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Reviews for Dark Temptations

By : Fallenangelz
  • From ANON - Anon on May 28, 2009
    Good stuff, very engaging for a story.


    Hope to hear more.

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  • From statnin on May 26, 2009
    I Like this so far
    keep it up
    Leaf > Out
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  • From DragonMan220 on May 25, 2009
    Mahina and Hinata go together great! I can just see Hinata becoming Mahina's Mommy figure. After all, Hinata pretty much broadcasts calming feelings with everything she says or does.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 14, 2009
    I like this so far - is this on FF.net?? I want to add it to my favourites

    what does mahina mean?
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  • From Archfiend on September 03, 2008
    Ok, this story is not bad actually , a little short in chapters, though I just prefer long chapters. I do want to know what happened to her and what will happen next even though this story is one of the darkest I have seen and yet i cannot shake the sense of foreboding doom off, Orochimaru is a real sicko, but the mystery behind the girl intrigues me.Please update
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  • From serenagold on September 02, 2008
    I'm surprised Tsunande is so naive when it comes to the extent of abuse the child could have possibly received. Obviously any tests that she'd do would still be tests, regardless to the lack of mal-intent that Orochimaru's would contain.

    Of course the real question is wither Hiru is an imaginary friend within her mind or the result of one of Orochimaru's experiments. Personally, I'm rooting for crazy, since they are way too many new sealed beasts in fan fiction as it is; being slightly insane and finding a way to overcome that and make it functional would make for a much more interesting read. Although it would be harder to write. :/


    Keep up the good work. This is definitely an interesting story and I'd like to see you continue it.
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  • From ANON - wraithguard on September 01, 2008
    THe italics stuff never works right


    just give up~




    but keep writing!


    your chapters are too short, i require Moar~
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  • From ANON - Umbradenex on August 27, 2008
    Seems like a very good story so far. gonna keep a look out for updates to it, so please continue it.
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  • From REM1985 on August 20, 2008
    Okay, I was seriously unsure after reading the first chapter of the story, but the second chapter has made me a believer. This is shaping up to be a really good story and has so much potential. I can't wait to see what you do with it. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Wraithguard on August 17, 2008
    I like the premise, and you haven't been a horrible writer in this yet~


    so! press on! Move ahead!


    get this party rolling

    YES
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  • From Ficfan3484 on August 17, 2008
    I can't wait till you update next. I can't wait to see what you write next. ^_^
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  • From whitefrost on August 12, 2008
    Hmmmm... not much to say on this prologue. It was kind of short, yet it still holds promise. Suggestion: Add some more to the chapter to get people drawn in. Especially when adding your own character.
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  • From ANON - Masamura on August 11, 2008
    Does it make me twisted to actually want to see the rest of this story? I hope not, but anyway I would like to see more of this story so please update soon.

    I am quite proud to be the first to rate this story and also to break the ice on the review page. Hopefully the rest of the people who read this story like it too, but if not, then you will at least have me to read and review your story.

    I liked the first chapter overall, it gained the attention of the reader, and also since I am a bit of a spelling and grammar freak, I was very happy to find few if any mistakes, unlike many other stories. The chapter's length was a bit short, but since it was just the prologue, I guess it doesn't have to be long. I hope the next chapters can be longer, but if it means updating less often, just ingnore what I'm saying.

    Anyways, love the story and please update soon!
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