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Reviews for Slaves of the Maelstrom

By : Slyfer101
  • From TheSonofNarutoandSakura on April 24, 2008
    I do hope that the way you are writing Sakura is that she won't become a traitor and then turned into a slave. I think it would be best to have Ino be the one to confront Sasuke when he leaves and convinces him to take her with him. Then she can be captured and Naruto tells Sakura about the whole slave thing. He convinces her to take Ino as her slave in order to save her. Then when he returns from training with Jiraiya, he will have six willing women at his disposal.
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  • From DarthValgaav on April 24, 2008
    good, i like it

    update soon
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  • From KaelHyun on April 24, 2008
    This is a realy good story i hope to read more of it soon
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  • From Coldstone on April 22, 2008
    Well I was sceptical at firstTorturing by Naruto?

    But his form of torturing istn't so bad I think ^^.

    This is one of the best Naruto Fics I read so far here. It is on a similar level as "The Code" or "Vixens and Kitsune" (two of my other favorites).

    I'm eager to read more of this (Well, if Naruto and Hinata will become a couple I would say there will be some REALLY Interesting Scenes between the two AND the three "slaves").
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  • From BlazinAtsuma on April 22, 2008
    I love the story and the plot of it all.... I just hate the changes in it... Well not all of them but I just wanna see more of the fights that happen in the show in your writing... Hope you update soon.
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  • From DragonMan220 on April 20, 2008
    This story is pure awesome! I love it! I like Kin and Tayuya being Naruto's slaves and Hinata taking Temari! I can't wait to see Hinata finally get to have sex with Naruto! I do think if Hinata enjoys sex with Temari that Naruto should use Sexy no Jutsu for her. Plus then all the girls can let Naruto experience what they like the most.
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  • From Chronostorm on April 20, 2008
    Well this is interesting i take it from the BDSM mentions ealier about who ever marries Naruto that Hinata will be into that or at least be a sub to him and i am guessing that Yugito will be brought in with the whole cloud thing and what not well
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  • From firelordeg on April 19, 2008
    wow this was much better than i thout it would be please keep up the fantastic writing and update a.s.a.l.a. = as soon as life allows
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  • From Anonymous7 on April 19, 2008
    Wow. It's rare to find a well-written story on aff.net, especially a lemon. Most authors focus too much on the sex and forget about basic things like grammar. You've not only maintained grammar, you've brought a wonderful, original plotline, and I'm horribly hooked. Naruto's growning as a person (but not in an unbelievable way), Hinata's coming into her own, and you're working in the supporting female cast. Apparently you posted all 5 of these chapters today; I'll be looking forward to more from you in the future!
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  • From Aaronleach45123 on April 19, 2008
    BEST STORY EVER!!!!!! Can't wait for the next chapter so update soon pleace.
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  • From thyrokio on April 19, 2008
    really nice story man
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  • From on April 19, 2008
    Well I have to say I like this story, you got a lot of decent plot going on here with some nice hot scenes in all the right places. It's a unique touch to things and I see you addressed a few things without totally bashing characters (true Kakashi wasn't much of a teacher in part I but he made up for it in part 2 at least)

    I wonder when Naruto and Hinata will get some time together though, I mean both have some sexual experience now so maybe have them go on a date at least ending up back at his place would be nice to see. Plus will Temari also get a little side action as well? I can already see a nice scene with Naruto and all four girls after all with shadow clones he can keep each one satisfied. Will any more girls get put into this little thing going on plus what do all of Naruto's friends think of what's going on with his life now? Another thing that came to me with all the sex what happens if a master gets his slave pregnant? That wasn't covered in the laws that were put down earlier in the story although I get the feeling that will be brought up with the woman that was Naruto's father's slave and I suspect a child they had together that same one that Tsunade is trying to get.

    I'm guess that person is Naruto's half-sibling? But that's just a guess unless I read a few parts wrong.

    Anyways sorry you haven't gotten much in reviews I don't see why it's a good story so I hope you keep it up.
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