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By : DarthValgaav
  • From GhostwriterMO on January 15, 2009
    In all honestly I vote For Haku cause I liked the character, (poor Shikamaru tag teamed by ino and temari; troublesome doesn't even come close) and I think a nice orange spiral tattoo above Hinata's butt and all his girl slaves would be approprate. Thank you for the chapter.

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  • From CryoBlaze on January 15, 2009
    Well Nice story so far. As for the Temari or Haku, I say Haku should be with Naruto and let Shikamaru or someone else (ecept Sasuke) have Temari. A request could Naruto also get Yugito (jinchurikki of the Nibi) as a slave as well (most likely through someone trying to get Hinata for the Byakugan).
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  • From Overlordofnobodies on January 15, 2009
    Good good good.
    As for the Haku or Temari. Give Haku to Naruto and give Temari to Shikamaru. Like a gift from Naruto just in case he need sameone smart.
    Oh please let Chouji keep Ino and show them to! I really like that pair and there are not many fic with them in it.. Hell you can make Ino fat from liveing with the Akimichi for all I care. I just what to see them for one chapter please!Oh and lemon if you are filling nice.
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  • From Alfred on January 15, 2009
    temari plz
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  • From WhiteWhiskey on January 08, 2009
    Honestly, this is some pretty good stuff. I was a bit iffy about the slavery thing, but you made a great start with it. I hope you will continue with the story.
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  • From Shadow65 on January 07, 2009
    Please update soon
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  • From Leaprechaun1 on January 03, 2009
    Update please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ninjamon909 on January 01, 2009
    I like this very much! You need to continue this story asap!
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  • From SagashiIndustries on December 18, 2008
    I enjoyed this story. Hope we get to see more soon.
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  • From UzumakiIno on November 18, 2008
    This is actually very good. Personally, I hope Sakura and Ino end up as Naruto's slaves (thanks to the challenge rule). Might want to proof-read for spelling and grammatical errors. That aside, I look forward to more.
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  • From Karten on November 10, 2008
    awesome story! Keep going!
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  • From Chronostorm on November 09, 2008
    Ya after a lot more thought i thought i should put this in i love the idea for the story and it is pretty good but you left out some stuff and put stuff in that really doesn't work first of all i don't think under any cercumstances Hinata should know about the Kyuubi right off the bat before hand the people in the village may not like Naruto but they new to shut up when it came to that and Naruto's actions on the whole slave thing don't acount up to how i think he would feel or how the students mind setting on it would be i think he would be more using his athority rather then treat her like normal but not in a cruel manner also Hinata is shy and submissive in general don't fluctuate that keep that way and let Naruto keep the lead sex on the first night is fine but i think it should be part of the mind setting for the male students given they were also most likey taught how to take care of their slaves before hand in the academy in general i think you should also cover more of the reasons behind it as well though i am pretty sure you have the rules and stuff figured out you should have used it in the beginning rather then just jump into it i also think you should limit the girls Naruto gets but also use relationships that are believe able not just crack one for example one between Naruto and femHaku would they have chemistry and what not now Tenten and Naruto who have no real relation to eachother would not be a good one besides i think she would go to Neji overall i just think you didn't change how they were raised with this king of background here are some other stories that may help on this site in various areas Naruto Punishmen in the AU section last time i checked Kouingan - The Seduction Eye and Slaves of the Maelstrom both the the threesome section by the same author (these might help a little bit with the background) either way this ment for constuctive perpouses and i hope it helps you better the story in genral so feel free to send me an email if you wish if you can't find for various reason (me being stupid) plz put in the next chap posting and i will get it to you

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  • From jaxlax21 on November 08, 2008
    Wow, I can see this becoming something awesome! I loooooved your last story and I can't wait to continue reading this one, so hurry up wth the updates. Also, I really hope you put in some lemons with Chouji and Ino (I really like that pairing).
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  • From firelordeg on November 07, 2008
    fantastic start to what can easily be a fantastic story the were a few grammar and spelling errors but it wasnt to bad please update a.s.a.l.a.
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  • From animefan29 on November 07, 2008
    Well this story looks to be a good one. I like how you explained the why isn't holding out for Sakura. Also I am really interested in see that catgirl story of yours.
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