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Reviews for The Writing on the Wall

By : ladygizarme

From ANON - ren on October 09, 2008
Woooot another chapter! Yosh!
Ok, so boy howdy do I know what it is like to have to close one day and go in and open the next. Blehhhh. Poor shika.
he wouldn�t do something as audacious as resetting Shikamaru�s alarm for himself hate Sasuke� love this line� it is kinda cute.
Nyaaaaaaaaaa shika is so thoughtful *heartyheart* how cute!!!
Sasuke stubble huh? Sastubble.. bleh.
Sasuke getting ready..such a primper. I swear.. make sure every single spike is in order Sasuke-chan� *grr* well.. whatever.
Nyaaa so close to seeing Itachi! Not fair!!!! Call him Sasuke.. call him!
The �skater kid� *giggggglezzzz*
Neeeeji�.* shivers with happiness*
Spirit Detective? How cuteness! YuYu ref?
how could the guy even see?), hehehehe� ohhh Naruto� if you only knew.
I love neji�s dickdom..it is supremely awesome�
HAHAHA I read on and it WAS yuyu ref� lmao woot
Neji smiled at him; a dangerous smile. �Don�t touch my cocoa again if you want to keep your manhood intact.� HAHAHAHAHAHA yosh!
I love Temari and Naruto�s interactions.. she is cute the way you write her.
Hey..not just 12 year olds read manga Sasuke.. you snarky bastard.
Hehehehe insulting comes naturally to Sasuke to Naruto. Hmmm wonder why.
Ohhhh Sasuke saw the blonde ghost! Mmmm awesome!! I cant wait for the next chapter dude!
I love this story.. I really like it a lot.. so hurry up and write more
wooot woot!
love ya
ren
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From Prism0467 on October 09, 2008
Very interesting.
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From Houseki on October 09, 2008
Yay! A new chappeh!! Nya! You know I'm totally digging this cuz a lot has to do with my dear Sasukun and all... but it huuuuuuurrrrrrts to see him being tortured the whole damn time! lol Him finding Shika's note.. and starting to *feel* things for Shika is really cute! Aww and MUCH LOVE to shika, cuz shika is SUCH a good guy, leaving pain meds and making sure Sasukun's cell is nearby. But AIYAA! What's this? Blood on the wall? Are ghosts leaving premonitions for Sasukun now? Hmm *rubs chin* ***hides behind hands and laughs maniacally*** *ahem* Annnnnnyways! Poor kid... scared to go HOME! Home is supposed to be a safe haven! But.. seems SHIKA is Sasukun's safe-place ^__^ teehee!! *wonders where creepy dead guy went since he's been mia now for over a week *rubs chin**

Nyaaaa NARUTOOOO!! *luvs* I so can't wait to see how Neji reacts when Naru gets his way about Shika's story teehee! Ohh and the *so* not a squeak from Naru was QOOT!! >.> *ahem* Bloody 'ell Sasukun! That's NOT how we pick up major hot blonde babes! Do NOT make fun of them!! *sigh* silly sasukun *shakes head* Mmmm I srsly want hot chocolate now from Borders!! Nya!! lol *thinks about heading up there sunday when i go get mice from Matt's shop >.>*

and omg... naru? dead naru? Not naru? omg! WTF?! wtf are you dooooooooooing? (ahem teehee) and the death note thing.. wow... again, premonitions for sasukun? mannnnnn poor kid can't catch a damn BREAK! *sigh* hope things will eventually brighten up for my sasukun cuz he can't be picked on ALL the time, right? RIGHT?!

anyways love, great job! can't wait to see the next chappeh! and can't wait for naru's bday! and awesome job at the scav hunt tonight! You and Zack KICKED ASS!! lol Srsly will have to separate you two next week teehee!

*wonders if you even made it to bed after we said night... well, *I* said night, so you're prolly asleep on the couch at your comp or something teehee silly!!*

Love you!

Me
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From ANON - ren on October 05, 2008
wooot to another chapter. sorry this took so long to get to.. busy weekend... like i would put it off intentionally.
ok.. first.. cute that you have sasuke closing... and making sure things were done properly.
VERY cute that he wanted to sit by shika. even though i hate him... i like how you write him.
ouuuch! gtting hit by a car isnt cool....or should i say HITTING a car isnt cool.
His aunt watching Larry King is awesome.. LK is like.. news gold.
i love the scene of him getting home and finding the ghost in his apartment and then running. it has a very good description to it..
it really makes me feel.. kinda scared with him... it has a good frantic feel to it.
i very like the 'casual' way of sasuke and shikamaru's non-ship.. very cool... and very them i think.
i think shika is a very comforting person, even if he doesnt mean to be...he is just so calm and good to be around. My opinion of course, but as i "am" shika.. i should know.
i want to know what number shika is on sasuke's cell...
i love shika's intraction with the blonde ghost. its....cute to me.
Shikamaru supposed, for a ghost, memory was all they really had left. awwwwww
wooot!! shika was doing evps!!
�Yeah, Sasuke, I said yes. Don�t be troublesome, just get over here. How far are you?� dont be troublesome indeed... (my favorite line so far...dont be troublesome)
sasukes questions about the liquor are very like you... i cant explain why, they just are.
hahahahahaha they are watching my channel!!! wooot
�Maybe you should slow down, Sasuke. It would be troublesome if you puked in my place.�

His words were met with a dark glare that clearly said, �As if I would puke.�

i love both of these lines. shika is soooo funny and straight forward.. and sasuke is sooooo vain even in his current state. awesome
you write a good drunk sasuke. i enjoy that *laugh*
He wanted to imprint himself with it from the inside out, to keep Shikamaru with him like a talisman against the horrors he faced seemingly everywhere but here second favorite line. i like to think of shika as a talisman.
extremely hot and frantic lemon dude. mmm sexy beasts.. well... shika anyway.. and i suppose a drunken sasuke isnt all bad...

i guess

so anyways... i cant wait for the next chapter! maybe i will be around to help beta it ne? hmmmove
love and kisses lovie
-ren

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From ANON - MeLaiya on October 04, 2008
omg I am so loving this. You have got to update soon. DONT LEAVE THIS HANGIN!!! Please update soon and keep up the great work.
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From vashta on October 04, 2008
YAY! Smut! I like the descriptive words you used when talking about appearance and detailing the lemon, I have a tough time with lemons. I can see it happening in my mind, but I rush when putting it down, OH WELL! You're a great writer and this story is exactly what I wanted when I issued my challenge, thanks!

Vashta
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From ANON - a kitsunes light on October 04, 2008
I am really liking this story! But I can't wait to have naruto meet them!!!
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From serenagold on October 04, 2008
Wow. That was a hell of a lemon!! O_O

I can't wait for the scene where Sasuke discovers Shikamaru has the same ability as him. Although its a mystery why the ghosts keep attacking Sasuke. Heh, I was half expecting Shaka's civil ghost to flip out and go after Sasuke, only to have Shika remark later on in an afterthough about how troubling it its that now he'll never get the end of his story. hehehehe

Keep up the good work!
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From Shaylilin on October 03, 2008
Poor Sasuke. I feel bad for him having to see the 'bad' ghosts all the time.
It can be frightening enough just to see a 'good' ghost.
It sounds to me like both of them want a real relationship, but are afraid of ruining the friendship.
At least Shikamaru can give Sasuke some kind of relief. It would suck to be living in fear all the time.
I feel bad that Sasuke got hit by Aunt, even if it was only a glancing blow.

*waiting patiently*
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From Prism0467 on October 03, 2008
ShikaSasu, huh? That's a new one for me.

I have kids, too, so I certainly empathize.

This is an interesting beginning. I'm trying to figure out who the blond ghost is! And when the ShikaNaruSasu finally happens, count me in the front row.
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From Houseki on October 03, 2008
WHOAMG! Sasu's uncle chasing him around the parking lot-how horrific! And then getting run over by his AUNT! (not really run over, but.. ya know :P) Poor guy! Then having to walk into his apt to see creepy stalker ghost.. gah! GTFO! (get the fuck out!) I'd run to the closest person i knew as well... and if it was shika.. then hellz yeah i'd run to him for some comfort teehee

luv shika's part.. he's just so.. laid back ^__^ and his ghost is so fun? lol he's cool ^__^

and wooooooooooots on the LEMON!!!! quite hawt mah derr! that's the way to truly get comforted teehee! i luv needy sasuke.. i just luv sasuke right now too so that really makes me feel bad for him lol

motto motto! onegai? ^__^

ashiteru!!!!!!

Me
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From ANON - Sailor Kismet on October 03, 2008
Ooohh...I like it. Please continue. ^^
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From KatrinaCarter on October 02, 2008
*poke* more!

*grins* I can't wait to read more of it!!!! *is excited*
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From ANON - Word_Slave on October 02, 2008
I really enjoyed this chapter and would love to see a second.
Slave
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From ANON - kinkou on October 02, 2008
Mrph! I'm hook hard, already. The way you've worked out their psychic abilities is good... it means they'll work well together. I can't wait to see the next chapter!
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