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By : gingermaya
  • From satterb on May 26, 2009
    AAAAUUUUGGGGHHHH! Kakashi was NOT supposed to do that!!!!! Oh well, I know it will all work out. I guess turn-about is fair play. After what Pein said to him about Itachi and Kisame. I am so glad to see Itachi care so much. I know you don't think you have him in character, but you really do. He's a man of little words. And he accepts no bullshit from others. He saw a problem, and he's getting to the heart of the matter. Itachi really hates trouble in the only family he has now. He just has to protect his precious people. And he would never blame Kakashi, he just knows that the communication lines have to be opened again. Thanks for all your hard work, and I'm glad to see that you are still safe and sound. Love ya girl! Beth
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  • From satterb on May 24, 2009
    Yes, this is it! I was mistaken earlier today when you asked if I had read the latest chap...I hadn't read this one yet. So good! How awful and painful were the words said to Kakashi. I wanted to cry. I'm so glad they made up, and it was a brilliant touch to have Itachi "screech" anything. I loved it! Thanks for all your hard work. I will be worried about you till I hear from you again. I hope everything is ok on your side of the world. Love ya girl...Beth
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  • From satterb on May 23, 2009
    Hello my darling! I'm sorry I didn't review the last chapter, but this one can cover both. The sex was HOT, HOT, HOT! I love Kisame and I love how deliciously evil Madara has turned out. I can't wait to see you write what we talked about...Kakashi meeting that special someone! Poor Pein. I don't like to see him hurt. Only Kakashi can make it better. This is the absolute best you've written yet, it's getting so good, that it doesn't even feel like a fan fic anymore. I hope you are online tomorrow. I really want to check in with you and see how you are. Love ya girl! My hero!
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  • From suzannecmc on May 23, 2009
    I look forward to the conversation:)
    thank you.
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  • From ANON - Yuki on May 23, 2009

    oh and Yuki - Kakashi did more than think about it! cool, ne?!
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    Well, I can't deny that and we all knew it was coming (XD), but it was with his Lover's consent. And it didn't include Hidan, Kakuzu, Deidara, Sasori (that would be weird, but hot, even though he's already dead by this time. =/ I know, I'm a freak.), or even one of the kitchen maids (sorry, bad humor, bad humor.) It only involved Kisame and Itachi, and that was really after Pein drove Kakashi nuts in the cave with those vivid descriptions. Right?


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  • From ANON - Yuki on May 23, 2009
    I'm almost, just almost very slightly, disappointed with the threesome, but not by much. I was sort of hoping for something with a foursome or a little kinky, but it was still very good. Nevertheless, probably one of my favorite chapters, next to 17 and 32-33. I thought the way you portrayed Uchiha Madara to be a little strange, since you've so far done a good job in keeping people most In-Character, but it was still pretty good, and the direction you're going intrigues me. I'm bouncing on the balls of my feet waiting for the next chapter! Keep up the good work. =D

    I'm also wondering if you'll have another scene between the three/four of them again? I'm hoping so, because I've never found a single kaka/pein/kisa/ita anywhere else on the internet - except for one kisa/ita/kaka, but the writing was awful.

    Again, keep up the good work! =D
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  • From suzannecmc on May 18, 2009
    ahh you answered my question about the body I asked a few weeks back!

    you are weaving your tale through the manga "facts", and doing it very well I might add:)

    excellent chapter, with Madara adding so much tension.
    how will Kakashi react - after all Kakashi is a little different since he has an Uchia eyeball.
    what will Nagato do?!

    thanks fo a exciting chapter:)
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  • From satterb on May 17, 2009
    I promise, I haven't dropped off the face of the earth. I've been out of town alot, and have been unable to reveiw the last two chaps till now. I can just imagine how frail and helpless Itachi must have looked to Kakashi. Especially since Kakashi only knows the strength he's always possesed. I can't wait till they all get together, but I know it can't be rushed. First Pein teases Kakashi with thoughts of the other two, and then Kisame is so gentle and loving to Kakashi while Pein was seeing to Itachi. You portrayed this beautifully. Thanks for all your hard work on this, I miss you girl!
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  • From suzannecmc on May 15, 2009
    Yamanaka is Ino's clan and do the mind meld thing, but I like your explanation on how
    the telepathy works as Pein communicates (with Kakashi over distances and how it
    ends up sensual when they do).

    oh and Yuki - Kakashi did more than think about it! cool, ne?!

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  • From arabuzumaki on May 15, 2009
    wow it's so weird to think of kisame and kashi doing anything remotely intimate lol. oh and i don't think the inuzukas are telepathic are they? i know they communicate with dogs and such but i may be wrong. yamanakas are more 'mind' centred.
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  • From ANON - Yuki on May 13, 2009
    Ah, I absolutely HATE those 'mary sue' fanfics about Pein- and they often make him out to be a traig but secret romantic or an insane, crazy, psychopath with a god complex.

    Chapter 41 was... different. It felt like a lull before the storm, and then at the very end, it feels like the "coming soon" sign of the storm. I like those chapters- ones that allow the readers to sit back and slow down their train of thought. It's a nice change, and it gave me a moment to step back and view the situations taking place more clearly.

    Somehow, despite everything, you've managed to do a (excuse my language) fucking good job at keeping Pein In character. And Kakashi, too, although Pein is much harder because we know very little about him.

    Keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - Yuki on May 09, 2009
    To Lividangel: A slut? I don't think so. You heard Kakashi- he wouldn't cheat on Pein. A slut would mean he's already sought out Kisame, Itachi, Deidara (Ka-boom), Tobi/Madara (uh-oh), KAKUZU (oh god, I hate to think of the outcome- although it would probably be pretty hot anyways. =/), and HIDAN (Jashin, no!), Zetsu (no comment) and asked for sex. ;) Kakashi's just thought about it a bit- and who doesn't sometimes?

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  • From ANON - yuki on May 09, 2009
    I'm sorry I haven't been able to give you a long, detailed, thoughtful review in a long time. Very busy, and a lot of stuff took up so much time that it was all I could do to print out the latest chapter to read.

    Chapter 40 is by far your most erotic chapter yet. Really, the things you make Pein do to Kakashi are astounding. They way I interpret it (and I could be horrifyingly wrong) you're leading this up to a moresome involving Pein, Kakashi, Kisame, and Itachi. I know, this is might be under the spoiler/to-be-revealed later category, but it's just a haunch. Most of your writing is Lemon Cake Bittersweet, something a lot of writers have trouble doing. Because either they make it too sweet and sappy, or to bloody, gory, and so full of angst it makes you want to scream in frustration.

    The way you described Nagato's childhood is really sad, considering he's one of those villains who had a really screwed up past and got twisted around the wrong way- he wants to rule the world, because he wants peace. Not your typical "MWAHAHAHAHA I WILL RULE DA WORLD!" bad guy.

    Still, though, I have to admit I really really like the idea of a foursome. I don't think that there's a single foursome between Kisame, Itachi, Pein, and Kakashi ANYWHERE on the internet; not on FF, not on AFF, and not on any other site I've ever been to. Which is a shame, because if written correctly, I think it would be completely hot.

    But of course, thats just me. =O
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  • From suzannecmc on May 09, 2009
    wow - you made kakashi a slut;P
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  • From ANON - yuki on May 08, 2009
    Oooh, I LOVE the direction this is going.

    You're building this up for a fantastic threesome or kisakaka/kakaita/etc aren't you?

    If you are, then I'm completely blown over.

    The descriptions you gave in ch.40 were completely mind-blowing.
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