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Reviews for To Protect and To Serve

By : tinkerbell0908
  • From missbri88 on December 28, 2008
    Aww that was teh awesomest!!! I loved it!!! ^^
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  • From missbri88 on December 26, 2008
    HEEEEEYYYY!!!! The chapter's messed up!!! HURRY HURRY!!! You have to fix it quickly!!! PLEEEEEAAASEEE
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  • From on November 09, 2008
    Wow, naru took that nicely.And the seme naruto is nice. Im curious to see how naruto's last amounts of time undercover are going to go...and if Sasuke will stay clean from Naruto's efforts. Nice job, keep it up.
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  • From on November 02, 2008
    Holy shit, I didn't realize this was updated for so many chapters! I feel stupid, but got to read a ton in one go. The story is going along so great and now they have confessed to each other. The drama is unfolding too...shit I can't wait for the next chapter.
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  • From ChibiJubjub on September 19, 2008
    OMG! i got to chap 12 and was so dissapointed when there we no chap 13.
    OMG please update this soon, i really like it,. its structured a bit weird, and i sometimes had difficulty in understanding who was speaking but i have been reading non stop for college work so maybe thats just me.
    I LOVE THIS and hope you update it soon, and then do a sequel.
    the smex was hot and panicking and then super seme sasuke was so amazing and hatake as an alchi and iruka as a gang person. inspired choices.

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  • From on September 15, 2008
    Your story is awesome. I like it a lot, and the two different worlds and how they intertwine are great. I also like how Sasuke isn't so good in this one. The tagging and meth make it more real...did chapter 12 cut off? It has your intro and then -Sasuke- and then that's it. Hope to see it up soon. ~SangoStar
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  • From Jiro on August 16, 2008
    Ok, I have to say it: I'm sooo confused about the rating for this story. The low review count doesn't really faze me much, because that's always seemed like a crap shoot to me (really good stories can have few reviews and horrible oh-my-God-are-you-even-literate? stories can have a ton). But the thing about AFF is the star/plus ranking. Only really shitty stories seem to get below a 5, and I think this one has only 4. You're an outlier then, obviously. I was going to skip this story all together but you had proper grammar in the title and the summary (better than average since even I'm inclined to say :"to protect & serve" even though that's not technically correct). So I guess what I'm trying to say is: this story is great and very well written. Some people are assholes and either didn't bother to read it before ranking due to the format, or because they don't know good writing when it slaps them in the face. Thanks for posting.
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  • From setsue on July 10, 2008
    "Now, I want you to lay on the bed and pretend your feet Hate eachother!!" *in thick hispanic accent*

    love it so far, keep up th good work!!
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  • From Management on June 28, 2008
    Yay!!! You've made it longer!!!!
    so happy.
    Poor Sasuke has no idea what he's dealing with. Or maybe he does...
    Nevermind.
    Well, waiting for the next chapter!!!
    XD LANE
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  • From Management on June 21, 2008
    Oooh, that was disapointing. And yes, I know it's not finished, but still.
    Please update soon, your story really is awesome.
    And I really don't think that you need a betta. Seriously, you write really well, and there was only one tiny mistake in that part so...
    Well, write more soon please!!!
    LANE
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  • From Management on May 20, 2008
    And they meet!!!
    Good whapter... I can't wait to see the next one!
    Please update soon! (this is becoming very interesting indeed)
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  • From Management on May 16, 2008
    Hey, I liked the chapter. I think that your grammar is fine as it is. It's a bit weird having everything in the present tense, but it makes the story interesting, and original, in my opinion.
    One thing you might like to do though, is make a heading telling us that it's either naruto or Sasuke, because, the change was a little bit confusing. :)
    Other than that, awesome story.
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  • From Aikotina on May 14, 2008
    To make seperate paragraphs; you need to hit the enter button twice. i think this story will turn out okay; but the grammer is really hard to follow. it sounds like it could be good; try having someone read it after you; or read it out loud to yourself; thats what helps me. i read it outloud to someone else. haha.
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  • From dkf on May 14, 2008
    I like her name ^^
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  • From Halskr on May 13, 2008
    A very nice start with lots of background information. The paragraph structure could use some work on chapter two. It is one big chapter. It will be interesting to see where this goes. Thanks for writing and sharing this.
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