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By : Aikotina

From lara5170 on September 17, 2015
I really hope this story is continued but I don't know how old this story is.
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From MiraMira on December 18, 2008
I love this story so far! I read your Konoha High fic and now this one and I absolutely adore your writing style. If you don't already have people scratching at the door to be your beta, I'd love to beta any and all of your stories. Let me know whether or not you already have someone. My e-mail's keitaros_kero_neko at yahoo dot com. Please put AFF or Beta or something in subject so that I know it isn't spam.

May the yaoi-muse be with you!!
Miranda
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From serenagold on August 09, 2008
Personally, I'm in full favor of castration for punishment of rape. Rape is, quite possibly, one of the worst things out there that can be done to a person. That said, I have developed this strange addiction to reading stories involving the story. There are so many more emotional levels that go down and are damaged and in need of repair in such stories, don't you agree?

That said, I really loved this chapter. Kakashi is such a tool. I can only assume his excuse will be to Naruto that he only kissed Sasuke to rile him up-- but that jerk is really nothing more than an opportunistic pervert! As always, Itachi is evil. That kiss with Kyuubi though? Omg, that was freaking awesome!!

Keep up the great work! ^^
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From on August 09, 2008
I'm so addicted to this! Glad there's an update! So many people want to get a piece of Sasuke. And I like most pairings! My dirty mind is going wild. I feel sorry for the poor kid, though. He's going through a hard time and his brother is being a dick.

I love the way Naruto flaunts how close he is to Sasuke in front of Itachi. It's hilarious. Pwned.
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From Lucia on August 08, 2008
Oh... my.... I... Love... I... ahhh... -faints-
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-JUMPS BACK!
OH MY GODS I LOVE THIS STORY SO VERY MUCH!!!!!!!!!! xD
This new chapter was FANTASTIC!.... hell! It practically has all my favourite things: protective Shika (and Kakashi, and Gaara, and Naruto, and Sasori xD), vulnerable Sasuke, and so much Kyuubi semxyness! ^________^
I hope he doesn't think that Sasuke was rejecting him =( ......'cause I get the feeling it was FAR from it ^w^
And YAY!!!! >w< Kakashi pecked Sasuke.... on the lips.... -drools- .... bad Kashi-chan, making Naruto jealous on propous xD... and getting personal profit out of it as well ^.^
And belive me, I couldn't stop smiling through all the "I trust you all with my life" little speech Sasuke threw there to the little demons and their happy-hosts =3 Mad-tackling Naruto and blushing Gaara REALLY made my day xD ....hope to see more of this "situations" later on *wink wink, nudge nudge* o.O
Oh, and before finishing, I ABSOLUTELY LOVED THE LAST WORD. ...."Snap"... Gods I'm STILL shivering with the implications O.O
And in a more lighter note, I'm so GLAD you're back ^______________________________________^ I was SERIOUSLY missing reading your stories ;D
Can't wait to see more! =)
JA NE!
PS: NOW I can give in to the seizure caused by reading this ABSOLUTELY FANTABULOUS chapter!!!!!! (and with very LITTLE chocolate in my sistem) -seizure- xD
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From mikepd87 on July 22, 2008
hey sorry took so long to review but i was gone 4 the past few days so i copied ur story and printed it to read....I cudn't stop readin i luved the smut scene with Naruto and Sasuke at the park and Sasori was funny as well but so far i luv the story and its plot cant wait to read the rest
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From serenagold on June 05, 2008
Woo hoo! Itachi's obsessive and overprotective anger will now be redirected on to Neji for a while and Naruto and Sasuke will be slightly free-er to develop their relationship! (Although potential rape sets things back, then again, Naruto scores points for the rescue... hmm... thems be some tricky math!) Poor Sasuke. He's just going from one uke cliche to the next! (Not that I care... this story is AWESOME!
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From Lucia on June 04, 2008
Yay!!!!!!!!! ^_______________________________^

So the furry little tenants were find out! xD And not only by Sasu-chan, but aparently Orochimaru knows about them as well..... gods! The outcomes this could bring ALL sounds de-li-cious! ^w^
Can't wait for the little raven to tell Gaara and Naruto that everything's all right.... I'm sniffing here just thinking about the thoughts those two will have that night T-T Don't let them fall in depression Sasu-chan!!!!

And speaking about Sasu-chan... It was about time he got glomped! *nods* He has been too cute not to, and well, it just HAD to be Kakashi, and in front of Naruto ^.^ Wonder who'll be next xD
Let's just hope that Kashi-chan doesn't get ignored again, God knows what he'll do to Sasu-kun.... But, of course, thinking it better... maybe, just MAYBE, he could get ignored again.... ne? *wink wink, nudge nudge* xD

So, now Sasori will take care of the "blond-menace"... though I'm a little confused abot his role in all of this.... he seems to act a "tinny" bit out of Itachi's plans... wonder if he has plans of his own.... ��
Anyways, Juugo's still beeing a pain and we're getting a deeper insight with Tachi's obsession...
Is it just me, or have his thoughts turned a little more "darker" with each passing chapter? o.O
And what about Pein??!!??!! Gods, these are wheels inside of wheels inside of more wheels.... And I'm a wheel whore! xD No no, seriously, I LOVE what you're doing with this ;D

Oh, and before I forget.... POOR SASU-CHAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm crying here for you baby, I'm crying! Don't let what that girly-man-whore (Neji) did to you ruin your beautiful romance!!!!!! T___________T Besides, If it gets ruined, you'll miss the big kick ass he's sure to recive from a VERY large group of pissed (pervy and/or protective) people!!!! ^w^ So, don't you worry!
*sigh* I just really hope he doesn't shy away from human contact.... what would be of the SMEXYNESS!!!!!!
And speaking of smexyness... wonder if some day Sasuke and Kyuu-chan will have a nice conversation.... and Shuu-kun as well, he's too cute to be let out... and a little homicidal, so... better not forget about him :3

Hope see you soon (be it here, or with that other grandious [and delicious] new story you're making ;D)
Ja nE!!!!
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From goodchaos on June 04, 2008
WOW!!!
I don't know when, I don't know whom or who, but I hope Neji dies in the worst way possible >D Mwahahaha!
I LOVE this fic! Keep up the great work!
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From on June 03, 2008
Poor Sasuke. Never thought Neji would take it that far. O_o. At least he's okay, well physically, I don't think he's alright in the head now. If Itachi finds out there will be hell to pay, and not just for Neji. Thanks for updating even though life is getting in the way =p
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From Management on June 03, 2008
YAAAAAYYY!!!
Good chapter. And for having been in an accident, I have to say that you write very well in such situations...
Kyu and Shuu... HOW SWEEEEEET!!! The little wittle bably demons -coos-!!!
-Now running away to save my life-
I'm sure that by the time you write your next chapter, I'll have lost them.
So, please update soon!!!
And Neji is a real bastard... What's Gaara going to do now? Naruto must have realized that he really likes suke by now...
And Itachi... Well, it he does anything near what Neji did (or tried to do) He's going to have a serious problem on his hands... Well, three. No wait. Five. Two angred demons. Two Raving hosts. And one very very upset raped baby brother...
I wish him, and you good luck!
XD LANE
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From on May 28, 2008
I think the new story idea sounds really cool. Everyone really does need some Sasuke loving.

As for this story, I'm not sure why the hell it doesn't have more reviews! It's fantastic. I'm hardly interested in stories where there isn't sex right off the bat. It has to be good to keep me into it. It's interesting how everyone wants Sasuke. I like possessive Naruto and Itachi. Although I wonder if Sasuke will be getting into any trouble with the other boys? All of them seem so hot XD. I'd like to see him with all of them if only for a night or so because I'm a pervert! And no I'm not asking you to do that, I am just airing my perverted thoughts lol! Me and Kakashi would be best friends. Anyway please continue this story. It's fabulous.
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From serenagold on May 27, 2008
I'm for anything that's NaruSasu... although making Sasuke into the ultimate innocent uke just looses all his bastard charm. Its an interesting premise though, I'll give you that.

Excellent chapter. Keep up the good work!
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From Lucia on May 27, 2008
Oh Dear..... *covers heated face with hands*

Have you made it a personal goal to make your readers squeal and drool constantly while reading your fics? 'cause if you have, you're doing a helluva good job ^_____________^

a VERY AWESOME chapter! I tell you! =D

The smut? SEXY..... *thus the drool*
The drama? Hawt! ^w^ Juugo was just what Naru-chan needed to release his possesive side... more of what it already was xD
And Gods! Kyuu-chan was so close to be discovered..... Gods how I want him to be discovered!!!! And Shuka-kun as well! it will make things go SPICY belive it!!! [sorry about the more-than-usual hyperactivness, I've ahave a relatively good day, plus a nice bar of my favourite chocolate, and a big nice steamy cup of capuccino a la Italiana, which has cream, cinammon and more chocolate xD]

So, Orochimaru is in the scene!!!! O.O THAT will surely bring up the DRAMA and TENISON! Can't wait to see what schemes he has planned for our little raven ^.^
And speaking of little ravens... I was wondering, if his relationship with Gaara will develop more in the sentimental aspect (not romantic, just sentimental)... you know, as if they have a nice heart to heart chat, concerninng some of red's past... things like that... that will strenght their bond... and Naru-ckan and Kyuu-chan's jealousy and overprotectivness xD ...and of course, why not, also blow Itachi's top ;D

Anyways, I'm sure that whatever you decide to come up with will have me hooked in the first two lines ^____^
Hope see you soon
Ja nE!!

BTW, about seeing soon.... I REALLY liked the idea about the AU story mentioned in the final author note.... Sounds very... yummy xD If you decide to make it, you have a SURE reader here with me :3
Now yes, see ya!!
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From Management on May 26, 2008
I hope that you aren't trying to tell us that Sasuke isn't the 'epitome of innocence' as you call it in this story. I mean seriously.
But yeah, I like the idea. And I'm wondering what kind of experiments. Although the teacher is rather obvious...

You should really watch/read shipuuden though. It is actually good. Alot better than the first act or whatever yo want to call it.
And in case no one has told you this before, a beta is a person who corrects your work for you. And I'd offer to be yours, but I'm already behind on another story, and personnaly, I think that you don't need one. You make like no mistakes. Seriously, compared to some stories that are filled with typos...

Anyway, I liked the chapter... And I see that Itachi is easing off... And are you going to make karin appear at all, or are you planning on only male acquaintances?
Poor Sasuke... The jealousy is overwhealming him. There was very little Shika in this chapter though... =( So sad.
Oh, and is Sasuke really clueless about Gaara liking him?
Anyway, I can't wait for the next update!
I really love your story. And please put a notice up to say if you've started the other story. I think I'd like to read it.
XD Lane

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