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Reviews for Return To Innocence

By : WSR
  • From Repanse on December 17, 2008
    Yay! Couldn't wait for the review. I expected to see Sasuke's reaction, but you surprised me lol...the story is getting really really creepy!
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  • From MiraMira on December 17, 2008
    Alright, well, my reviews tend to be on the longer side and I read this all in one go, so I’ll apologize in advance for the X-paged comment ‘ >.>

    I gotta say, I’m a bit nervous starting this…whenever stories don’t have pairings in the summary or in the beginning of the first chapter it ends up being something like NarutoxOrochimaru or Jiraya or something immensely disturbing like that…*crosses fingers and hopes for the best* I think this is a NarutoxSasuke piece, so … here’s hoping *closes eyes and spins around three times*

    Heheh, I feel like such a dork for being so scared while I read ch 2. I was like “omgomg, she said we’d find out what was making Naru so skittish this chapter, it’s gunna be a ghost, it’s gunna be a ghost. Wah~” AH! The suspense is killing me! Who/what is it? You haven’t used the Hyugas (sp?) yet…they could be ghost-esque what with their white eyes and all….omg, please don’t have it be Orochimaru I would start crying if I suddenly saw his undead face TT-TT Kyuubi’s kinda evil-ghost-ish too…lets see, you haven’t used Sakura or Lee yet either….who else who else? I MUST KNOW!! ON TO CHAPTER THREE!

    Ch 3: Hold up, SHIKA made a dare? A dare to watch scary movies no less? Was this before or after Temari decided to paint her nails pink with little red hearts, Ino went mute, and Gaara decided to donate hand-made plushies to a ‘Save the Seals’ foundation? Huh, you’d think that would be too ‘troublesome’ for the lazy genius. Anyways, omgomgomg, why do they always go up the spooky stairs?! Don’t do it Naruto! You’re too cute to die!! Omgomg, clicking noise! Ahh! This is HORIBLE! I can’t hide my face in a pillow or behind my knees like I do with scary movies cuz then I won’t be able to read! Ahh! ((I’m horrible with scary stuff…I went to see Emily Rose, which really wasn’t that scary, with some friends, but I jumped so much that this random guy sitting next to me who I didn’t know started totally cracking up….it was so depressing.)) Anyways, clicking noise, clicking noise *goes back to reading* Ahhhh! No! don’t go in the room! Stand there and call Sasuke! Make him look! So what if it’s a girly thing to do?! The egotistical prick would do it! *hides* Yellow eyes? Omg Orochimaru! Wait…claws…what the heck is happing here?! *cries in corner*

    Ch 4: hmmm, I’m guessing your name’s Kathy Turner? Ok, well, Sakura and Lee make their appearance, so…that leaves the mystery ghost-thing with two less possible identities…who has a little brown snarling yellow-eyed thing….ahhh~! When will we know?! Is Naru-chan really paranoid or is there a legit reason for his fears beyond his unknown-as-of-yet past? If there really isn’t I’m gunna feel really stupid for getting so worked up over all of this Q_Q Aw, don’t say “So let’s see about Shikamaru, well he was actually…” that’s so colloquial!! Bad! Never speak to the reader. Tsk Tsk XP. OMG, GAARA’S GUNNA BE A TEACHER?! Woah. That has to be a fanfic in and of itself. Holy crap. And I thought that my idea of having him in a fashion institute was off the wall. *bows to your awesome originality* oh, and Yay for Jealous Boyfriends! I love how even the sweetest guys look so badass when they get jealous over their girl. Heh

    Ch 5: Water, flour, and salt? Huh, and people think I’m weird for buying kimchi. Go figure. Wait. “Hadn’t used physical force since that last time when they had both ended up in the hospital” they were fighting, rolling on the ground throwing punches and everything over who was gunna make dinner… Ah dammit, when will we know whether Naruto’s really insane or not? ;_;

    Ch 6: AHHHH!!! SEE?! SEE?! What did I say at the very beginning about fics with unmarked pairings? THEY ALWAYS HAVE SOME SORT OF ORONARU THING! Ahhh! My eyes! My eyes!!! Ok. I’m done.

    Ch 7: Ah! What happened? It’s a double cliffie! We still don’t know how Sasuke’s reacted to all of this and now we don’t know exactly how his parents were killed either! What part did the stuffed animal have in their death…I’m being serious with that question….I mean…bombs? Tracking devices? Oh sheesh, now I’M the one acting paranoid.

    Um, if you don’t have one already, could I beta for you? There are a lot of little mistakes with sentences like “He was trying to hide it so they wouldn’t brag on him again but as faith would have it.” (‘rag’ not ‘brag’ and ‘fate’ not ‘faith’ ‘…’ not ‘.’) E-mail me either way to let me know at keitaros_kero_neko at yahoo dot com. Please put AFF or Beta or something along those lines in the subject so I know it’s not spam

    Anyways, I’m done now! Aren’t you glad?
    Well, may the yaoi-muse be with you!
    Miranda

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  • From perfect_blue_rogue on December 10, 2008
    yes in deed, what is gonna happen to naruto now. and i wonder if kiba's gonna go charging over considering he was still connected to naruto thru the phone when he was attacked wasn't he?
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  • From Repanse on December 08, 2008
    Honestly, I don't understand why nobody reviews this fic. It may not be the best in the world, but there so many more worst fics...
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  • From Drumanel on November 22, 2008
    I loved this story the first time you wrote it, but i also like that you have added more detail this time around. can't wait for the next chapter.

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  • From Repanse on November 22, 2008
    I found your story very interesting and intriguing. Can't wait for developements! So update soon please!
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