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Reviews for Dark Temptations

By : Fallenangelz
  • From ANON - Christopher on March 22, 2010
    Little problem with the whole 'knows right from wrong' bull in the latest chapter.... that is so viewpoint outside of a very few things, as to be totally meaningless in real life.
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  • From dizzydani on March 02, 2010
    Neji's out.(hyuuga secrets n all).Kaka is my fav char.,but he's 2 old,gomen.(wasn't that gr8 @ teaching naru)kiba,choji,ino..no,no,no.hinata would B gr8,but another hyuuga.I'm not sure what kinda of fighter U want her 2 B,but shika,ot lee.that's my vote (if it's not 2 late.)gr9 f*cking story,arigato
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  • From dizzydani on March 02, 2010
    Xcellent f*cking story
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  • From NarutoVixin on February 15, 2010
    its a hard one to pick i like the 3 males but cant pick one over the others but i do like 2 over all 3 those 2 are Neji and Shika outside of that i cant pick sorry
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  • From angelnomiko on February 07, 2010
    wow that was awsome .. i love it and i think it would be funny if kakashi or shika is mahina’s teacher .. please please update soon later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - E. on January 22, 2010
    AGAIN - SOOO SORRY FOR THE LONG-WINDED REVIEW!

    Oh - also concerning Neji - He'd be a hard ass teacher, like Hiashi, and like Gai, He'd push her and challenge her and wouldn't take his role lightly. He wouldn't give her any slack, hell even if she gets him to lighten up and take the stick out his ass, he'd be stern and on her back nonetheless - He'd work the hell outta that girl. That's how I picture Neji.

    So really it all comes down to where you see ur fic going, and the characteristics she'll need for any future conflicts with classmates and oto-nins. Then choice the best character that would instill those traits in her.

    With kaka-sensei it would be loyalty. Loyalty, inner strength, wisdom, intuition.

    With Neji-poo, it'd be hard work, determination, ferocity, fast thinking on your feet (kaka too).

    I didn't even consider Shika, cause he's just tooo lazy! lol lol lol

    Regarding Sasuke - when will you let us know what really happened that night he returned to Konoha?
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  • From ANON - E. on January 22, 2010
    Hi - please don't be mad - I love the story, I really do. I didn't realize how long this was, but I just had to get it out. Please forgive me (I was also too lazy to sign in, but u can always email me back...)

    I'm liking the story so far, but I can't help but feel that you rushed it a bit. I was completely lost at the beginning of the last 3 or 4 chapters. I had to re-read a few chapters just to make sure I didn't skip any before I realized that you did a time skip and made her older.

    I know it's your story and you'll do what you want.. but I hate what you've done regarding Sasuke. Mahina was terrified of him, how can he just... fall back into their confidence just like that, how is he witholding info that both he and Mahina know, but Naruto doesn't know as is implied at the ending of this chapter.

    The flow just isn't making sense to me. And I'm disappointed because I had such high hopes for this fic. I was really looking forward to a well-written, well-thought out story - which it is. I'm not flaming you. But you know when you love something that has such potential only for the creator to seemingly rush it - it makes one frustrated.. I only want you to take your time - don't care how long I have to wait for the next chapter - just, blow me away like you did in the first few chaps.

    I also agree with the person regarding Tsunade's role - It's pissing me off, because she is supposed to be the best, and being the Hokage who has to assign Seduction Missions (assuming those exist in cannon [cause i just dont know really]), I would think she know's what a sexually abused vajayjay (woman's genitals) look like. She should at least recognize mental illnesses and disorders - if only the basics.. But again, you are the author, and I respect that. Just, voicing my oppinion as an excited fan is all.

    BTW - I think Kakashi would be the obvious teacher - he has the most knowledge beyond jutsu, he seems to be somewhat patient and understanding he can regal her with stories of both her dad and granddad and still protect her if it comes down to it and be her confidant should she need that shoulder. Plus he might see it as making up for the neglect he showed Sakura... Plus I can't help but think he's a lil lonely on the inside. He needs a precious person that he has a direct platonic relationship with. Makes me wanna jus kiss him til his cheeks fall off!! lol

    My second choice is Neji - because I love him. Point Blank. Hands Down lol! And also because He might see it as making it up to Hinata and Naruto for his attitude in the chuunin exams and etc. He needs to be distracted from the clan, I believe...
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  • From NarutoVixin on December 29, 2009
    give the girly to shika or Kakashi those are the 2 she would probly work best with tho neji comes a close 3rd for me

    btw lovely as always
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  • From ANON - Jacob on December 19, 2009
    This is one of the best stories I have ever read! Keep up the great work.
    For the poll of jounin teachers, I cast my vote for neji, he seems like he'd be a good teacher for her.
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  • From NarutoVixin on December 10, 2009
    its a toss up between Shika and Neji for me Shika couse he would know how to handle her and Neji couse he is a strong fighter yet has brains as well and Hinata would be some what invalved with some of his training i bet
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  • From NarutoVixin on December 05, 2009
    damn that was good now i have to wait for the next chapter lol
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  • From NarutoVixin on November 28, 2009
    i know how hard it is for a child to heal from that kind of pain thank you for writing that and being able to show just how hard it is for a child to heal from the worst kinds of pain it makes me feel like im not so alone now
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  • From Shawndra on November 20, 2009
    This is indeed a new take on your typical Naruto fan fiction. I greatly enjoyed it. I recognized the writer tool you used within the first couple chapters. You giving the reader questions that in order to be answered they have to keep reading the story. Despite implementing a new character, you have even managed to retain most of the cannon personality.

    With Much Respect



    The Prince of Madness

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  • From DragonMan220 on July 03, 2009
    I can just see Naruto running all out to Suna only to find Mahina happily eating cookies and milk after Gaara assures her she'll be safe there. I can so see Gaara crushing anyone who comes after her!
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  • From DragonMan220 on June 13, 2009
    I hope Naruto gets to beat up whomever is trying to hurt his daughter. And then let Hinata have her turn! Nobody messes with her child!
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