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Reviews for The Hunting Ground

By : Ljiljana

From Mija on November 22, 2008
hehe I love this lastest chapter, so if Naruto's getting sicker, does that mean another person is going to die in Konoha or somewhere else close by??? and omg I love the end where Sasuke admits he has a weakness for the Old Granny Cats Cats lol, I hope Naruto busts him and has a good black mail material on him, plus seeing Naru pick on Sasuke about it would be too cute, and still loving the intrigue and mystery, the plot is going along nicely thank you for the wonderful read, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From antilogicgirl on November 21, 2008
Having only just read the first chapter, I can say with honesty that this is very good. While there are some grammatical errors, it's completely forgivable, given the quality of the plot and characterization. Surprisingly, there is no actual character-bashing, for which I thank you. You keep everyone in character while still giving them something that's uniquely yours, and I like that more than anything, most times. But the best thing about this is the way Sasuke is portrayed. He's not at all apologetic, but he isn't a horrible person, either. While I personally have developed a severe dislike for Kishimoto's version of him, yours is seeming like a good, multi-faceted character, worthy of being the primary voice in the story. Though it is too late at night for me to read the remaining 5 available chapters, I'm bookmarking it and will read them soon. Keep up the good work

--A
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From Allys on November 20, 2008
Awww the thought of Sasuke having a weakness for granny cats is way too cute XD. *Gomps u* YAY!!! You updated!! I really do LOVE this story and this chapter was so beautiful!! LOL, I mean that literally all the pretty things that Sasuke kept seeing all the swirling yellow and blue energy, it sounds Gorgeous! And Sasuke being so very aware of Naruto at all times makes me very VERY happy!! The fact that he has to restrain himself from jumping him half the time just makes me want to go full out fangirl! LOL, but I'm also sort of worried for Naruto. He seems really out of it, but then he's with Sasuke, and I know Sasuke will take care of him XD, that's such an odd thing to say, but I think this Sasuke definitely will. I'm excited to see where they're going with this. Nothing serious happened in this chapter, even if it is very foreboding. But the details you put into it made it thoroughly wonderful!! Like Sasuke throwing kunai at Naruto for picking the poisonous berries and the old man with the broken biwa *snickers*, Sasuke's terrible XD, and the little drawing of Kyuubi. LOL, it's just such a pleasure to read this story, it makes me happy *HUGS U*.

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From Kimra on November 20, 2008
I love your story. :D It makes me happy! :D
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From hieisdragoness18 on November 20, 2008
hmmm whats wrong with naru? and who the hell is granny cat?
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From sonotgoingthere on November 20, 2008
Another great chapter. I'm really looking forward to when you finish the story so I can go back and re-read it all again.
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From Allys on October 28, 2008
YAY!!! You updated!!! And I missed it *headdesk*. Damn, at least I didn't miss it totally! Sorry, I was so wrapped up in this doujinshi Ivvy and I are trying out that I haven't been doing much else.

I Loved the chapter XD. I mean, a whole chapter of just my two fav boys... What's not to love?? XD. I really do love that Sasuke is all grown up sensible and relaxed in this. He truly is "one of Kakashi's" in more than way. His old sensei seems to be rubbing off on him :).

And Naruto XD, so adorable. I enjoyed them skirting the issue of Naruto's crush XD, LOL. The whole time I was reading it and thinking, come on Sasuke, connect those dots, but *snickers*, he's still clueless. Or okay maybe not clueless, but he isn't even looking in the right direction. *Huggles him*, I'm dying for him to figure out, or Naruto to confess whichever comes first.

I also really like that all Naruto and sakura's little schemes and plans are coming to light, poor sasuke doesn't even suspect. But I think it's wonderful that they're trying to include him and that Naruto wants to keep Sasuke close.

The little bit about Naruto and the civilians was worrying, very amusing XD, but still worrying. Did Naruto really kill the contact guy?? I'm hoping Sasuke got that bit wrong :(.

I'm really happy that in the end sasuke decided to help Naruto. I love how you characterise him in this. LOL, actually I always love your Sasuke XD. And your Naruto's make me want to kidnap him and run off screaming "Mine!".

I hope you update again soon, I am seriously Loving this story!! *Loves on you for writing it*
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From ANON - abhorsen3 on October 26, 2008
Just found your story and I find the plot interesting and am looking forward to where the story is going. Am I correct in assuming that the thing that is killing people is in the basement of the police station and the fact that people started going to the basement kinda woke it up or something? We know it's related to the Uchiha's anyway.

Hope you update soon, I have some thoughts on where your taking the story but for somethings I have no clue so I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next^_^
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From ANON - Nami on October 25, 2008
I bloody love this story. I love love love it. It's so interesting! Hahaha, Naruto. You sneaky protective, those little almost mistakes. Sasuke, he wants you in the village because he doesn't want you hurt/doesn't want you where he can't see you, or wants your input, or wants your prickly lil' butt }8D. PS, I love Sasuke in this. He's still... broody but in a mature relaxed way. Both he and Naruto are so mature now, but ICly so. And they're both still capable of their little 'nyah' moments. So cute. Really, I think I'm in love with this Sasuke (poor lonely sex deprived guy).

And saving the animals and 'one of Kakashi's'. It's so... sad thinking of him as dead still, but sad in a far off way that portrayed so well in the team. And also the realization of Naruto killing a civilian was well done, and not charging after to save those guys from wolves. Well placed and a good bit of Naruto info we didn't have before. Awawawa.... I can't wait for the next chapter~!
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From Kimra on October 25, 2008
I'm bad at reviews, but I really love this story! Please keep writing! :D I love the slow unwinding of tension and plot, it's just awesome.
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From hieisdragoness18 on October 24, 2008
ack. i hate waitin
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From hieisdragoness18 on October 17, 2008
plot thickens. lol can't wait to see what happens next
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From Allys on October 16, 2008
YAY!! You updated *Glomps u* XD. Hmmmnn... No I don't think Sasuke's too soft. I like the idea that he mellowed with age. It lends credibility to the story. I think that in the end after he's gotten all his issues resolved that Sasuke will probably turn out to be a pretty cool guy (or I hope so anyways). This chapter was really good. I absolutely enjoyed Naruto pushing his luck XD. LOL, I kept seeing Sasuke in my head changing the subject to "So, why exactly am I not allowed to have sex until I've solved this case?? Cause that's beginning to annoy me." LOL, Not that he'd ever bring it up quite like that XD. *Huggles u*. I also enjoyed the two twists you snuck in here. Naruto being a suspect and then Sasuke's memory of Shisui. I really like that the idea that this is something old and recurring, it broads the possibilities into the supernatural rather than just your run of mill murder. That should be fun. And umm... I LOVE your plot device XD *snickers*, anything that brings the boys together is completely welcome *nice guy pose*. Speaking of... Was that Lee in Sakura's bed? Or someone else??
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From Kimra on October 16, 2008
I like how your writting it. Too soft? not that i noticed. I like him! :D Yay!

Please keep writing! :D
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From dolphina23 on October 16, 2008
No, no Sasuke is just right. Shame on you, making him so good I want to do nothing but read more about this version of him. A great chapter, but from you, I wasn't expecting anything else. Though, is this now a hint as to future growth between Sasuke and Naruto's seemingly stagnating relationship? I do hope so. I was a little confused by Sasuke waking up and it suddenly jumping into a thought about Shisui and his memory of it. It felt like there was a gap, but maybe that's just me. I loved it anyway. I can't wait for more.
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