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Reviews for When Cherry Blossoms Fall

By : inuyoukai8
  • From Shawndra on February 10, 2009
    I think I really like this story. It was very discriptive, although I'm sure that you never heard that coment(sarcasm). I loved each mans view on sex. Rather it was an art or it was strategic. Each one had an idea and supported it with every move. I really hope you add another chapter. Hopfully one as good as the others. You are a very talented author. This story has my seal of approval.

    With much respect,



    The Prince of Madness


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  • From Lunar84 on February 08, 2009
    I'm very surprised this fic only has one review. It's one of the best written lemons I have had the pleasure of reading. I will agree with the first reviewer, the lyrics I think are a personal choice, but I didn't read them. I usually don't. When I see something of that sort in the beginning of a story I tend to pass by it. Perhaps I'm just too eager to read the fic.

    Overall, I am really impressed. You took two pairings that aren't that popular and made them amazing. I have always been a Dei/Saku fan and was happy to see your first chapter was that pairing. I never gave much thought about Shika/Saku. Maybe that was because I haven't come across a well written fic such as this one to support that couple. I have always been a firm believer that if its a good story you can make any couple work.

    It's really disappointing to see such lack of feedback to someone who is obviously done an amazing job. Your grammar and spelling are great, which is a big plus for me. Also, you give amazing detailed scenes. I really hope you conitnue this series. Looking forward to Kaka/Saku, Naru/Saku and Ita/Saku ^_^ Just throwing that out there.
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  • From khalidadae on January 27, 2009
    Let me start off by saying that I enjoyed this. Overall, it was a nice little lemon. However, it was a little hard to get into. I think this is because of the song lyrics at the beginning. They did absolutely nothing for me as far as setting the scene or contributing to the fiction. I'm not sure if this is for a competition or something that requires a songfic. If it is, ignore that comment. In the beginning, there are some one sentence paragraphs that could be combined. I think that would make your story flow a little better. (Not that it really needs help with that...) For some reason, your comma usage changed about halfway through your story. The second half, I loved! The first half, I wasn't so crazy about because the lack of commas made it slightly harder to read. I think I spotted two typos (I know when you're proofing things that the typos just disappear on you. I'm pretty bad about not typing "a" and writing "he" instead of "the".)
    1) Verb usage -"The mouth there teasing the turgid flesh..." I think the "teasing" should be a "teased".
    2) "against he hot vice" I think this should read "against the..."
    My favorite part was when you used the hands as an erogenous zone. It was well done. I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed reading your piece and look forward to reading more from you in the future.
    Khalida-dae
    P.S. I dislike reviews that say "Good! Write more." or the equivalent, so I tried to give you a little bit more substance than that.
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