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Reviews for Forbidden Love

By : Shikasgurl22
  • From evermalace on July 15, 2009
    Not trying to sound rude but there is a story consistency issue with chapter 2... before the sex scene between naruto and Hinata, you said that naruto was taking a shower and ONLY had a towel covering him before they started making out, yet later on you told that he had to reach down his PANTS for his dick... but how did he have pants on if he just got out of the shower and was only covered with a towel? Sorry I notice these things a lot. Good story thus far though, however the consistence is a bit faltering.
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  • From becca330 on March 19, 2009
    Love it! Love it! Love it! More, please. I'm a big fan of threesomes, and combined with Neiji being one of my favorite anime characters...Thanks for a great, well-written read.
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  • From looneyticks on March 09, 2009
    Hmm... this story has a lot of potential. Good plot, good grammar -- nothing to detract from the story. I like how Hinata seems confused about her feelings for Neji, and this makes it possible for the story to go anywhere. Neji is lovely in how frustrated he is, and in how difficult he finds it to express his love, his want for Hinata, knowing that the girl is also in love with Naruto. Good job... update soon. :)
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  • From ANON - Christopher on February 17, 2009
    Angsty second chapter to the story... I especially liked the ending where Neji was found peeping on Hinata..... that made me laugh out loud.
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  • From Ladylara on February 07, 2009
    awe, Poor Neji. That was a great chapter. I cant wait to see were you take this.
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  • From ANON - dave on February 04, 2009
    I cant wait for more. Who is going to be the lucky guy that gets to go for her first. Or maybe its both at the same time. Hopefully it is both or just naruto thanks
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  • From ANON - Word_Slave on February 04, 2009
    I was so happy to see this updated. I can't wait to see what happens when Naruto and Neji find out about each other... Yay!
    Slave
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  • From gordafarid on January 29, 2009
    Actually I had read it for not so long ago at fanfiction.net, but I still love it and hope you continue putting your other chapters. =) There isn't enough good threesome with Hinata! ;)
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  • From ANON - qwerty on January 22, 2009
    Very good beginning. You've intrigued me! ^.^
    Keep going
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  • From Raholea on January 21, 2009
    O_O omg... i feel so sorry for Hina-kun right now. and i can guess at what happens, but now i hafta read. good luck and here's to more story ^^
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  • From ANON - Word_Slave on January 20, 2009
    this is very good. my only advice would be to watch your pov... point of view.. I'm sure you know that... anyway it switches a bit in the midst of the scene and it's a bit confusing. But I love the idea of this and while I almost NEVER ok, NEVER read het (ok so maybe I've read some hinata/neji) I'm really enjoying this. Keep up the good work. Thanks! Slave
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