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Reviews for Unexpected

By : emeraldfire84
  • From ANON - Raw19 on November 21, 2011
    That was indeed unexpected. Getting our attention with a half-dead Hinata and then events escalating into such. Such innocence. Such passion. It was sexy and humorous. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

    I never imagined Hinata and Kabuto as a couple, temporary or otherwise. But, you totally made it work. It was all still so in character, and the way you explained the past events that led up to the climax, made it perfectly believable.

    Most excellent story, author.
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  • From azurarose on December 26, 2009
    J-Pop, while you may have hated every moment of writing this, I can assure you I absolutely adored the entire thing. It was masterfully written, and my love for Kabuto (don't ask why) just sky rocketed. You did a superb job, and I even slightly like Hinata now.

    Thank you for writing a sinfully delicious fanfic,
    ~Azura
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  • From ANON - leanime on August 06, 2009
    this was a very odd coupling, but you made it work DAMNIT!!! this was a great story! perfect in every aspect. its writers like you that make sites like this worth venturing to. i love your work, not just this story but most of your others. you can expect me to review some of your other work to in the near future!
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  • From LunaDazie on June 11, 2009
    I appreciated it :)
    It's not a pairing I'd have ever thought up on my own, but I like it. I mean, I'm a total Naruto fan, but there are some things that just don't sit right with me as far as implied shipping.
    I know you say you didn't like this one, but I'm so glad you did it.
    PS. I am now also becoming a J-Pop Princess fan. :)
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  • From Silent Pluto on March 25, 2009
    whoa! talk about hot and unexpected!
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  • From ANON - ShouraiChan on March 24, 2009
    OMG...I seriously love this story. Honestly, DAMN good job!!! I never even CONSIDERED a Kabu/Hina pairing! This was seriously wicked and sexy and you definitely kept those two in character!!!! I loved it! And Kabuto was such a sweetie...! Please, make a second story to this!!!!
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  • From Amaiko on March 17, 2009
    I'm the one you wrote this story for, and I'm very sorry that I didn't review it at the time. To be perfectly honest, I'd forgotten about the fic exchange since due to RL circumstances I flaked on my story (you weren't the one I was writing for, though) and I never went back to the site to see if anyone had posted anything for me. So, again, I'm sorry.

    However, I could have done without the "hating every minute of writing this ridiculous pairing" line though--I don't go around bashing people for liking odd or unusual pairings, much less in the opening of a fic that's being written for a fic exchange. If it bothered you so much, then why the hell did you choose the KabuHina prompt when I gave you a whole list of other possible pairings (like NejiHina and Jiraiya/Tsunade) to choose from? I definitely prefer KabuHina, but not if you were going to hate writing it the whole time.

    That being said, I do like this--there's not much KabuHina around, both were in character and the sex was nicely done and hot. Thank you for taking the time and effort to write this for me back then.

    So, I'm sorry that I didn't say thank you earlier and I'm also sorry you had such a horrible time writing this.
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  • From suzannecmc on March 15, 2009
    well I say THANK YOU!
    and shame on the uncouth bastards who you took time to write this for.

    it was wonderful!
    I can't remember the last time I read M/F sex that excited me.
    and although you hate the pairing, I found this original and plausible.
    I think you captured their personalities spot on. kudos kid:)
    I loved it so thankyouthankyouthankyou ;P

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  • From Perpetual159 on March 15, 2009
    Well, as well-written as this story was, I hope you don't write this pairing again, either. I'm not a fan of it... at ALL.

    Your writing skills was this story's saving grace, really, and it took a lot for me to open it and read it. Your writing was the only reason why I even considered reading it.

    I can certainly imagine Hinata being utterly heartbroken over Naruto dating Sakura, but even if she was crushed and hurt, I doubt she would just give up so easily and "move on." I'm not particularly saying she would wallow in misery, either, but she wouldn't do something like that with a complete stranger, either. Nonetheless, I know that's probably why you used Kabuto messing around with her hormones to make it seem more believable and reasonable, therefore that instills the benefit of the doubt. Very smart move on your part :-)

    However, for Hinata to NOT remember Kabuto while being 19 years old, this story has to be EXTREMELY alternate universe, because she did encounter him in other occasions aside from the Chunnin exams. Furthermore, we all know Hinata is a major Naruto groupie, so she is bound to know who her crush's enemies are. But despite being a groupie, I am convinced that every shinobi in Konoha knows who Kabuto is, even if they never saw him in person. I bet he's pretty high in the bingo books, and the silver hair and glasses are a dead giveaway.

    Anyway, it was a valiant effort on your part at validating the realistic aspect of this story, but in my opinion, it was not at all convincing. I would've had an easier time believing a NejiHina, or even ShinoHina, or more unlikely still, a ChoujiHina story, and I don't particularly care for any of those pairings. I've grown accustomed to NaruHina, and Hinata is just too devoted to Naruto (we finally got proof of it in manga chapter 437). That Naruto will love her back, or even fall in love with her is an entirely different story, but we're not going to talk about that, lest you prefer to run the risk I write my own story about that in your review section, heh.

    NaruSaku for the most part makes me twitch uncomfortably, but that is only because Sakura, just like Hinata, is too devoted to Sasuke, despite the circumstances, and really treats Naruto like that little annoying brother you love and hate all at the same time. But then again, reading your story Party of Three was a lot of fun, and a lot more believable because Naruto has always liked Sakura. The threesome part... haha, not so believable (probably as unlikely as what happened in this story), but it's fiction, so I can't be too demanding.

    Nevertheless, I doubt anyone else could've done better writing this pairing, and the fact that I wasn't convinced didn't necessarily take away from the story being enjoyable, either. But this was a fic exchange, so I would assume you wouldn't try as hard with these little details, especially if it's not only a pairing that is just too unlikely, but one that you don't enjoy writing. I guess that's what happens when you write something that's too crackastic for anyone's liking, heh.

    But like I said, your mastery at story telling, vocabulary, etc., is top notch as always. There were at least a couple of grammar errors that I managed to pick up on my first read, but they are extremely minor, so it's not a big deal. Besides, everyone makes those errors, and I'm not immune to them myself! I'm sure there are typos in this review as it is.
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  • From ANON - Princesse Hatake on March 15, 2009
    OMFG - that was wonderful... I saw the whole fucking thing play out soo perfectly in my mind.. I took it to sleep and woke up still chewing on it.. My one of my favourites - right up there with that last sex scene in the hall between saku/kaka in Stripped Bare...

    Let me just say that that was perfectly executed, well-written and original in that she wasn't captured and that I want that for myself... a hot somebody with eyes and body burnibg for me the way no other ever will - sigh.

    Oh! AND I LOVE YOU!!

    Please make another bonus chapter, just for me?? Pweaty Pwease??

    It was definitly worth the read and I am so glad that flake put you up to it.
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  • From ANON - mmartini on March 15, 2009
    You are awesome even when you hate the pairing! It was so well written, exciting, so goood! I loved it! Thank you!
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  • From Prism0467 on March 14, 2009
    This is good. I like the pairing, and I am seeing it more and more of late. If I had been your friend in the fic exchange I would have appreciated this very much.
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