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Reviews for All the Small Things

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From lara5170 on September 09, 2015
The 'Baby's R Us' part was extremely funny and I was dying to figure out who Itachi's girlfriend was & what Neji's part was in this story. I'd also love to find out how Sasuke & Naruto got together, especially since it mentioned how/when Sasuke realized he was in love with Naruto & stated that beforethat they'd been best friends, rivals... && I think there was something else but I can't recall what it is now. What I do recall is that when Itachi was thinking of who 'his' precious person was it was described the same way.
Now I must continue reading because I cant wait to read & find out more..Also, I think it's quite funny that everyone keeps picking on Naruto by calling him the 'Mommy' & when he gets upset over it even though it's goes without saying that how obvious it is that he could never be the 'Mommy'. Even the twins at 3 yrs old know a 'Mommy' has to be female.
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From ANON - Alexdria on February 16, 2010
Ewwwww Itachi and Hinata o.0
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From NarutoVixin on December 26, 2009
normaly i hate anything dealing with Dr.s but this tale was very well done a few miss spelled words here and there but that just brings it together more thank you for being willing to share your talent with those of us that suck at writing
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From fairietayle on May 25, 2009
It's amazing how seamlessly the two of you write together. I'm hard pressed to even remember that there are actually two of you. (Which reminds me, now I have to cross over to ff.net and go read phantomsnow's fics...;) )...And just so you know, Michele, after reading three of your fics in a row, I'm drawing pregnant ladies. My way of expressing a baby fewer that you caused.
Well then, what can I possibly tell you about my feeling towards this piece of art? I loved it. Simply loved it. The plot was straightforward but not predictable, the characters were perfect and I loved the roles and relationships you set them. (Even though it's hard for me to see Hinata as anything more than a mouse or a warm but confident head of clan o.0) I liked the fact that even though Naruto's and Sasuke's relationship was the main focus, you showed us the love between other couples as well. The Uchica clan might be completely bonkers, but I have a feeling that at least it won't be boring to be around them. And now that they have an Uzumaki twist, it might even be nice and fun ;D So I definately loved that. And it was emotional. I shed tears without even realising it.
Words can't possibly express how enjoyably this story alleviated my boredom. I thank you both from the bottom of my black little heart ^-^
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From ANON - Angel on February 01, 2009
Oh gosh! I am gushing - forget fangirl gleeing, more like... like a stupid lovesick puppy!!! I know it's stupid but I sulked like a blubbering idiot at times throughout this!!! I hate how fast I am addicting to these non-canon based stories but I can't help it especially wrapped in fluff, humour, romance, love, angst, drama with a startling splice of life!

Absolutely wicked the mix or is that minx of the Uchihas bwaaaaaaaaaah yes they are insane!!! Oh my goodness I may have run screaming from non Naruto Sasuke lemons but by golly I loved Obito - feisty loony idiotic oblivious - yep totally loveable!

As for my duo oh my gosh - their love in your hands obliterates barriers and I keep coming back for more - so much more!
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From Gwyllion on December 11, 2008
Once again, I fell in love with this fic. I simply cannot get enough of it. PLEASE MORE! Gwyll would offer a limb for a sequel! Thanks so much again for this beautiful and winnerific fic!
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From asm613 on December 10, 2008
What a great proposal.
(((, �All of them are alive. The worse for the wear, but alive.�
More silence. �Are you okay, blondie?�
�He hasn�t woken up yet.)))__Why did you have Naruto say all of them were alive, when at this point Sakura had died?
A couple of word errors: using 'passed' when you meant 'past'. Using 'except' when you meant 'accept'. There were others; but doesn't really take away from the enjoyment of the story. And the story is very enjoyable. I thought Naruto was going to leave the decision to go back to Friday dinners up to Sasuke; because they were his parents. But you had Naruto tell Sasuke they were going back to Friday dinners.
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From asm613 on December 10, 2008
When you wrote that Orochimaru was going to make all Uchia's pay: I thought he was making a virus that would just affect Uchia dna_that's why i wrote that Sasuke and Obito would get sick first__but you had the virus affect everyone. Why would gunmen go only after Asuma and Naruto. Why wouldn't Orochimaru send gunmen to the other Uchia residences?
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From asm613 on December 10, 2008
The Itachi and Hinata in the toy store with the broken penis--very, very funny. Sasuke figuring out the virus with 1 piece of evidence (not really even evidence-just a man saying Orochimaru sends death)_was kind of stretching it. I think only the 2 Uchiai's in the room getting sick (while nobody else did) added up with the revelation the dead man said_would have been a more believable way to come to the conclusion. Loving the tender moments between Sasuke and Naruto. Love the domesticity with the kids. Love Obito's character and his devotion to kakashi. Lots of good things in this story. A few silly things and some hard to believe things. Mostly good though.
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From asm613 on December 09, 2008
You've missed something so obvious. Doctors in a hospital always know they need proof in sexual assaults (rape kits and the such). And lawyers especially know the importance of evidence. You didn't have anybody photograph and/or document the bite marks on Sasuke's shoulder. Was that on purpose-so they wouldn't have any proof? It would be hard to justify that with the intelligence all the people concerned have. Especially the administrator (Tsunade) would want and demand proof so that Orochimaru couldn't counter sue the hospital. I love the family you've made with the 3 year old twins and Sasu/Naru_and the daddy/mommy is cute. I also don't understand how your main characters could justify letting Orochimaru go on sexually assaulting with body or talk; just because they thought he was important to the hospital. They were willing to put the physical and emotional well being of other probable victims as less important than the financials of the hospital. They seem to have to much character and care for their loved ones too much to be willing to risk them being exposed to Orochimaru. Sasuke never thought that Naruto might be a victim before Naruto brought it up to him_the way you have Sasuke constantly thinking about how much he loves Naruto and how much naruto means to him and all that other mushy stuff__it seems that he would think of doing anything possible to protect his Dobe from any perceived threats_and that he didn't think Naruto could have been a victim until Naruto mentioned it seemed unlikely.
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From asm613 on December 09, 2008
See what happens when Sasuke doesn't report things like this earlier. Does he think his Dobe will be safe from Orochimaru if he can't even protect himself. He should file a formal complaint now_he has proof with the bite marks and the dna--proof that Orochimaru has sexually assaulted him and who knows how many others in the past and how many in danger in the future.
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From Ikippiki on November 19, 2008
I just love the Uchiha family in this story! The way the act and think is just priceless!
Poor Naruto, his masculinity was questionned throughout the story, but what makes some cry make others laugh lol.
I also find the twins adorable! And Obito is really well imagined. The only thing I felt was lacking was some Gaara/Neiji... hehe I love that pair!

Thanks for the great story, there is not enough of them on the net!
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From goodluckbadtimes on October 23, 2008
god
i love this story so much i can't even describe it!!!
I finally finished it today and i was sad but happy at the same time.
The part in the airplane where Sasuke and Naruto were caught in the bathroom, hilarious!
there were some parts where i cried like a baby this story is full of so many emotions i love it love it!!

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From on October 14, 2008
I. Am. Addicted to this story. I would have complemented the two of you, no wait. Praiseed the very air you both breathe, on every one of preceding fantastically long chapter, but sadly I could not *cries* the next chapter button was too tempting. It was like "click me, click me".
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From ANON - rei on September 10, 2008
haha! that was great! ending with the rain just like the first chap
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