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From ANON - Dragon on February 17, 2009
Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!
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From Blackwidina on February 17, 2009
^_^ A new chapter!!! *fangirl squeal*

Poor Sasuke; it's breaking my heart to hear the news about the complex and all as is, I can't imagine what his reaction will be. Sad, mad, indifferent? *cue bated breath*

As for Sai, I'm a huuuuuge fan of Sai, so I'm glad to see him here. And I gotta say, I like the way you wrote him. I know he's damned hard to read, and harder to write, but you've got a great start here. I approve. And I do like how he laid down the law a bit regarding Sasuke. I think Naruto needs that.

I must confess, I'm also dying of curiousity as to what he's up to at the end. Update soon, lest my curiosity cause my head to burst!
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From LadyWolf on February 16, 2009
Ok I just read all the chapters and I just can't wait to read more! I can't believe the old broad bulldozed the teme's home! AND a 'kill on site' order too??? WTF!!!

Maybe Sai is Jealous that Sasuke is holding Naruto's attention...maybe that's why he dislikes him...

Post soon!!!
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From goodchaos on February 16, 2009
Poor SasUKE! Sai better not go back on his promise!! DX
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From ANON - samuraiSaaya on February 16, 2009
Ack!! Cliffie! Sai is so jealous over the place Sasuke has in Naruto's heart. And I actually cried when the Uchiha district was being torn down. So sad.

Excellent chapter! Please update soon ^^
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From sangohoushi on February 16, 2009
oh
my
god

you have kept me waiting for so long...this doesnt classify as an update woman!! (u r a chick, right?)
not the point...

PLEASE update soon.... this story is really good and hilarious and...just awesome

*CHIBI Sango offers cookies as bribe*
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From Blackwidina on February 11, 2009
I absolutely love this story. I especially how you took a premise that could be considered somewhat cliche and made it feel completely real-the whole time I've been reading Sasuke's parts, I've actually FELT like I was as small as he, with all the problems inherent. Hell, 'Indian in the Cupboard' didn't evoke this empathic a reaction.

I really hope you continue this, especially now that Sai's shown up! ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on February 04, 2009
Chapter Five: That�s . . . a little odd. I�d apologize first. Surely Sakura would know that much. ____ Say, how old are the characters now? ____ It might be worth hurting her if he wants to keep Sasuke safe. Not wishing that out of malice towards Sakura, just thinking of priorities. ____ Heh�guess Sakura�s feeling awkward about it too. At least she�s trying. ____ �Subculture of Konoha?� Interesting. ____ Hopefully Hinata won�t think to have to use her Byakugan around here. It could be bad if she spied Sasuke. ____ Whoa, seriously? Neji? I can kind of see that. . . . Nice description about how the sentence �seemed to explode into being between Naruto and Sakura.� Really good. =) ____ Is Neji gay? Or is it part of the subculture and doesn�t have any relation towards sexuality? (Though he�s probably gay anyway.) ____ Geez, what happened? Who overreacted to Naruto�s understandable and innocent question? ____ Did they both hit him?? o.o ____ Love the sudden fear for Sasuke when he spotted the situation. ____ So . . . is Hinata worried for her cousin or is she angry? ____ Boy, this�ll definitely freak out Sakura and Hinata. ____ (*SIGH*) Thank GOD Sasuke�s okay. ____ Crap. Tell me the rat�s not diseased. (*worried*) ____ Crash? The dollhouse? And what are Sakura and Hinata doing right now? ____ Nice description of how scary Ami can be when in action. I doubt I�ll have nightmares, but it�s a possibility. (*huddles*) ____ That must feel very weird to have Sasuke climbing up his leg like that. (*shivers*) But amusing, nevertheless. =) ____ Huh? �Put us down?� ____ Oh. I forgot that Naruto lifted the couch. I didn�t know the girls were still on it. (*sweat*) ____ Boy. If I were Sakura, I�d be upset too, but she�s taking it just a little overboard. ____ Go for the latter, Naruto. You could tell her gently, and Ami might still have the body of the rat as proof. ____ Hmm, the indignity. Interesting paragraph about that. ____ Okay, now Sakura�s being more overboard. ____ Warning Sakura ahead of time or not, I still would�ve thought that Sakura would�ve been extremely upset over the pronouncement about Sasuke. Even if she had moved on with her life, surely she�d still feel worried. Unless Sasuke did something like kill Naruto or Kakashi or something. ____ Love Naruto�s sudden view of Sakura as a potential threat. ____ I wonder how Sasuke�s feeling, being stuck next to Naruto�s thigh. =) ____ I doubt Sakura would turn Naruto in; he means too much to her. Even in a fit of anger like in this scene, I doubt she�d do it. ____ Lol. �Sasuke so owes me!� Hopefully they�ll work it out. Sasuke�s probably pissed at being thrown under the couch and the experience under there. ____ GEEZ! O.O I hope Sasuke�s okay! (*flail*) ____ Yeah, Sakura�s an alpha. That �Come on, Hinata!� indicates it. Though we probably didn�t need that to tell us she was an alpha. ____ Owwwch, that�s gotta hurt. >.< ____ Wait. From Naruto�s . . . crotch? =O . . . Oh boy. Oh boy. Oh boy. ____ Oh boy, let�s hope Sakura and Hinata don�t see his crotch moving. They�ll come to the wrong conclusion. ____ Hang on, I thought Hinata was still in the room. When she said, �But what about Naruto-kun?� ____ Straddling? I like where this is going. >D ____ Boy, talk about an awkward situation. XD Is Sasuke even aware of what he�s sitting on? ____ This is very bizarre, but you�re making this scene really good. I didn�t think anything like this would actually happen while Sasuke was in his current state, but this is coming out a lot better than I would�ve suspected. ____ AHAHA! �He�s a dude and we don�t like dicks!� XDDD ____ Why doesn�t he just tell Sasuke to get off of him? =D ____ Lol, �He�s gotta be so grossed out.� I like that view. It really makes you wonder how a straight guy would be feeling in Sasuke�s situation. ____ OWWWWCH! GEEZ! DX ____ Oh. So that�s why Sasuke was so anxious for Naruto to move. Good. I like that. It adds more to the situation than just sexual tension. ____ Aww, he doesn�t really hate him. ____ Cute. Love Sasuke�s response to when Naruto says he hates him. =) ____ I�d say both Sakura and Sasuke owe him.
�Capitulate,� cool. I think I learned a new word. ^^ ____ Love the numbered miracles. ____ It�s funny. This is maybe the second time we�ve heard the line, �Once he was his normal size again, Sasuke was [something] a long, long [something else].� And maybe now would be a good time for Naruto to mention Sasuke�s status in Konoha. ____ This is sweet, seeing Sasuke caring for Naruto. It goes both ways now. =) ____ Ooh, specific number: 197 times. Was that just on Naruto, or had Sasuke seen it all the time? ____ Heh�Sasuke�s ego. ____ More likely the stimulation came from both Sasuke�s actions and Naruto�s feelings. ____ Cool, how Sasuke plans to seduce Naruto with his feelings. ♥ ____ (*snicker*) Pun intended on �he�d been given an inch�? ____ UH�OH. Sai enters the picture. This just keeps getting better! =D

Yay, this story is so cool! Can�t wait to read more! ♥ =D
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From ANON - Anon on February 04, 2009
Chapter Four: D�aww, Sasuke fell asleep in Naruto�s pocket. ♥ ____ I wonder if Sasuke�s going to eventually use the bed in the dollhouse or if he�s going to continue to sleep in the pocket. ____ I wonder if the heartbeat turned soothing later. ____ Spider?? >.< (*hides*) I�m arachnophobia. ____ (*groan*) A friend of Naruto�s. T__T ____ Ahahahaha, that scared �em! XD (And woke up Sasuke in the process, I�d wager.) ____ Oh, Hinata�s here, too! =) ____ (*wince*) Might want to stay out of hitting range while you�ve got Sasuke on you, Naruto. ____ I wonder if Ami can talk. She seems to be a pretty intelligent spider. ____ (*shiver*) I�d take rats over spiders any day. T__T ____ Sasuke�s staying hidden in the pocket, isn�t he? Out of sight of Sakura and Hinata? And I�m trying to figure out his thoughts when it says his �jaw dropped� and he �glared with an intensity usually only seen in governing celestial bodies.� My guess is he�s thinking, �There are RATS here??� or, �You�ve got a HUGE SPIDER around here??� or both. ____ Hmm, maybe I wouldn�t like those kinds of rats. They could be a problem. And all the worse if they carry diseases and aren�t shy around people (which they usually aren�t, one way or another). ____ Lol, Sasuke pinched Naruto�s nipple in retaliation! XD ____ Uh-oh. Good question. ____ I guess it is a curious enough question to ask and not too personal. ____ Boy, that�s a tough one. Good luck getting out of it, Naruto. ____ Ouch.
Heheh, Sasuke�s checking him out again. ♥ ____ Nice physical description of Naruto. ____ Eww, gross. Did NOT need that visualization of Ami�s breakfast (though it�s a good one). x_x ____ Heh. But Sasuke�s connection to people eating and watching TV was funny. ^^ ____ Lol, �A very bad feeling settled in the pit of the brunet�s stomach as he watched Naruto tug at the material . . .� Love that feeling of delightful dread. ♥ ____ Oooh, love how Sasuke looks deeper into the situation. I didn�t expect that. =D ____ Heh�nice response, Sasuke. ____ �And anyone who thinks otherwise will have a chat with my fist!� Including Sakura and Hinata? Or is he just ranting? ____ Aww, poor Sasuke. �_� Hopefully Naruto�ll change that view a little bit as the story progresses. ____ I don�t get the winking part. (*confused*) ?_? ____ (*snort*) �And your bare butt isn�t getting anywhere near my couch cushions.� As funny as that line is, I wonder if Sasuke might feel a little regretful at the truth of that statement. ____ Suffering from a broken heart? ____ You know, I�m surprised that Sasuke hasn�t had any issues with Ami trying to eat him or something. ____ �All the color was suddenly gone.� Good line. I think I heard something once that that sort of happens to some people when they get really depressed. ____ Nice analogy about the orbit. =D ____ (*snicker*) �I have a natural ability to tune out stupidity.� ^^ And I�ll bet Sasuke�s a wiz at hiding his real feelings. He masks them all the time. ____ That doesn�t surprise me if Naruto can�t sense him. That stuff about sensing one�s chakra in fanfiction might be a little inaccurate if you ask me (which I�m sure you didn�t). I think only a few ninja can do it, thanks to certain abilities; Karin�s radar, Kakashi�s and Kiba�s noses, Shino�s bugs . . . those sorts of things. Maybe Naruto could do some detection if it comes to the Kyuubi�s power, but otherwise I�m not sure. As it is, it might be hard to sense someone when they�re only six inches tall. Unless, of course, that makes you hyper-aware of him. ____ Naruto can hear his heart beating? That�s cool. ____ Awesome, a doll ANBU uniform. =D ____ Lol, �What the hell, dobe?� indeed. ____ Heh�good line: �Meet your stand-in.� ____ Nice forethought on Naruto�s part. I wonder what he was thinking/feeling when he was out buying all this stuff. And it�s clever how the ANBU doll is �camouflage�. They do that sort of thing in real life (for the characters). ____ Naruto still needs to tell Sasuke about his status in Konoha. ____ �He�d become such a coward over the last two weeks.� Good line, even if it�s not really true. I�d be hyper-sensitive myself if I was in his situation, ninja or not. ____ Love the bittersweetness of the idea of Sasuke being stuck like that for a while. ____ �Throwing him under the couch?� YEESH, that�s dangerous! o_o; ____ Sasuke can�t use his Sharingan at all? I doubt they�d help much, but they might. ____ Oh, jeez. That�s scary. ____ Well, maybe Ami will solve it soon. (*shiver*) What a cliffhanger!
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From ANON - Anon on February 04, 2009
Chapter Three: Hahaha, Sasuke took a slice of Naruto�s clothing. >D ____ Naruto in blue. Hard for me to picture. I�m so used to seeing him in orange. But it might make sense. ____ Haha, Sasuke just wants to OWN HIM. XD ____ Boy, aroused from that thought . . . doesn�t take much, does it. =) ____ Lol, Naruto�s remark. �Some assembly required. I hate it when they say that.� I can hear him and see him when he mutters that. =D ____ Heh. And what does Naruto think of being used to rock-climb? ____ Grr, kill the dollhouse! ____ Sasuke can be one hell of a whiner when he wants to be.
Well, white is better than girly colors and design. ____ Hah, Sasuke thinks the dollhouse is cool. ^^ ____ Oops: �At least that�s what he hopped.� You just want one �p� in that. But anyways, I have mixed feelings on the jutsu wearing off. What�ll Sasuke do when it does? He can�t stay here. And what�ll Naruto do? ____ Hehehe, nice one-way exchange here. � �They were too flimsy. I was afraid they would collapse on you.� Oh.� ____ Naruto�s got questions, I know. He�s going to ask them eventually, right? ____ Naruto�s seen the kind of bed Sasuke slept in? ____ Heh, Naruto seems to be having fun. ____ Ouch, that Velcro�s going to be uncomfortable. ____ Man, this is great! �normal shops don�t carry size �Extra Teeny Weenie!� There is no �shrunk ninja� section for gear of weapons or food!� XD ____ Strange. I can almost hear Sasuke apologizing that way, too. Nice. ____ (*snicker*) The idea of Sasuke flashing Naruto. ^^ ____ Ahhhhh (*BLUSH*) Love Sasuke�s goal for when he gets normal-sized. >_> ____ LMAO!! Good one! �I�m afraid I might see that stick up your ass and never be able to forget the sight.� XDDD ____ Ooh. (*wince*) NICE one, Sasuke. You said the perfect thing. And now that sentence is just going to hang there for awhile. ____ Wow. I wasn�t expecting that. The sudden change in Naruto�s mood. Makes me wonder to what he�s referring to. Is it the reason why Sasuke�s so tense all the time? Or affection? Or what? Hmmm . . . (*ponder*)
Yikes. Lead. (*shudder*) ____ Another good line: �Naruto had always accused him of being emotionally repressed which, ironically, had always made Sasuke show more emotion.� ____ Hey, do you think you can lengthen your hyphens when indicating a pause in a sentence? They look too much like a way of joining words and it�s a bit confusing to me. Sorry. ____ Wow. Wasn�t expecting that. �_� ____ Nice question of whether it hurt that bad. And I love how Naruto was so deadpan when he asked/clarified it. ^^ ____ Another stupid complaint from me: The usage of �dobe.� Maybe I�m missing something, but I�m sure that Sasuke only called Naruto that in, like, the third and maybe fourth episode/chapter of the manga/anime. And from then on, he stuck with �usuratonkachi�. ____ Oh, come on. Surely Sasuke could use chakra to get down from there.
It�s hard to make Sasuke ugly. Well, okay, people who hate him do a magnificent job of it, but aside from the silly stuff. He does have a natural beauty. =) ____ Usage of �jinchuuriki� so often seems a little harsh, too. (Sorry for all these complaints.) ____ I wonder if Sasuke was more upset at being put on the shelf than having to have shared his feelings. I get the feeling that it would�ve been okay if they had left it at that. ____ I doubt there�s much of a rift. More likely Sasuke�s just sulking it out. ____ Okay, I don�t quite get this: �suddenly annoyed by the fact that he was too tall for the cramped tub, something that had never been a problem before now.� It sounds like it�s saying that Naruto had never been too tall for the tub before now. I don�t get that. �.� ____ Has Naruto asked his questions yet, or is Sasuke mention of �the jutsu will wear off soon� the first he�s heard about it? ____ Ah, here they come. ____ Wow. I liked that, how Naruto persisted with the questions and how Sasuke�s anger slipped and showed how worried he was. ____ Nice, Naruto. He ended the exchange better this time. ____ Heh�Sasuke can probably dry himself. ____ Ah, I take it the PJs have a cute pattern or something? ____ DUCKS!! I�ll take �em!! ♥ ____ Heh�I�ll bet Sasuke was checking him out while Naruto was drying off. ^_^ ____ Heh. Cute. Sasuke riding in Naruto�s pocket. =) ____ Um, I don�t get the last sentence. �The blonde had no idea how right he was.� What�s the joke? �.�
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From ANON - Anon on February 03, 2009
Chapter Two: Lol, the chapter title. ^^
Heh�Naruto snores. Good thing he stayed awake most of the night, though he�s going to have to fix that problem. (God, I hate snoring.) ____ I wonder how long Sasuke�s been traveling to Konoha. ____ Good sentence: �Though he would never admit it aloud, Naruto had taken the whole situation amazingly well in the Uchiha�s estimation.� Aside from �the Uchiha,� the sentence has a nice sound to it. ____ Uh-oh. ____ Lol, �Cursing Naruto�s lack of forethought . . .� He can be amazingly oblivious or prejudiced sometimes. If he looked around and remembered the night, he�d realize that Naruto put a lot of thought into what he was doing. ____ He can probably still run pretty fast when he�s that small. He was amazingly fast when normal-sized. ____ Whoa, good catch. Good reflexes. ____ . . . the hell? He�s still asleep? How�d he do that? �.� ____ Cute, how Sakura cares. Yet I�m annoyed. I�ve got some unfair prejudices of my own, it seems. . . . ____ D�awww, ~~they�re dating~~! I�m still annoyed at it, but it seems kind of cute. ____ Aha, Sasuke�s jealous. =D ____ Ahahahaha, Orochimaru�s got the same problem! I wonder if we�ll run into him later! =DD And I like that image of Sasuke �breathing down the Sannin�s neck for a cure.� I can see it, too. ^^ ____ Actually, I wonder if they�re really dating. If Naruto�s even aware that Sakura might do this from time to time. ____ Nice description about Naruto�s warmth. ____ So Sasuke did come to Naruto for help. Cool. That was fast. ____ Oy, Sakura. Leave the shoebox alone. Not your business. ____ Lol. �Leave!� ^^ ____ Hahaha, �I don�t feel so good.� =D ____ Cute how Sasuke already suffers the symptoms of LOVE. ♥ ____ Hmm. So what are Naruto�s thoughts on Sakura �stopping by,� I wonder? ____ Interesting . . . I wonder if what Naruto�s saying about Sakura is really the case or if he�s missing something. Perhaps she likes him more than he suspects? ____ Yeesh, I hope he gets better. How long before he arrived in Konoha was he bitten? ____ Another good line: �This had not been an option he had considered when debating the manner of his death since he was a shinobi.� ____ Oh yeah, I forgot he was stark naked this entire chapter. >D ____ Another talent, scaring someone with your expression. I know he�s done that with Sai, Suigetsu and Juugo, but still, it�s cool. =) ____ Hehehe, Naruto�s distracted by the thought of Sasuke going about naked. ____ God, this must be torture for Sasuke, having to have nearly everything done for him. ____ You sure it was the seal for Ram that forms the Kage Bunshin? I thought it was a sign separate from the zodiac signs. ____ Cute, Naruto waiting for a wave goodbye. ^^

These are the first reviews I've made since I've gotten back from vacation. What happened to the good old days when you could just cut&paste and press the button? Now I have to go through all this other stuff . . . (*sigh*)
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From ANON - Anon on February 03, 2009
(I review as I read.)

Chapter One: Nice opening line. ____ Sooo . . . snake in the bedroom, Sasuke wielding a katana . . . okay, I�m following. ____ Ah, he�s already little. ____ Lol, Naruto�s thought about �It�s official.� ^^ I�m not sure if I approve of the use of �the blond/blonde,� but I�ll overlook it a little bit. ____ Huh. Family name comes second in this story. I wonder why. ____ �The Uchiha� is another awkward one for me to grasp. I understand the usage, but it doesn�t feel right to me unless it�s referring to the entire clan. And I�m well aware that Sasuke pretty much is the entire clan now, but it still seems awkward to me. Okay. Said it. Back to the story. ____ Yikes. That reflex of Naruto�s might not be a good thing with Sasuke this vulnerable. ____ Lol, the �God-awful purple belt.� Call me odd, but I think it looks good on him. Better on him than on Orochimaru. ____ Poison from the snake? Venom or something else? ____ So close the window, Naruto�unless you want to air out the room, of course. ____ Heh��Even only several inches tall, the Uchiha still managed to look down his nose at the blonde as they stared at one another . . .� That�s quite a talent. =) ____ (*snicker*) Love the silence while Naruto�s trying to process this. ^^ ____ LOL! Naruto�s first comment to Sasuke! XD ____ Lol again, �the urge to reach out and touch Sasuke.� Knowing Sasuke, that�d hurt. ^^ ____ Did he faint? ____ That�s cool about the weight. I take it Sasuke�s pretty damn strong for his size too. Like those ants. I wonder if his chakra�s just as strong as when he was normal-sized. ____ Interesting. ____ Heheh, Naruto tugging Sasuke�s clothes. (Sasuke: �Do you mind?�) ____ Still, wouldn�t that snake bite be large for Sasuke? ____ So Naruto knows some first aid, then? ____ I like that ending line of this scene: �He hadn�t gotten Sasuke back from one snake only to loose him to another, damn it.� (By the way, it�s just one �o� in �lose�. The one you wrote is a synonym for �free�. May want to edit that.)
I hope Naruto�s being careful with Sasuke. It�s not easy to move huge stuff around on a person. ____ Awww, MEAN, Naruto! Don�t burn his clothes, they were cool-looking! D< ____ Cute how Naruto�s happy about Sasuke being back, never mind the state he�s in. ^^ ____ That line, �Sasuke was here and he had come to Naruto for help.� Just hearing that so early gives me this automatic response of, �I doubt it� even if it is the case. Just waiting for the shoe to drop. ____ Aw crap, that sucks about the death penalty to traitors. I understand it, but I hope Sasuke�ll be okay. >.< ____ I take it that Naruto argued heavily against Tsunade�s verdict? ____ So Sasuke�s waking up? ____ You know, I doubt Naruto would need a first aid kit, considering his healing abilities, but maybe he had one around just in case. ____ This story�s so fascinating already! There are so many scenes I�d like to see in fanart! You don�t see this sort of thing a lot! =D ____ So when did Naruto study at the hospital or under Tsunade? I wouldn�t picture him doing this kind of stuff in the manga. Not that I�m complaining, just observing. ____ So what�s Sasuke going to wear since his Sound uniform is gone? ____ Heh�Naruto trying to find all the shuriken. That must be annoying. ^^ ____ It�s cute how much Naruto�s caring for Sasuke. I doubt he�ll get much outward gratitude, but tough�it�s the thought that counts. ♥ ____ I gotta say, Naruto�s handling this better than I would�ve guessed. ____ He�s going to be tired tomorrow.

This is a cool story! I hope, I REALLY hope it doesn�t get abandoned; that it gets finished in the future. It�s too entertaining, and not many people could write about this situation so well and not make it look cheesy. So far, I�m greatly entertained. =D I haven�t read any of your other stories (yet), so I can�t say for them, but this is one I�d really like to see finished sometime.
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From ANON - Jazzy on January 22, 2009
I really loved your story it's incredible and adorable and I just can't believe you leave us hanging there with Sai in the bathroom. Oh please oh please don't stop writing this story its really great.
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From ANON - riddlestar on January 11, 2009
im so glad i found your story.. i loved each and every chapter. not only is it well written, but it is also funny and i love the tension between the two. i look fwd to the next chapter~
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From missbri88 on January 10, 2009
Oh goodie!!! ^^ This is the first Naru/Sasu story that I've seen with this idea. Its refreashing and new and I think Im in love! lol. I like the sister/brotherly relationship between Sakura and Naruto and them seeing him go doll shopping was priceless. I cant wait to see more of this. Thanks.
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