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From ANON - Anon on May 01, 2010
Awwwwwww, too cute!!! I am most definitely going to LOVE this story!! Great start!! Aww, OFF TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!!
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From ANON - jellybean on April 24, 2010
Hm...I just tried to leave a review and it somehow didn't work. So here goes another try...

I read the whole story in one sitting. And I'm definitely hooked. This whole setup is great and this is really fun to read.

I love Naruto and Sasuke and their "flirtatious banter"/sexual tension. And Sasuke with kids is just cute. Naruto's little soulmates though made me smile.

And Itachi and June...I don't usually like OCs, but you definitely do a good job with her. Although Itachi's whole eye diagnosis screw up definitely seems like a nefarious plot. Especially since Kabuto and probably Orochimaru and the whole deal with the Uchiha company is involved. And now June's going to Gaara?!

You have plot, characterization, and humor...it's fantastic. Can't wait to read more!

PS- what is it with everyone saying things in Spanish/Chinese (June)?
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From luvesskiki on April 07, 2010
Aaaah! I loved it! dfsjhldsughliiuhvopfoe'['r';rsa'rsa'rtsa'p9esieruioyearoi *froths at the mouth and falls to the floor*

Kiki
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From ANON - shawdow on March 19, 2010
when he says fun things are u thinking what im thinking
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From ANON - Anon on February 21, 2010
Love, love, love this story and am looking forward to future chapters. Papa!Sasuke just makes me happy for some reason.

I have to ask though, just what role does Sakura play in this? In different chapters you've had her as different people, it seems (aka one chapter she's insulting Ayame's mother, another she is Ayame's mother), which might just mean I'm missing something or it could be a small continuity error. Just figured I'd mention it. Either way, I can't wait til the next chapter comes out...especially if Sasuke starts to get over himsellf in it. :B
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From asm613 on January 22, 2010
The Naruto anime toon had a 'curry of life' episode also. curry made special and with love can cure people and heal injuries and bring back chakra, blah, etc....they must have really run out of ideas for filler episodes.

((different things going on in our lives.�))____they're both single fathers with careers. Sounds like a good match. Like Naruto said-most guys don't go for guys with kids; but they both have kids and naruto liked the full dinner table and sasuke seemed to enjoy the families around the table when they ate at the uchia's. Might as go ahead and fast track their families combining happily together.

And the girl doctor is lying to another person=her best friend even. if she's just going to ask a favor-why is she making it seem so dangerous. if she's just asking a favor, why not do it over the phone? I guess you'll write and tell us why.

love the kids and their interactions. Like that Naruto was finally able to have a straight talk with sasuke about them getting to know each other again/better/forever...

Happy new year to you and yours. thanks again for sharing the story.
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From asm613 on January 22, 2010
((�I would divulge any information if it were beneficial to my patient,� June replied evasively. There was no way she could tell Itachi what was going on. He would certainly do something to endanger them all, if this thing was as dark and well thought out as June was beginning to believe.))

Itachi has been being poisoned for years and she doesn't think he should know-yet.
But she calls Deidara and gives him a cryptic warning. Isn't Deidara duty bound to tell Itachi not just as friend but employee. What will Itachi feel when he finds out that after being poisoned this girl he's interested in lied to him and went behind his back and told others part of the story before he heard it.

And what makes her think Itachi would 'ruin' her plan. Itachi and family must be as wealthy and powerful and influential and have 'connections',etc...as much as Gaara if not more.
So the only reason i can think of for you to go to such a round about way to this is because you wanted to bring Gaara into the story now.

It's an interesting story. I wished it moved faster and updated quicker_but beggars can't be choosers. Thanks for sharing the story with us. You're a good story teller and a good writer. The dialog and characterizations and the interactions, etc...All good.

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From Calcifer on January 09, 2010
Nice :) Looks like the begining of a beauuuutiful friendship... yes... friends. Too bad the kids have awful timing.

Keep up the good work!

~Angel
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From DevilnBlue on January 08, 2010
OMG this is so cute and hot and cute. I like June and think it's so precious her full name is Juniper. I feel sorry that her and Naruto didn't work out and she still has lingering feelings for Naruto but she now has Itachi to start pining over so that's good. I love Touya and Kei and Ayame they are so cute. I really love Kei because he reminds me of a minature Naruto although so does Ayame.

I so want you to bring Sakura to visit Naruto and the others so Sasuke could meet the woman who has poisoning Ayame's mind. That was so cute... and sad what Ayame has been learning from Sakura.

And my god I love the whole plot twist with Kabuto screwing up the eye test and going further by prescribing pills that would harm instead of help Itachi. My gosh she's going to Gaara? Dude I'm so worried about that for real. He sounds like the freaking godfather. Will he want Naruto's sexy body in exchange for help? Probably would and my god what would he do if he finds out that his ex is seeing Sasuke? I'm sure he won't be pleased at all.

Oh my gosh Sasuke ran like a little bitch when he saw Naruto. I nearly burst out laughing at that. I love the witty banter and flirtaious hints between Naruto and Sasuke and am looking forward to developing as more.

Sorry if this review is uber huge since I just ran into this awesome story yesterday I wanted to express my joy for each chapter and one massive review. And I know unfortunately that I will miss some things but I'm glad you are updating this story. It's heart warming and funny and suspenseful all at once.

Awww flirtaious Itachi is so adorable especially when he's trying to win over June or scarring his little brother by flashing his hot bod. I really like how you incorporate pratically every character in the anime without making it seemed jumbled. It adds with just enough chaos and June seems totally beliavable.

My god does Iruka make the best super mom for semi taking care of Naruto and June or what? Does Ayame call him granpa or uncle or what? Aww Ayame protecting Kei and Touya as a female ninja was so freaking cute. The fact that she wears blinding orange while she does it is funny. She sounds like a handful but precious all the same.

Sorry if this review is scattered, I'm trying to dredge up the moments that stood out for me most and putting them down as I go. So any who... This is amazing by the way. Awww Naruto sort of has a sugar daddy. So can see Gaara in the mafia. It's so him and I wonder if Tsunade will break Kabuto in half when she finds out that four eyed ass has been tampering with important files. I felt like Sherlock Holmes when his name got brought and I remembered the signed tests by Y...K... I was like 'holy crap'!!!

But yeah... awesome... you must do more to feed my need. If you have an updating list I'd love to be on it since gleaming on your A/N you sometimes update sporadically which is understandble. So please do... k ja.
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From Daydreamer79 on January 06, 2010
I'm always so happy when this is updated. I'd like to try that curry ramen, it sounds delicious. I'm glad it was Sasuke at dinner instead of Kakashi. I really look forward to seeing the two finally together. :D
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From cynaga on January 06, 2010
So nicely written~!
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From Mija on September 21, 2009
ooh I love where the new plot is going, it makes so much more sense now, I mean it explains how Itachi goes from going blind to not going blind and from Tsunade to being a well renowed doctor to a blundering idiot who turns out is NOT, but its actually evil Kabuto, but I wonder why Kabuto would want to torment Itachi all these years, make him think he was going blind and perscribe him meds that would harm in in the long run, meds he is taking for years, things that will kill him gradually not FAST, I mean that is just.....NUTS! but why didn't june just come out and SAY it in front of the prick??? I mean what is he gonna say???? and even if she didnt say it to Tsunade she could of told Itachi no??? why go to Gaara?? I am sure Itachi could hire his own power and has his own deep dark secrets lurking about, hehe...anyhow loving it cant wait for the next chapter, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From Gwyllion on September 20, 2009
Oh my lordy!!! This was AMAZING! You seriously know how to build up the plot. D8 And with Kabuto stepping into the picture now! *gasps* Something tells me that Orochimaru has a hand int his? Boy...this is so exciting! I can't wait to know what happens next. I hope nothing will happen to my dear June. She's really starting to grow on me. Thanks so much for this continuation!
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From Daydreamer79 on September 20, 2009
And the plot thickens. I really enjoyed the update. Keep up the good work.
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From Calcifer on September 07, 2009
:) Character development!

Keep up the good work!

~Angel
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