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By : Kurokit
  • From juicycherry on September 11, 2008
    A Friendly Reminder

    Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it wouldn't hurt to include that this story is indeed fiction.

    Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you’re not making any money. You know a ’cover your butt’ thing.

    Also if you have included one of these things it’s not enough. You have to have a full disclaimer. This is not only to protect us but to protect you!

    Feel free to remove this once the problem is corrected. Thanks ^_^
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  • From Onikage on September 11, 2008
    O.O SAKURA'S DEAD!! ... *Conflicted.*

    oh.. I always loved "Suki" For a girl's name.
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  • From WillUMissMe on September 11, 2008
    Boy names: Kanaye, Takumi, Riku
    Girl names: Kaori
    Sorry, but thats all I can think of.
    BTW, I love that you kept Naruto alive!!! I do kinda feel bad for Sakura though, but it will pass.
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  • From serenagold on September 11, 2008
    Gah! I just finished reading chapter 8 and I had to stop and review.

    Its just not possible to have identical twins (twins from one egg) that have two separate fathers. Just not possible. Took me right out of the story!! Fraternal twins? Maybe. I'd be willing to suspend my disbelief and accept fraternal twins with one father being Sasuke and the other Itachi. But you went out of the way to point out only one egg was fertilized and had split into twins. z_z You should really go back and change that. I would normally never tell anyone to change some aspect of their story, but its such a simple change that would keep the story based in reality, relatively speaking.

    I'm going to continue reading and probably review again when I'm done. But I just had to say something. :/
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  • From ANON - Nisha on September 05, 2008
    I just wanted to point out that the proper term for the compound that erases sperm is "Spermicide" and that the proper term for sperm, if you don't want to use that word, is a zygote this being 24 chromosomes (half of the required 48 chromosomes needed to make a living sentiant being) the other 24 chromosomes being provided by the egg. When they merge this forms 48 chromosomes and starts the process of cell devision that will eventually result in the body of the baby.

    Thanks for listening,

    -Nisha
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  • From yolotengo on August 08, 2008
    WOW...i couldn't stop reading this story. The last chapter kinda confused me a bit...but i can't wait for the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - Shinigami24 on August 05, 2008
    Sakura died, but what happened to the baby? PLEASE have her child somehow survive! Last I checked it's NOT the child that is to blame for it's parents's sins/crimes...Does Tsuande know that Sakura's using her chakra to save Naruto would kill her?
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  • From ANON - Nibiki on August 05, 2008
    Well! ::lets out a deep breath:: Damn... Ok so Sakura died trying to save Naruto. Naruto may still die but he's... in a coma or something? Itachi mentioned a child.... Could it be his child with Naruto? He probably could give a shit about Sasuke's child with Naruto. ... ::nods to self:: Yeah, that sounds about right.

    *Awesome* story! Just now read all 12 chapters. Whoa! I'm hooked. Can't wait for your next update. Until then, keep up the great writing. Ja!
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  • From ANON - Kang on August 05, 2008
    So...Sakura died using chakra to save Naruto's life, but Naruto is still hospitalized though, so Shikamaru is acting hokage, and Sakura's funeral is attended by many. I think it's nice that you didn't completely bash Sakura. I don't mind Sakura bashing (she's a jerk), but having a story give her a more realistic range of motivations and use her as more than a plot device of EVIL is always an interesting twist. All that purposeful avoidance of gender specific pronouns and Itachi thinking he was at the funeral of a person he hadn't known revealed your plot twist, lol, but still enjoyable. Or who knows, maybe Naruto's dead and there's no plot twist after all. X) Sasuke is kind of the one getting bashed in this fic, now that I think about it. He does stupid act after stupid act and shoots himself in the foot. Repeatedly. I think he's rather lacking the awkward but undeniable charisma his character has in the manga. Poor Sasuke.
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  • From ItaNarulover on August 05, 2008
    WHAT?! IS NARUTO DEAD!!!??? NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Tell me it isn't true, that would totally destroy the whole story, please don't tell me he died!!! *cries*
    Anyway, I can't tell you how glad I am to see that you're back in action ;P I nearly jumped out of joy when I saw that this fic was updated, cause if you haven't noticed it's my absolut favorite one of all fics here at AFF.
    I hope that this isn't like the last chapter or something. *making teary puppy-eyes and pleading at Dark_Foxy*
    Cause that would make me very sad since this fic is one of my sources to happiness.
    Anyway, ignore that if you're confused, and keep up with the good work and I hope you'll update soon.
    Good luck with the writing. Take care. Hugs

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  • From Fyra on August 05, 2008
    Hey! I think this is my first time reviewing.... well anyways...
    I love your story, and the style you write it.
    I loved the idea of Naruto pregnant and both Itachi and Sasuke were fathers..it was a first time seeing that.
    But to be fully honest... I hated chapter 12.
    I hated that you killed Naurto.
    It's like you worked us up (had me at the edge of my seat) for most of the chapters....then BAM, killed the main character, then soon to be killing off Sasuke. I literally cried.
    What I would have liked to see is how both Itachi and Sasuke would be able to handle a pregnant Naruto, mood swings and weird cravings and all. As well as when the babies are born and how they would be raised....
    Well those are my thoughts, no matter how disappointed I am about chapter 12.... I will continue reading it till the end because I like your style.

    Take care
    -Danya
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  • From ANON - Shadow on August 04, 2008
    ...you know you might get some hate reviews for chapter 12. I'm dearly hoping that it was one of the babies that died and not Naruto. If Naruto did indeed die, then that ending was very anticlimactic and abrupt. I hope you will update the next chapter soon so this confusion may be cleared
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 04, 2008
    NOT
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  • From ANON - tseu_tsumi on July 05, 2008
    No Naruto!!! I can't believe he did that! NOOOO! I hope he's okay. This story is awesome!! I love it. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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  • From on June 24, 2008
    Alright! So many twist it sends chils down my spine....
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