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Reviews for When They Choose You

By : REM1985
  • From mysterman10000 on May 15, 2010
    Harem_Lover your a great author. I love your work. But I have to ask, 'are you still alive?' You haven't update anything or left any messages in a long time. If your not going to update anything then I need to make a request. I would like to repost 'When They Choose You' and put it up for adoption. Hopefully somebody who can do it justice will be interested. Please respond.
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  • From nocontact on April 14, 2010
    I love it! The beginning was romantic and adorable, and the second half was kinky and just plain sexy!

    You have a great style to your writing, and the mate thing (also the slightly more perverted submissive thing) has always been some of my favorites. I can't wait to start reading chapter 2, and I really hope you continue afterward.

    ..::(-)::..
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  • From WhiteWhiskey on February 22, 2009
    I LOVE this story, man, and I hope you pick it up again someday.
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  • From Leaprechaun1 on November 14, 2008
    Update soon please!!!
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  • From thmanwithnoname on October 27, 2008
    I like what I've read so far.
    I do hope you keep going, I'm curious as to where you'll take it.
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  • From jrock87 on August 13, 2008
    awsome story i cant wait for the update itll be interesting to see what happens when they go to tsunade's
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  • From Obsession1988 on July 31, 2008
    I must say that you have done a wonderful job with this story thus far. As I have told many other people, one of the things that I pay attention to most in stories are the reactions of the characters to the many different events within the story. With this in mind I must say that you are doing a great job and hope that you keep it up, especially when they confront Tsunade.
    In the first chapter, I found the way that you had both Hinata and Sakura "confess" to Naruto of their love through a letter that had a specialized seal on it. Also the way you had Naruto react to this type of news was done in such a way that he appeared to have matured somewhat over the course of his training. Personally I believe that the type of personality that you have given Naruto overall is a little more than slightly different than the one he has within the anime. However, I have never been a fan of that overly obnoxious personality of his and am very happy that you toned him down quite a bit. I will say though that you might want to make mention of that fact during his meeting with Tsunade. You could have her come out and ask what happened to make him change so much but in response you could have him say that the reason why he did not act out that much right when he got back and read the letters was because of how much of a shock it was to find out the true feeling of both girls. To further explain why he has changed so much you can attribute that to his transformation from the mating saying that the mix of Kyuubi's chakra helped to calm him down some and that he has also forced some of the change on himself as he now has two others that he has to take care of (three if you count Kyuubi).
    The Master/Slave idea was a bit of a surprise as I did not expect that type of change to occur from any type of mating you might have them do. Yet, it did seem to fit and with the help of Kyuubi you explained quite thoroughly how and why that particular change did exactly happen. Speaking of Kyuubi, the way you incorporated "her" into this pairing was by far the most unique way that I have seen it done. I absolutely loved the conflicting thoughts and following dialogue with Naruto and Kyuubi as they (in my opinion) portrayed what happened very realistically given their previous relationship and how the Kyuubi had to adapt rather quickly to the irreversible change that was now brought down upon her.
    The shower scene was also done rather well, by you starting to show some differences between the three of them and did not just write as though they had the exact same changes (such as with their ears and later the texture of their fur). The method in which you had Hinata come to the full realization of what her position now is was somewhat funny as Sakura seemed oblivious to the whole situation seeming to thing that Hinata had already come to the same decision as her and she was only pointing out facts.
    At some point in the story I hope you will show more of how the two girls have changed through how they react with the rest of the male population that dose not consist of Naruto. Two occurrences I personally would like to see is how Hinata will react to any type of advance on her person by Kiba (I'm not particularly a fan of his character so I love it when he gets put in his place), and Sakura with either Kakashi or Lee. With Kakashi you could just have him attempt to order her around during a mission or training in which her reaction will be a little violent in the fact that another male was trying to assume authority over her. When and if you decide to have an encounter with Lee, just have him be his normal oblivious self and end up on the wrong side of Sakura's fist because of it. Oh, I just thought of this. I'm not sure what type of person you are planning on having Hisashi be but it might be interesting to have a small part with him and Hinata and how he reacts to her change.
    Right now before I forget there IS one thing that I wish for you to change or add (which ever you prefer to view it as). Please put in that all three of them henged into their original forms so as not to cause a riot in town looking like foxes on their way to go see Tsunade. That is one of the only things that I found that should be altered in your story.
    Well, hopefully you will update soon, as I really did enjoy reading what you have so far but was somewhat disappointed in the fact that I was not able to read Tsunade's reaction yet. So, I will be periodically checking to see if you update because this story really is worth continuing.

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  • From Cyraxr on May 27, 2008
    Please continue this story I am begging you please continue this story because all of your stories draw me in but this one does it the most to the point I really really want to see where this story goes. I prefer happy endings maybe because I know I will never have one for myself. Signed a fan of Hinata, Tayuya, Anko, Kurenai, Kyuubi, and Temari.
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  • From KaelHyun on May 12, 2008
    This is realy good i hope you make more of it ... i think your makeing to many Angst/Death fics and this is just good it kinda has an apeal to it
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  • From Cyraxr on April 03, 2008
    Really like the story so please update soon. The only bad thing I have to say that has not been said is it is spelled kyuubi not kyubi and that is all I have to say. Signed a fan of Hinata, Tayuya, Anko, Kuernai, and Temari.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 02, 2008
    Wow, this story is so riveting. I can't wait for the next chapter. The faces that Sannin and co. are going to be so hilarious. Please update soon!
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  • From Firebullet19 on March 28, 2008
    I really like this story It's got somethings That I haven't in other Naruto story's the first chapter was really good a few parts made me LOL.
    Thou it might be better if they call Naruto by his name in public and use a Transformation Technique like Tsunade uses to hide the way they look to not freak everyone out. Naruto all ready made the whole town think the fourth hokage had risen from his grave.
    Not to mention what Neji and the rest of the Hyuga Clan think of it's heir now being half demon. Also it will be fun to see what they do when they have to go on missions and can't always be to with the way Sakura and hinata are so depended on Naruto.
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  • From jaybird988 on March 16, 2008
    I like this story and hope you keep on writing.
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  • From animefan29 on March 08, 2008
    I say continue. Unlike a number of stories this is more then just sex, but has some interesting plot developments.
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  • From DragonMan220 on March 06, 2008
    Wonderful second chapter, I love Kyuubi's new look and personality. I hope Naruto can find a way to release her from the seal so she can join her fellow vixens in his bed. But I'd like to suggest the term Pack Sister instead of co-mate, it sounds more primal and fits with the kitsune theme. I can't wait to see Tsunade's reactions to the girls' new looks!
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