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Reviews for Can I dream too

By : animelives2000
  • From BadkatPat on July 27, 2008
    Wow. This is an interesting post, let’s discuss it. First and foremost, you say that spelling isn’t your strongest point, but if I were you I would invest in learning how to use spell check on a word processing program and if you don’t have one there is always Open Office.

    Secondly, dictionary.com or thesaurus.com. are excellent resources for when you’re having a problem finding a word to convey your thoughts.

    Thirdly, there are tons of books out there on how to plot, format, and how to write a story. A story has a beginning, where the writer interests the reader with the story, a middle where the plot thickens (to use an old cliché), and an ending where the conflict of the story is resolved and the story ends.

    Your post is a jumble of thoughts and feelings and I think that you’ve attempted to convey in a unique way how Naruto feels like he isn’t worthy to dream as others do, that he is alone and nearly friendless and that he feels that if his parents were alive they would reject him too. This is a nice little start, but you need to have a little more than a beginning for it to be considered a story.

    When you want to post a story, perhaps you could ask yourself these questions when you sit down to type. What is Naruto’s problem or conflict? What can Naruto do to solve the problem? Are there forces beyond his control that prevent it from happening? Are there friends that could be brought into the mix to help Naruto solve his dilemma? How do I want to end the story? Because, you, as the writer, are in control of these fictional characters. They are at the mercy of your bidding.

    For example, let’s say you asked yourself these questions and you’ve decided that Naruto finds out that a member of the village is turning the people there against him; that this unknown person has a grudge against Naruto. Perhaps Naruto enlists the help of the people who do treat him as normal and they discover this person and his agenda. The plot thickens, right?

    Then, you decide that after Naruto and his friends discover this unknown person, the either fight or work out a way to end his little plot to turn the village against Naruto and the story ends with some sort of resolution.

    A plot is the backbone of a story.

    Please continue to write, because that is the way you learn. I’ve learned from my own experience that learning the basics really helps when you go to create a story.

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