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From NekoIzumi on June 10, 2009
Why glorify Assuke!? ;__; Well, he did lose half his face... too bad he got it back -_- Yes, I'm still very much a loyal Sasuke-hater.

And Shino is so sweet! He's so insecure but he finally seemed to realize that he doesnt have to be and that Naruto will always come back to him! =D I adore that! Now... if someone would just make human kind a favor and erase that last Uchiha, both of them actually, then this world would be such a better place! XD

Thank you for sharing and I look forward to the next update!
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From tawanawelch on June 10, 2009
Damn that was so powerful! The breakup between them was too much for both of them and hope Gaara can find love again with Ikaru.:) Naruto's reaction was so, it made me feel good to know he couldnt bare to hear those words uttered to his love. Poor Shino quietly agonizing over Naruto. Im glad he has Hinata to comfort him over it. I wonder if Naruto has ever considered Shino as a potential lover?:)

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From serenagold on June 09, 2009
omg!!! This story is crazy intense!! I love it!!

Keep up the fantastic work!
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From arabuzumaki on June 09, 2009
i was wondering about shino's talent and the effects it would have on naru's plan. i hope he catches on soon. or will it be that sasu saves him and returns to the village with him?
cliffs get me really excited ^_^ i can't wait for more.
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From DeviousLilDevil on June 09, 2009
Oh my god! No! They finally get together and then this happens. I was thinking Sasuke would maybe try to pull something but not Madara. Poor Naru. Shino is gonna be pissed as hell when he finds out about both Naru leaving and god help the messenger when he finds out about the kidnapping. Wonder if that messenger is going to be Sasuke. I'm so glad I checked the site this morning. Eagerly awaiting your next update.

~Devious
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From Mizzroja on June 09, 2009
BRAVO!! BRAVO!!!! I love this story!!! Father vs Son hmmm that will be a nice fight!!! Very Nice and thanks for Naru & Shino fix!!
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From pirate0607 on June 08, 2009
when shino and naruto have sex it would be cool if his bugs would do something sexy or hum a tune when there somewhere alone togather.
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From arabuzumaki on June 08, 2009
i really hope you get a beta soon. but it's not like you have any major issues that need dealing with. trust me when i say those errors are FEW and far between don't worry ^_^

i hope shino doesn't take this too hard when he finds out.
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From DeviousLilDevil on June 08, 2009
Wow! You are on a roll with this fic. I took an extra long lunch break to catch up with the reading. Shino is just too sweet but I hope that he can really understand where Naru was coming from with his decision to 'do the do' with Shinchin. (Shinchin is a great OC. Kinda wish he was a real character in the show) I'm glad that it wasn't an impersonal encounter between the two cause then Naru would have been too wracked with guilt to persue Shino afterwards. And Shika maybe a pain in the butt but he's awesome and figuring crap out and I'm glad you picked him as the person Shino goes to for advice. (Not to mention I think he's sexy) Looking forward to your next update.

~Devious
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From NekoIzumi on June 08, 2009
This chapter... dayum! O_O I dont really know what to say actually... I'm on the edge of my seat, honestly wanting to slap Shino for being such so shy and insecure, but then again, he's in love, have been for a long time, and when faced with the chance of actually getting the one he wants... well, a lot of things suddenly have to click.

You have no idea of how much I'm looking forward to the next chapter! I hope you'll post it soon! =D

*huggles*

P.S. It might just be me... but when you're writing 'gagging for it', it makes me cringe a little. 'Gagging' for me is the same as vomiting, so I'd advise you to change that to something else like for example 'begging' or perhaps 'whining'? But then again, it might just be me and it is your story so the choice is up to you.
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From NekoIzumi on June 08, 2009
You made Shin so sweet, so absolutely adorable to let Naruto know what Shino has been hiding for so long. Its utterly lovable to see how he blew Shino's cover to pieces without even knowing it. I adore this chapter, I do. Very tender and gentle. Eager for more and sail off to read the next chapter! X3

And I forgot to mention before... sometimes you mistake where to write 'to' and where to write 'too', nothing big, just thought I'd tell you :)
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From NekoIzumi on June 08, 2009
Whoa!!

Seeing as you actually dedicated this chapter to me *squeals in bliss* I decided to try to thank you in the only way I can, by writing one hell of a review. Or at least my shot at one.

Your story sucked me in from Chapter One and hence I havent reviewed the first three ones -_-" Sorry, my bad. You have a great plot going on here and I have to say, I am very very curious how you're going to write these things out. You write a very believable Shino, but with a secret warm side, and for that I'm glad. I cant stand fics where people write him as some kind of moving emotionless statue -_-
Also, your Naruto is true to his devotion to Konoha although in a different way than the usual 'I wont leave this place no matter what'-obsession that he is all too often given. So... from hereon, I'll try to review chapter 4 as I read so please be prepared for odd, incoherent och rambling paragraphs! XD

On we go...

OooH!! Scarab users in Suna! Now that's interesting! I wouldve never thought of that! Oh goodness, Shino is vibrating with excitement! Shino, where do you have your kikai? Hehe... sorry, I'm a perv by nature.

I'm glad you made Shibi polite towards Naruto, perhaps you got that from the same man in Nuptials? ;p

Ah! You made Shibi blush!! Oh Lords, I'm laughing so hard my eyes are tearing!! He blushed from Naruto unconsciously checking him out!! Oh yeah! Come on, Naruto!! What you see is a hot Shino in the future! ... I'd so go for that O_o"

Hell yes keep him close to the clan!! Dumdumdum!! Future bride! Uhm... well, maybe not bride seeing as Naruto is Naruto but at least a future in-law XD

You can never hide anything from parents -_-" They see it all and Shibi being a shinobi, he sees more than most. Shino, you're a walking book, dammit! And you're wide open for anyone to read... not very discreet regardless of collars, are we? ^_^ Me like!

You made them tailors!! That's genius!! O_O

Ah... typo! '...courtyard with a small Kio pond in the center...' Might want to change that to Koi pond :)

Yikes! From the freezer straight into the oven! Poor Shino is being stripped! Hey, wait a minute! It aint anything poor about him! He should do Naruto the same favor! GAH! Unresolves Sexual Tension, dammit!! Its not fair! Its not nice to the readers... screw the readers, its not fair to ME!! XD

Kitty eyes *falls down in fangasmed puddle of drool* So sexy, so incredibly sexy...

Well, Shino surely is in for a thorough questioning when he comes back, at least I hope he is XD but for some reason Shibi will probably fill his wife in one the details. Gosh, I'd love to listen in on that conversation!

So... here it is, my uhm... less than coherent review but I figure you'll understand what I got where from. I wont lie, even if I try I wont review every chapter, I'm way too impatient for that... but I promise to review at least a few times more. Hope this little comment convinced you to keep putting those chapters up because I'm on the edge of my seat here!!

*huggles*
Izumi
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From arabuzumaki on June 07, 2009
oh wow those aburame are some hottt guys lol. *do i have drool on my face* real sexy trust me lol.
you should get a beta, jus a few things here and there need to be touched up.
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From becca330 on June 07, 2009
Excellent story. It's very well written and I like the pacing of it. I also like how you've kept everyone in character. I'm a fan of Naruto/Shino pairings as I think they would make a good couple. I'm definitely glad to know that you've already finished writing this story as I would hate to be left hanging on this one. Thanks for writing it and for posting it. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story and hope you will post other stories as well.
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From arabuzumaki on June 07, 2009
lol naru must really have some kind of power if he can make the great aburame shibi blush lol. that part was so funny ^_^
thanks for the update i am enjoying this alot.
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