi is blaming naruto for following sasuke through reincarnations. you have some hag who seems to have cursed sasuke for no reason what so ever- we already know naruto will die and you will try to make sasuke seem even more pained and insane as the chapters progress- so it's probably best to skip to the last few chapters so i remember this story fondly, instead of becoming bored of reading the same thing over and over- with slight variations. plus i really hate angst- and this is a mega long angst fest- but you warned us at the beginning- so no fault is put on you.

i did enjoy the episode with 5 year old naruto and itachi in his mindscape- that was really interesting- you do have some gems packed away in these chapters. you obviously spent lots of time on this- your efforts are appreciated
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From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2012
(If he wasn�t Sasuke�s brother, the younger Uchiha was certain they would have been lovers. The way Itachi�s long hair sifted over his shoulders to tease the tips of his nipples was something of an erotic scene.

�Come now, Sasuke. I know I look good but wasn�t there something you wished to discuss?�)

--doesn't it seem unlikely and kind of creepy that sasuke would have those thoughts after just being reunited with his long lost love, after 300 years- itachi's sensuality should have been the furthest thing from his mind

--i get why you have sasuke suffer- you're into the angst and drama- but you've also written that itachi can put sasuke to sleep for decades or centuries- so why would itachi watch sasuke suffer for so long when he could put him to sleep- let him sleep it off- i believe you wrote their parents have been asleep for 500 years.

baby naruto liking the painting of sasuke was fantastic- i'm assuming the portrait is the one painted by the italian naruto- that's really cool.

so by the end of the story- sasuke will have 10 or so long dead naruto's to show the one that he finally gets to keep? so far he's got 1 buried and 1 in a bag- he's a naruto collector.

i may be calling attention to parts i don't get- but i want you to know i am enjoying the story- you've had me misty eyed and sad a couple of times already
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