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By : lovel3ssangel

From ANON - Devils-Advocate3 on December 31, 2009
K, not sure if I already voted a while back. But just in case I didn't. I vote for Idea one: Naruto POV, he's dreaming about capturing Sasuke, taking him back, the interrogation of Sasuke, they talk, how sasuke escapes, the war in greater detail and this leads into the torture room. then another chapter where sasuke comes in, and they do the nasty, make a speed baby in a chakra womb that floats in mid air, naruto is totally loyal to sasuke. blah blah. ^-^ Sorry. But I have always been & will always be a SasuxNaru Fan. ^-~ In that order. Uki Naru forever. Haha. So yea, I vote for Idea 1!!!
Kisses ^-~
P.s. Good Luck!!
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From serenagold on June 30, 2009
I've never been a fan of male pregnancies either. Although, personally, I've always believed Naruto's Sexy-no-jitsu was a complete transformation. Naruto does house a kitsune spirit and they are known for their gender transformations with result in irresistible partners. And children. So you could always go with that. Hell, I just remembered you started this story with Naruto already merged, so there you go. Perfect solution.

Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Kaliu6-san on June 22, 2009
hmm so far so good, it was really unteresting to see how fucked up sasuke's brain has bekomed! now, you said that you want to see what your readers want! so here it goes:
1. if it's possible, since i saw that sasuke still can be tender and gentle to Naruto (when he wants obviously), after the hot sex thing, can there be some loving Sasuke hugging and kissing Naruto and telling him how much he loves him (and maybe that all he has done is for him) and then Naruto (who is still all broken and with a fucked-up brain from the previous torture), when Sasuke finally treats him like he's his queen or smt, really BE reasured and find comfort in the arms of Sasuke even though he's the one who's tortured him and caused him harm? (twisted? yeah, I know. and sorry for the long sentence, I just wrote it as it came XD)
2. or how about from Naruto's POV at some point ((maybe after the sex scene) Sasuke tells him he loves him bla bla stuff from above but Naruto then starts crying realising how twisted Sasuke really is and/or feeling sorry/disgusted and horrified that he could do such a thing to him and the whole village because of his love for Naruto?(all in all some Naruto-psycho-torture if you get what I mean) And maaaaaaaybeeeee he then tells Sasuke that had he come back "properly" from the start, Naruto would still love him and they would be together bla bla but without the whole massacre and chaos and torturing thing. And a) Sasuke sort of realises what he did => Sasuke-psycho torture (no idea where this could lead though) or b) he understands nothing and goes on with "nah, that was all for the best, you have no idea what you're talking about, Naruto" or c) he's not sorry for the whole massacre thing (cuz he's a power hungry son-of-a-bithc anyway) but he realises he could have had Naruto without having tortured him for three weeks (ugh! 3 weeks! poor Naru...) and starts apologising to his beloved... i don't know how I want Naruto to react though...

Anyway, these are just some ideas, duuno how they sound when written like that or if you'll like them at all, just some suggestions which can inspire you! :P As for your own ideas, I like the part with the no-spoil ending, I love surprises, and the whole thing with the baby adds more drama! *cheers* So that's one vote for that idea from yours truly! :)

Oh, another thing, what happened to Neji and Shikamaru? If you haven't thought that out yet (exept the NejiShikaNaru threesome, which I totally disagree with - SASUNARU RUUUULEZZZZZ!!! *psychotic look*) how about writing about throuth Neji's POV how while torturing them, he sways between his loyalties for Konoha and Naruto and his wanting the torture to stop? but in the end he desices he wants to die rather than become yet again a subordinate like he was to his family and tells Sasuke he would fight for Naruto? And before that last bit he sees how Shika's breaking as well and in the end becomes Sasuke's subordinate because torture's too troublesome and doesn't give a damn to what happens to Neji? And maaaaaybeeeee that's another reason for neji to want to die, seeing his friend/crush give up on him and on everything he believed in? Man, where DO these ideas come from?!?

Anyways, hope to have been of help, good job so far, keep up the good work, even if it doesn't involve any of my ideas! :P
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From Kativachan on June 21, 2009
Why not try all 3? For 3 alternative endings? Otherwise I like #1 the best haha.
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From Jaxxia7 on June 20, 2009
I absolutely adore the way Sasuke finally broke Naruto. I really like the second scenario you have for the story with Naruto becoming Hokage but I seriously wouldn't kill Sasuke. In my opinion it would make things a bit more interesting if Sasuke got out of there just before Naruto could kill him. It would be more of a psychological impact that way. Even though Naruto would do the threesome thing with Shikumaru and Neji the fact that Sasuke was still alive somewhere would lead to Naruto actually craving Sasuke's...attentions? So even though Naruto is free of Sasuke he really isn't. *grin* Just my sick mind going into overdrive there. Which ever scenario you choose, either the first or the second, I know I'm going to love anything you do to this story. I hope to see and update very soon.

Ja ne!

Nefra
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From dragon04 on June 20, 2009
I think you should do idea one with sasuke being hokage and having children. I think sasuke also have to displine naruto from time to time. Also give more detail on their past.
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From ANON - Ivy on June 20, 2009
Also, love the psychological element! I have studied some psychology at school and it is definitely fascinating! Anyways don't bang your head too hard I'm sure a creative solution will come ^_^
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From ANON - Ivy on June 20, 2009
I think idea 1 is the best except I think you can cut the background and focus on picking up at where the last chapter ended. I think the chakra womb is an interesting idea. I think it would be cool if he got pregnant with twins. Also, while being pregnant if he was allowed more freedom so he wouldn't be so helpless like he is now. Also maybe Sasuke opening up to him more about how he wants to protect him, Naruto telling him off for the extreme lengths he took, and finally coming to some acceptance/resolution between the two of them. Just a suggestion...look foward to see what you write ;-)
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From ANON - Ivy on June 15, 2009
I think your story is dark and wicked in a good way ;-) I still don't quite understand Sasuke's motivation...unless it's just being plain crazy! Poor Neji and Shika I'm sure the reeducation must be brutal. I could see you writing several more chapters but I look foward to see how you wrap this up...can it be an uber long smut filled chapter? ^_^
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From serenagold on March 10, 2009
Sasuke's a fool. Sure he finally gets what he wants, but at what cost. A broken Naruto? Thats not the Naruto he desires. I hope once the shock wears off and Naruto gets his shit together he betrays Sasuke's crazy ass. lol

Keep up the good work!
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From Kativachan on March 05, 2009
I've read a few of stories where Sasuke took over Konoha, and became Naruto's 'master'. However, this is very different! You explained how Naruto broke. Very unique, I love it, and am excited for the next chapter!
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From dragon04 on March 05, 2009
PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next. I like the story. I wonder what sort of plans sasuke has in store for naruto. I like to see how sasuke being the hokage change the village.
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From ANON - Ivy on March 04, 2009
Wow, Sasuke really broke Naruto down! Its was very intense but I kind of want to see more of Sasuke's perspective and why he wants to break Naruto. Your writing is very evocative and captures the mood perfectly. Can't wait for the bath scene ^_^ Also, the background would be cool too.
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From ANON - Ivy on March 03, 2009
I think you should add more! It was intriguing ;-) Its crazy that Sasuke killed everybody though...you did good switching back and forth between the past and the present. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From serenagold on March 03, 2009
ooOOoo.. this is dark...

I like it! ^^

Keep up the good work!
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