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Reviews for In beginning of memories

By : RyuuOokami
  • From ANON - jazzy on January 03, 2009
    Dragonwolf I think your doing a fine job writing in english inspite of a very few mispellings such as a simple one is "putted" actually this is incorrect what you want to spell is "Put away, or he put down the scroll." Put is simply put. Um hopefully this was a little helpful and not damaging to your writing. I like your story idea and want to see where it's all going. ^-^
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  • From animeaddict666 on June 15, 2008
    Hey, good start to a fic. You do a wonderful job, especially for someone who doesn't have English as a first language. Unfortunately, even though the plot device is believable, Naruto being the way he is makes it hard for me to enjoy the story. Sasuke is pretty in character, though I think he might be more annoyed and irritated, at least at Sakura. Keep up the writing!

    Oh, and thanks for your review! It made me smile! *HOBBIT! LOL*
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  • From ANON - Minato [Fye D Wlowright] on May 19, 2008
    i really like the start of this fiction. I hope u update soon, and i also hope that everything turns out to be alright with them (NaruSasuSaku).

    ^^
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  • From Shadi88 on April 30, 2008
    The forth chapter wasn't bad at all, just some grammer correction needed. You've done very well. I enjoy the story. Liked the Forth Ch. best.
    As a suggestion for the next few chapters; if they're not long, why don't you just continue their day together to show how they're getting along and the interaction in between them. You could also have friends visit and have Naruto shown places where there should be some meaning to him; such as his apartment that's always messy, the ramen shop, the academy, you get the idea right? So there you go, I hope it helps.
    Good luck and Best wishes.
    Butterfly Beauty
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  • From Shadi88 on April 29, 2008
    Bravo on the third chapter. Good job, I'm glad for you.
    Hope all goes well in the future for you.
    One more chapter to go, so good luck.
    As well as the best of wishes.
    Butterfly Beauty
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  • From Shadi88 on April 29, 2008
    Good first chapter though you might want to check your grammer a few times you never know when something escapes you.
    Well good luck and best wishes. Off to the next chapters.^_^
    Butterfly Beauty
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  • From Shadi88 on April 29, 2008
    It's all good DragonWolf, liked the prologue.
    now I'm off to read the next chapters.^_^
    Good luck and best wishes.
    Butterfly Beauty
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  • From Firebullet19 on April 04, 2008
    This story is good it let you get in the charters head an almost feel there emotions thou I think the story would be better if it ended up being Saku/Naru and not Sasu/Naru.
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  • From serenagold on March 20, 2008
    one quick fix: "leaved" is not a word. Switch it to "left." ^^


    Anyway, good job with the chapter. I thought you captured the awkward uncomfortableness well. Sasuke seems to have the right idea though about letting Naruto come to him. It kind of reminds me of dealing with a strange animal or cat. Don't make eye contact and let them come to you before you try to interact. Not that I'm implying that Naruto is an animal... or is he? Tsunade seems to be concerned about a possible merger. (hehe)


    Keep up the good work!
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  • From bloodyqueen on March 13, 2008
    That is sooo sad. Naruto, the one I know, is like that? Wow, It must be
    hard for him. I hope they know how to get him back. I like your story
    Hope you update soon.
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  • From ANON - krabbypatties on March 11, 2008
    awsm fic. plz update 4th chapter as soon as possible!!! cant wait!!! xD
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  • From lupin2000 on March 04, 2008
    WOW, great story... cant wait for the next chapter...
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  • From Ladylara on March 03, 2008
    Wow, I love this story. I feel so bad for Naruto. I cant wait to see more.
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  • From solitare1 on March 03, 2008
    This is a really good story so far. I like the way you have grown the team up. I'll be checking back for more of your story.
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  • From ANON - Lanie12777 on February 29, 2008
    Really good story, great beginning, can't wait for more! Update soon!^_^
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