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By : Sylvir
  • From ANON - fichcake fan on February 20, 2009
    thanx for the update. i don't have membership here so my reviews' name tend to change
    anyho i've been reading this and waiting for it patiently.
    i really love this fic and happy that you do plan to finish it
    my my angst is coming (T^T) so i'll just enjoy this happy moment when it last ne
    thanx (ooohhh can't wait for the next chappie
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  • From ANON - Michiru on January 12, 2009
    Wow! After ages of not visiting adultfanfiction.net, I finally stumble upon another fic that makes me want to return to this site and check upon it daily! I loved a lot of things about this fic.. It's well-written, it's engaging, and I really like how you portrayed over-protective Itachi. His overprotective-ness can be really over the top at times and I think this matches well with canon!Itachi who think he's doing the right thing but is actually pretty screwed up. I can't wait for the NaruSasu moments, so looking forward to the next update! Btw, do you post at any other sites besides AFF?
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  • From goodchaos on January 11, 2009
    Ooh!! I can't wait for the First KISS XDD!!!
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  • From Sigart on January 09, 2009
    Oooh, this is good. very nice indeed.

    Well-written, fluid and most important of all, interesting. I love the references and notes to Japanese culture you use. And that you use it in the story, not just... uh... you know, like someone trying to prove to everyone else how knowledgeable they are.
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  • From ANON - MewMew2 on January 07, 2009
    Thank you so much for updating your wonderful story during such a busy time. Please continue to update when convenient for you.
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  • From missbri88 on January 07, 2009
    Hi!!! Im new to the story, but Im already in love!!! ^^ The artistic and creativeness is refreshing and a different spin on the Naru/Sasu pairing. There are minor spelling and grammer errors but I dont remember where they are and they can sooo be over looked because the plot is amazing. I cant wait to see more and I never thought i would hate tax season... That goes to show how great and awesome this story is. lol. I'll be waiting with baited breath until the next chapter, until then...
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  • From ANON - colgate on January 07, 2009
    yay XD
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  • From ANON - just another reader on January 06, 2009
    I like this story! I like what you are doing with it. So far, I suspecting the disturbing issues of "uke and seme" will be settled. But, for me, since Naruto is so willing to do things for Sasuke, NO it doesn't make him "uke'. I think that both characters, in general, are both the uke and seme. I just don't want to read a story when one character is soooooo set on the uke and the other seme. Both fight for dominance and a relationship is give and take, and that is how I see Naruto and Sasuke--both are the uke and seme.

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  • From ANON - narusasu on January 06, 2009
    (~sqeee) you don't know how happy you make me just by updating this awesome fic.
    i really i mean reaaallly love it
    just can't wait for their first kiss!!!
    oh how i love NaruSasu
    thanxx
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  • From ANON - akai amaterasu on November 21, 2008
    Hello,

    I've just read your story and would like to tell you that I really like how it is flowing.Your style gives me the impression to be the silent observer of a real life situation, not just following another play with an overused plot that is so predictable you only need to read the first chapter to know how the story is going to end. (It's happened enough already.)

    Please continue delivering such high quality writing. It really makes my day.

    P.S.: There is an inconsistency in chapter 3 concerning Anko.
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  • From Management on November 21, 2008
    Well, if you beg for fogiveness, what can I do?
    XD. Anyway... This chapter was really good... I liked the part with the psychologist... And I doubt any of your readers have experience with psychologists, so you're probably safe for that anyway...
    I'm starting to like Sasuke more. I mean, he seems all scared and fragile (as Naruto puts it...) But he's better when you continue.
    Anyway... That was a good chapter... Naruto and Neji seem weird though...
    Oh, and I'm sorry I scared you by putting a whole lot of capital letters, but I couldn't help it. I was hyper at the time...
    XD Well, can't wait till next chapter...
    Oh, and I have to look at other people's reviews more. I mean, I thought I wrote alot, but it seems like someone recopied the whole chapter in his review! XD
    Till next time!
    XD LANE
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  • From asm613 on November 21, 2008
    ((( “I had a taste of him when I cornered him in the bathroom. The inside of his mouth is so warm even if that beautiful body is so cold.” The red haired boy had enough sense to pull away before Naruto could throw him off.

    “I hope it was good because you are never touching him again!")))___Naruto suspected Gaara did something more than just bully Sasuke, and he was gonna hit him. Now Naruto has confirmation from Gaara himself that he cornered Sasuke and forced at least a kiss on him. Naruto is now emotionally attached to Sasuke and feels protective__yet Naruto still didn't hit Gaara. Even after seeing how what Gaara did to Sasuke affected him-the panic attack, the lost look. Did you just forget that you had wrote that Naruto was going to hit Gaara? I thought it was a nice touch having Sasuke make Naruto a bento. Naruto's reaction and how he looks at Sasuke as more than just a sexual conquest is nice also. Don't quite know why you're giving away future plot in your chapter end notes-takes some of the fun of discovery away.Your version of Sasuke's character is quite different from others I've read_but that's part of the appeal. It's nice to see different outcomes and possibilities with the change in the character's personality. Your story continues to entertain-thanks for sharing it.
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  • From asm613 on November 21, 2008
    I forgot to mention you having Naruto removing Sasuke's watch to make him more comfortable (so he can be surprised to discover the tell tale signs of someone slashing their wrist). That is the biggest stretch of reasoning I've read in quite some time. Maybe if he watched Shizune move it out of the way to check his pulse_it would have seemed more realistic.
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  • From asm613 on November 21, 2008
    ((( “I’ll explain everything to Principal Tsunade no one will get into trouble.” He tried to give her his best puppy dog eyes.

    To his utmost surprise she folded. “Fine, I’ll write notes for your first class but if he doesn’t wake in the next half and hour then I call his brother)))___This chapter started great. But when you got him to the nurses office it kind of went down hill. The school nurse would never agree to let a student talk her out of contacting the other child's guardian. And what kind of school nurse would let someone lay unconcious for 1/2 hour before checking pulse, blood pressure, smelling salts...If this was an alletgic reaction, Sasuke could have died within that time frame. And why would Shizune suddenly say that she needed to talk with Naruto and Tsunade together about this incident?_and without the patient. It's obvious to the reader that Sasuke had a panic attack; but the nurse wasn't there to see it happen, so she doesn't know whether it's a serious condition that Sasuke may have. A school nurse would not let someone she is medically responsible for be taken out of the office and home by another student without first talking to the guardian and making sure the medical condition isn't serious. It's like you threw logic out the window. If Itachi is as protective as you say_he would always have his cell phone on so that Sasuke could always contact him. I believe he would set the phone to vibrate, not shut it off. That way he could still be contacted by Sasuke but not disturb the class with the phone ringing..
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  • From asm613 on November 21, 2008
    (((He is also just being a bully to Sasuke.)))___
    You say Gaara is just bullying Sasuke here. He sexually assaulted Sasuke-and that Naruto didn't punish him for it was lame. You said Naruto was going to make Gaara pay-to me that includes punching the dumb fu_k in the face; so that he wouldn't be forcing kisses on anybody anytime soon. You had Naruto say that Sasuke wasn't just scared; he was terrified_then you had him say he was embarrassed-which is it? Why didn't Sasuke report being assaulted? Still reading, thanks for writing.
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