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From ANON - mmartini on June 02, 2009
This was a good part of the story, mean the interlude. Interesting how people see Sasuke from the outside and knowing Naruto from the inside! You give quite a few point where i can wondering, worrying. The Neji "line", will he use this new information somehow against Sasuke? The more terrifying one: Sai. Im afraid he won't like the idea that he cant control Naruto any further. He is scary, but the plot became more and more interesting because of them. And the drunk Sasuke was great, funny, fantastic. So thank you the experience, and Im looking forward to the next chapter:)
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From Prism0467 on May 27, 2009
Why does a dysfunctional Sasuke surprise you?

Please continue writing.
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From ANON - SamuraiSaaya on May 23, 2009
Wait, what? Were they just going back to Home or somewhere else?

Ack!

Loved the chapter, as usual. I hope they eventually stop the dancing around eachother and get together!

Can't wait for the next update! ^^
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From ANON - Bevino on May 23, 2009
I think your dialogue is wonderful, so please do not take it away.
And I think the same of your story.
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From Prism0467 on May 22, 2009
Great chapter, as always you have tapped effortlessly into Sasuke's mind to reveal to us readers how amazingly bad he has it for Naruto. I must say I am enjoying this.
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From guitarmania2007 on April 15, 2009
Ah, yeah really sad, its really sad that kids have to go through shit like that, some people just should never be parents or be allowed to roam in public, but it happens no matter what and all we can do is make the best with what we have. Shit happens. Anyway good update, the beginning made me smirk and the middle made me sad and then i was able to smile at the end hehe can't wait for more!
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From ANON - anonanon on April 13, 2009
Very nice, very nice. Thank you for posting this!
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From ANON - kaliu6 on April 13, 2009
hmm sad you say.. I don't know i think it's more realistic that way, and it has a story too, not just some stupid waff or pwp. Also I loved the part when Naruto punched Sasuke - he's usually such a bastard, he actually deserves it most of the time for no good reason! :D I also liked the ending waff! It made me all cuddly! I love your story, I could say it's my favourite on all of adultfanfiction.com and my fav AU too, and trust me, I've read a lot ;) So keep up the splendid work and PLEASE update soon, I'm a fanfic addict! :D
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From ANON - youji_yola on April 13, 2009
I'm so glad that this story's officially a WIP since stories with just sexiness get kinda boring after a while. It may have been a therapy story to begin with but damn, it's a well written one at that so I'm really elated to hear that there's plotness. :D

Even from the first chapter, you could tell that Sasuke was screwed not only because of Naruto's award winning charm and godly sexiness, but also because his brain/libido had already made up it's mind about said blond. I liked that horny Sasuke went straight to homicidal mode after he orgasmed to Naruto's moans... sounds like something Sasuke (pre-time jump) would do if he were put in an awkward situation like that. I was going to pick out my favorite Sasuke quote but damn, I love how you write his internal struggles. Period. Sasuke who knows exactly that he wants to jump Naruto but can't because he thinks too much, that is, until his body tells his brain to fuck off. Yup, I really like how you write him since he's super dominating but once Naruto makes his move, he melts like a kitten. And when he got jealous of small things like Naruto having a flirty conversation with Sakura on the field trip bus... so cute. XD

And Naruto... yummy. Sexy Naruto is hella sexy. You preserved his fun loving, idiotic, and super amiable character while making him very close to my favorite type of Naruto (the blue-eyed, blond sex god). He's the right combination of clingy but not too clingy that it makes him sound like a cuddly little puppy and not too horny that he's slutty (-_-+). I too want to know a little bit more of his background because I'd like to know your take on Minato, Kushina (although I hope you don't turn them to abusive parents cause NOOOOOOOOO they are the compelete opposite of that T_______T), and Kyuubi. Even if Naruto's background makes the story a little bit more angst-y, it gives more reason for more Sasuke therapy. :d

I didn't feel like you were bashing Sakura on Chapter 5. I kinda felt bad for her cause Sasuke's such an asshole when he gets jealous and everyone saw (?) how easily she gave to Sasuke's "advance." I also feel bad for her because with all her brains and with Sasuke's random kiss, after ignoring her for so long, she'd probably begin feeling/seeing the UST between Sasuke and Naruto. (I hope you figure out a way to insert the canon yaoi fangirl side of Sakura XD)

You also write the smexy goodness awesomely. It's very descriptive and well written grammar wise, with minor hiccups here and there, so even if the story was just smut, it'd be better than most PWP stories on the NaruSasuNaru section of AFF.

I feel bad that the Home is based off of a real deal because it's not really all that kid friendly and it's horrible that even when they're put in homes, sometimes kids aren't taken care of the way that they need to after dealing with hellish home lives.

Some awkwardness/mistakes I noticed:

Chp.2 "A jolt, very similar and much less painful then an electric one would be," it should be 'A jolt, very similar but much less painful than...' since you're comparing/contrasting the two jolts.

Chp.2 "...he�d stop for moment to reinforce his grip.." missing an 'a' between for and moment.

Chp.3 "It took longer then Sasuke remembered,..." again a comparison so it should be 'than'

Chp.3 "...allowing the oxygen quiet down Sasuke�s blood." missing a 'to' between oxygen and quiet

Chp.3 "Sasuke tried to determent the source," it should be 'determine' not determent

Chp.3 "...couple of minutes now, then having to deal..." comparison, should be 'than'

Chp.3 "...yellow light, prompting himself on..." think the word's 'propping' not prompting

Chp.3 "His forever restless hands slide passed Sasuke�s hips, lower, grabbed his ass to bring them closer together. " should be 'slid past' and 'grabbing his ass'?

Chp.3 "...fingers into the blind strands until they..." should be blond strands

Chp.3 "But Naruto trusted into his hand..." should be thrusted?

Chp.4 "Sasuke maybe wasn�t ready to tell it to the world..." switch Sasuke and maybe? 'Maybe Sasuke wasn't...'

chp.4 "...be more haunting them the actual memory of Naruto�s forever..." should be 'more haunting than the actual'

Chp.5 "It was that math teacher was insisting Sasuke tries this year to get up till the state competition, because winning it would provide him to enter any university that had math for enter examination without taking it at all, even though Sasuke said many times that he was going to study sociology of law. " I don't understand what the teacher wants Sasuke to get up for... Dx

Chp.5 "Why was he bothering with him anyway?" should be 'Why was she bothering with him anyway?'

Chp.5 "The bell ringed just a couple of seconds" 'The bell rung just a couple of seconds'? ringed is describing something with a ring shape.

LOL, can't wait for your next update. XD

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From hieisdragoness18 on April 13, 2009
aww poor naruto but really with saskue there he must be feeling better
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From ANON - mmartini on April 13, 2009
It was good! :3 I just cant get enough of it!! Please give me more! *chu*
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From ANON - SamuraiSaaya on April 12, 2009
Wow, fantastic chapter. I've been waiting for it and the length REALLY made me happy ^^

I definitely like this chapter cause it not only broke up Sakura and Naruto(YAY!), but also it gave a little glimpse into Naruto and Sasuke's life. I felt like I understood the characters just a bit more. Sasuke's jealousy is cute but I wish he'd just suck it up and get together with Naruto already!

Great chapter, please update soon! ^^
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From dolphina23 on April 12, 2009
Okay, finally got to the new update. The deriliction of The Home, as it's called, was perfect. I felt for everyone there, even crazy, fucked up Karin. I liked that no matter how hard he fought it, Sasuke couldn't escape Naruto, his influence, or wanting to be close to him again. I enjoyed reading about Itachi too. He isn't all crazy or some screwed up whore trying to pull Sasuke into it or some tempermental sadist. In fact, I really like him this way. I like that Naruto is sort of the peacemaker and the voice of reason for everyone there. It's sad, sure, that he seems so mature and grown up at that age, but it works for him here, too. I can't wait to see what you'll do with it next. So much for no plot anymore. But that's a good thing, in terms opf radical mood changes and the tone and, of course, the need for comfort sex.

There will be comfort sex, yes? Pretty please?
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From ANON - shinningvixen on April 12, 2009
Wow, I almost grew up in a place just like that. Its really interesting to see someone write about it.
I do think that it adds a nice touch to the way your building Naruto up in the story.
Your doing a great job on your story so far. I'm really looking forward to your next update
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From satterb on April 12, 2009
You did a really great job describing the dynamics of the home. I was just glad that Sasuke had a chance to really see what Naruto lives through. He needed to know just how special Naruto is to be able to have hope regardless of his situation. I have loved this fic and I was very happy to see it updated. Thanks for all your hard work, because I know you did not mean for this to go on this long...but I so very glad it did.
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