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By : susanna

From serenagold on May 04, 2009
lol

^_^ Yeah, don't stress yourself out over it. This story is already excellent, I wouldn't worry about the contractions.

Also, everyone always seems to feel Naruto lost that battle at the Valley of the End. I've always been of a different impression. I've always felt that Naruto rightly won that match, since in the end, he wasn't aiming to kill Sasuke (like Sasuke was aiming to kill him) only to scratch him on the forehead in response to the challenge Sasuke put forth earlier in their battle. My personal belief is that Sasuke realizes this, and realizes he should have rightly lost, but is too honorable to win by a shallow victory. Thats why he lets Naruto live. Personally I think it eats him up inside to know that he would be dead if Naruto wasn't such a righteous pain in the ass. lol. I need to write a story that includes this premise, but I'm too lazy and definitely not an author. But I digress.

Keep up the good work!
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From serenagold on April 26, 2009
This is so sad and depressing. The two of them! What a pair! Naruto's loneliness is overwhelming. :(

Great chapter update! Keep up the great work!

(Btw, I was just wondering. You're not a native English speaker, are you? Don't be mistaken, you're English grammar is spot on, its just that there are little to no contractions in the dialog and it strikes me as odd. For instance "I do not" usually becomes "don't" in casual speech. Of course that could just be my lazy tongued American/New York perspective, but maybe I'm wrong? I don't know. :P )
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From serenagold on April 20, 2009
Aww.. poor Sasuke.

Keep up the great work!
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From missbri88 on April 20, 2009
Awww! Poor Sasu-chan. I liked Naruto's explaination of Gay Pride Day, and the offended lesbian mothers. A very entertaining chapter. And I wanted to hug Sasu-chan when he started thinking about his parents.
I cant wait to see more. Im getting so into it! ^^
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From serenagold on April 15, 2009
Bwahahahahahaha!!! Its Gay Pride Day!! lol

That certainly explains all the STD/AIDS awareness booths and half naked paraders. hehehehe
Love it!! hehehe

Keep up the great work!
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From DivatheSexyDevil on April 14, 2009
Sasukes an idoit Love your story very enteraning keep it up nay
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From missbri88 on April 14, 2009
OMG... Did he just ask that stupid question?
Well I like the fact that we're moving along nicely. I cant wait to see more though. Until next time
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From ItaNarulover on April 13, 2009
OMG! How quickly do you write? Two new chapters already?! O_O
I'm not complaining, oh no, not at all, because these chapters were great, I liked them a lot, it's just satisfyingly shocking. ;P
I think you've managed to portray all characters splendidly, even Karin who tend to be bipolar (excuse me for using the term), and especially Sasuke because he's still on his guard and not suddenly head over heals over Naruto (I hate when that happen in fics), so you earned yourself a some points for that.
And I also like the idea of the festival, it's unusual and you make it fit into the story perfectly, I'd really like to see something similar to it in the manga (after the fights though, I don't want them to skip those yet ;P), but I'm glad that you're writing about it because then I get to read it here.
And, you're not a native speaker? But you're so incredibly talented and skilled at English. That's really shocking, and I once again bow to your talent, you are amazing! *cheers*
Um...who is Jay? *blushes* I've read the manga and all, but I can't recall having seen anyone with the name...I know who Killer Bee is, but not Jay...
And concerning Itachi, yes, I also don't believe that what he did was any less unforgiving, and that Sasuke should do what he wanted, merely that Sasuke should take his words and sacrifice into consideration. And even though Itachi killed his clan, he didn't do it alone(Madara)and the council and Hokage did force him to do so, and the loyal shinobi that he was, he obeyed those orders to a degree. If he really was a cold hearted and fully loyal shinobi then Sasuke would not be alive, it's speculated whether he left him alive out of selfish reasons (like wanting someone to kill him) or because he truly cared for him, I believe the latter because deep down Itachi wasn't a bad guy. I'm sorry for arguing about this in a review of all things, but I love Itachi and your comment made me a little upset. But you're right though, I'm still a little naive when it comes to things concerning him. Sorry.
Anyway...I'm looking forward to the next chapter, I'd like to see if Sasuke will dance and how their relationship will develop ;P
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs =^_^=

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From mrk33 on April 12, 2009
My favorite line: “I don't dance”, Sasuke snapped back. “Anyway, what's Gay Pride Day? What are they proud of?”
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From arabuzumaki on April 12, 2009
i really enjoyed this chapter, they are all sort of getting comfortable together ^_^ and juugo finally came out of his shell yippe. sasu and naru should go out and shake there fine things on the dance floor. i would love to read that lol
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From missbri88 on April 11, 2009
Well, I guess Im proud that I "pushed" you into semi-forming a plot/outline. I love how you discribe everything. Thats one of the most imporntant things. I cant wait to see more of where you're heading.
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From serenagold on April 10, 2009
Ha! An uncomfortable Sasuke is like a caged animal ready to pounce. ^^ Between his idiot team mates not listening to him, all the crowds, and a very comfortable Naruto who seems very mission-free, I suspect Sasuke's gonna be the first to crack and demand answers.

Naruto always wears down the stick in Sasuke's ass. hehehe.

Keep up the good work!
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From ItaNarulover on April 06, 2009
OMG, what an evil cliffy!! *sulks*
But the chapter was totally worth it nonetheless because it was incredible. Your writing's got an nice flow that makes the reader want to read every single sentence because it pulls you in and makes you curious. You also don't use too complicated words that make me have to pull a dictionary forth, I'm Swedish ;P, your language is still very advanced and formal but I can understand it and that pleases me a lot. Looking words up in a dictionary is not something I enjoy while reading a fanfic, so thanks for that. ;)
And Naruto looking at condoms and buying a Valentine kit = genius! That made me snicker, I wonder what Sasuke will say about it....
And speaking of the devil, I wonder what he's doing there and why he's so touchy-feely with Naruto, didn't he want to severe their bonds or something? *curious* And to be honest I'm not really a Sasuke-fangirl, a part of me hates him while a part of me wants to embrace and comfort him. I don't really know where I stand when it comes to him, sure I understand his pain and suffering but if he takes the final step and destroys Konoha along with Madara than he has lost a fangirl from his enormous fanclub. Because if he were to make all that Itachi had fought and died for in vane then that's gonna make me want to beat him into a bloody pulp, since I like Itachi more than him. That's why I anticipate his reappearance because I'd like to know whether I should put my brass knuckles on or not. XD Well, enough of my opinion and onto another matter....I wouldn't care if this fic were to differ from the manga because the way you're describing it is already tricking my mind into believing that this is the real thing, it's very believable and I enjoy every second. I like your version and I can't wait to see how you'll develop this. By the way, you wrote Canalized River?! That's one of my favorite fics, I had no idea, well that actually might explain the incredible writing in them both...thank you for writing them! *sends cookies, roses and plushies by air*
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs =^_^=

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From missbri88 on April 06, 2009
Hmm... I'm still looking for your direction and plot line, but Im promising to stick with you. I wanna see more.
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From serenagold on April 06, 2009
I loved your modern metropolous setting for Naruto's hideaway town. Its busy urban setting makes for a nice startling contrast against the hidden ninja world that Naruto originally comes from. Its always an interesting contradiction of time that the manga's setting takes place in. Elements of both modern and medieval Japan invade the storyline randomly. I like how you sought to include a town like that in the story.

Although Sasuke seems rather chummy in his greeting to Naruto. I don't trust it. ^^
Keep up the great work!
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