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By : DarthValgaav
  • From NightEye on January 18, 2009
    I'd have to say Hinata, Haku, Kin, and Tayuya, only because it would be different. By the way, the Elemental circle goes Fire beats wind, wind beats Lightning, Lightning beats earth, Earth beats water, and water beats fire.
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  • From Yamizenchou on January 18, 2009
    For some reason, Kurenai's last statement made me laugh a little.
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on January 18, 2009
    Awesome chapter update soon.

    Hinata, Haku, Kin, and Temari
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 18, 2009
    you should have made him want a tatt on her, other then that it really good
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  • From KaelHyun on January 17, 2009
    Interesting I hope you have Naruto save Sakura from that basterd Sasuke
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  • From Overlordofnobodies on January 17, 2009
    Well that was a chapter. It tell us a lot of thing about that world and how it works. As for Naruto I say Hinata, Haku, Kin, and Tayuya. Thou I have to say take out Haku. He is a boy for care out loud! If you can please tell me why people like doing this to him. I never got.
    As for ideas or things. I want to now how the over girls are doing. Who got Tenten and lest but not lest. LET CHOUJI KEEP INO! I really what to see them as a pairing. You can make it fun or bad just please show them.
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  • From DragonMan220 on January 17, 2009
    I'd prefer Tayuya over Temari, Temari would be more humiliated to be captured by the Lazy Shikamaru. Plus, I can see Shika dressing her up in a sexy maid outfit to do all his chores while he watches clouds. I can't wait to see how the real missions go, especially when Naruto gets Haku added to his harem. I can see her befriending Hinata quickly since they're both kind people in spirit.
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  • From Chronostorm on January 17, 2009
    Personally i think Shikamaru should Get Temari if anything so my vote is for Tauya you will most likely need to make an OC or two for sand and Iwa pretty sure you could use one of the char from cloud that are already introduced
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  • From nimblnymph on January 17, 2009
    Okay... honestly? There's this group of about four of you who write the same damn fic over and over again: Naruto-of-the-massive-cock gets every woman in the entire village. Oh, except Sakura because, you know, she's a bitch. Not a single one of you ever really gives a reason for this, other than the fact that you hate her. Fine. I'll accept that. Not everyone is gonna like the same characters.

    What I do NOT appreciate is the fact that you and your little comrades are writing crap like this. Kunoichi as slaves? Really. Why is that? If this was a practice that went out of use, why would the Hokage reinstate it? Let me guess... you don't have a logical reason for it, do you? You and the other three just like the idea of a completely subjugated woman, one whose personality and character is stripped away so that she becomes a Naruto Cock Junkie. And, God forbid, there's a woman who DOESN'T want his massive dick. Well, she becomes Public Enemy #1.

    Besides the fact that you portray ALL women as whores, you're butchering the entire fandom. Kishimoto may not be the best damn writer out there as far as story and character development goes... but these are still HIS characters you're borrowing. Why not show a little respect for his work and at least ATTEMPT to make them in character? Hinata is very duty bound, but she isn't a slut. She would probably pass out first before ever initiating sexual contact with Naruto, even if those were here "instructions". Also, touching back on the incredibly insulting view on women... you're excuse that they're all slaves to the shinobi? Weak. As can be seen by your little foursome (whether you're friends with them or not, I don't know, but it seems awfully ironic that there are FOUR people who write the exact same damn harem fics over and over. Even your lemons-- or rather what you're trying to pass off as lemons-- read EXACTLY the same), none of you obviously have the ability to think outside the box. Here's a unique idea for you: If you're so hell bent on a harem fic, why not whore out the men? I can't recall EVER seeing a fic done with that premise. At least then we might have a little creativity here.

    Now, on a positive note... in comparison to your minions, at least YOU know how to spell and construct a sentence. That, my friend, is greatly appreciated. What you're lacking in plot and PROPER characterization, you make up for in legibility. Not once did I want to gouge my eyes out. You know when to punctuate, when to use commas, when to break off into a new paragraph. You might want to work more on descriptive phrasing as well as fleshing the story out a bit more. And PLEASE, for the love of God, reread the series so that everyone acts IN CHARACTER. I love a good crack fick... but it's only amusing if you can keep everyone in character in a completely unbelievable setting.

    I do hope you continue writing... just not this fic. I can tell by reading that you CAN do it, and you have the potential to do it well. Just... please. Be more creative than your sock puppet friends.
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  • From Jin on January 17, 2009
    You know, one never imagines sex training as being difficult, but it seems like Naruto is going to have to rise to the challenge. It'll be interesting to see how Naruto gets Kurenai to cum. On another note, I much prefer the Hinata, Haku, Kin, and Temari line up, although that shouldn't come as much of a surprise since I was the reviewer who suggested it. I also agree with you opinion of Kin. Long hair is very attractive and she isn't used nearly as much as she could be in fan fiction. Keep up the nice work.
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  • From CryoBlaze on January 17, 2009
    Nice chapter so far. As for your comment about the girls, I agree with having Kin in there since she isn't used so much. But for some reason Tayuya doesn't strike me as a good one for Naruto (but think of Shikamaru with a slave like her). And for good relations with Gara if Naruuto did get Temari as a slave he could just free her. Going with your comment on someone trying to capture Naruto's slave, that could be the way to get Yugito from Kumo since they tried to take Hinata once before.
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  • From naruto86 on January 17, 2009
    To tell the truth the whole thing of all Kunoichi having to start out as slaves is kind of degrading and I would think that they would have stopped Kunoichi sexual missions because I know for a fact that in Feudal Japan their Kunoichi taking those types of missions were the cause of many of their diseases so in the Naruto world the Medic-nin would have seen this and the daimyo's would most likely outlaw those types of things especially if it could be used against them so truthfully this story seems kinda degrading to many of the characters. Now if it was many of the female characters wanting to become Naruto's slaves like Kurenai, Anko, Hinata, and the girls of the show that would be cool but almost all women as slaves is kinda of a turn off when you really look at it because really do want to risk bedding a women that could be trying to kill you I don't think any sane person would.
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  • From blackimperator on January 17, 2009
    A very good story as usual, i 'd rather vote for temari .

    By the way , will the Forest of Lust have a sequel ?
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  • From GhostwriterMO on January 17, 2009
    Jaw drops.... Whoa!!! On the vote I still think Hinata, Haku, Kin and TAYUYA, for several reasons 1. she's a bad girl that needs punishing, 2. The image of gentle Hinata disciplining said bad girl is just too sexy, 3. it'll be exciting taming a cursed seal level 2 Tayuya and finally 4. when Naruto tames her even more and better info on Orochimaru's schemes and plans (afterall Tayuya is one of his bodyguards). Further more; Sexy yet BRUTAL, I got nothing more to say except that it was a great chapter and please more!!!
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  • From Leaprechaun1 on January 17, 2009
    One from each village and also please post the next story after the fores of lust one please!!!
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